Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 질문에 직접 답한 점은 좋지만, ‘quiet outgoing person’은 서로 반대되는 의미라서 하나를 선택해야 합니다. 또한 과거 경험이므로 ‘when I go’가 아니라 ‘when I went’를 사용하세요. ‘going for a learn’은 자연스럽지 않으므로 ‘going for a walk’로 수정해야 합니다. 답변은 주제문, 구체적인 활동, 그 활동을 좋아한 이유의 순서로 2~3문장으로 정리하면 더 효과적입니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I was quite active as a child, so I often went to the park to ride my bike or go for a walk. I especially enjoyed spending time outdoors with my friends.

Gợi ý: 현재의 습관을 설명하려는 시도는 좋지만, 같은 내용이 반복되고 공원 이름과 마지막 문장이 불분명합니다. ‘beautiful scenery’는 셀 수 없는 명사이므로 ‘beautiful scenery’ 또는 ‘many beautiful views’라고 해야 하며, ‘I enjoy my bike’는 ‘I enjoy riding my bike’로 표현하세요. 가장 좋아하는 공원의 위치나 그곳에서 하는 활동을 구체적으로 한 가지 추가하면 답변이 더 자연스럽고 설득력 있어집니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I still visit parks when I have free time, especially Hangang Park in Seoul. It has beautiful views, and I enjoy riding my bike along the river because it helps me relax.

Gợi ý: ‘more of the variable park’와 ‘natural sin’은 의미가 불분명하므로 ‘more diverse parks’와 ‘nature’ 또는 ‘natural scenery’처럼 정확한 표현을 사용해야 합니다. 또한 ‘I live in Seoul’ 뒤에는 연결어를 넣어 문장을 나누고, 서울에 이미 공원이 많다는 점과 더 필요한 공원의 종류를 비교해 설명하세요. 예를 들어 주거 지역의 작은 공원이나 어린이용 공원을 언급하면 내용이 구체적입니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would. Although Seoul already has many parks, I would like to see more small neighborhood parks. They would give residents a convenient place to relax, exercise, and enjoy nature without traveling far.

Gợi ý: 방문하고 싶은 장소를 말했지만 공원 이름, 국가, 문장이 서로 혼동됩니다. ‘if I have some enough time’은 ‘if I have enough time’으로, 미래 계획은 ‘I will go’ 또는 ‘I’d like to visit’으로 표현하세요. ‘very very big’과 ‘in part of my part of the world’처럼 반복되거나 부자연스러운 표현은 피하고, 그 공원에 가고 싶은 이유를 한 가지 구체적으로 설명하면 좋습니다.

Ví dụ: Yes. I’d like to visit Central Park in New York in the future. I’ve heard that it is a huge and famous park in the middle of the city, and I’d love to walk around it and see its beautiful scenery.

× When I was younger, I was a very quiet, outgoing person, so I enjoyed going to the park. When I go into the park, I usually enjoyed riding a bike or going for a learn.

✓ When I was younger, I was a very quiet, outgoing person, so I enjoyed going to the park. When I went to the park, I usually enjoyed riding a bike or going for a learn.

The answer describes a past habit, so go should be changed to the past-tense form went. Keep the verb tense consistent when talking about childhood experiences.

× Kang is my favorite park, so there are many beautiful scenery.

✓ Kang is my favorite park, so there is a lot of beautiful scenery.

Scenery is an uncountable noun, so it cannot be used with many or the plural form sceneries in this context. Use a lot of scenery or much scenery, and use there is because scenery is singular in form.

× Of course, if I have some enough time, I go to the Natural Central Park.

✓ Of course, if I have enough time, I will go to Natural Central Park.

Some cannot be placed directly before enough in this expression. Use enough time. In a first conditional sentence, use the present tense after if and will plus the base verb in the main clause.

× Of course, if I have some enough time, I go to the Natural Central Park.

✓ Of course, if I have enough time, I will go to Natural Central Park.

The sentence refers to a possible future visit, so go should be changed to will go. The if-clause remains in the present tense: If I have enough time, I will go.

× I heard that Grand Central Park is very very big and popular park in part of my part of the world.

✓ I heard that Grand Central Park is a very big and popular park in my part of the world.

A singular countable noun such as park needs an article. Use a before very big and popular park. The phrase my part of the world is also the correct noun phrase because the speaker is referring to their own region.

× I heard that Grand Central Park is very very big and popular park in part of my part of the world.

✓ I heard that Grand Central Park is a very big and popular park in my part of the world.

The natural prepositional phrase is in my part of the world, not in part of my part of the world. Use my to show possession and avoid repeating part unnecessarily.

× So I'd like to go to the UK, I go to the Grand Central Park.

✓ So, I'd like to go to the UK, and I will go to Grand Central Park.

The name Grand Central Park is being used as a proper place name, so it does not normally need the definite article the. The UK does require the because it is the standard name of a country group.

× So I'd like to go to the UK, I go to the Grand Central Park.

✓ So, I'd like to go to the UK, and I will go to Grand Central Park.

Two independent clauses cannot be joined only with a comma. Use a coordinating conjunction such as and, or separate the clauses into two sentences.

× So I'd like to go to the UK, I go to the Grand Central Park.

✓ So, I'd like to go to the UK, and I will go to Grand Central Park.

The speaker is describing a future plan, so the present form go should be changed to will go. This clearly shows that the visit is planned for the future.