Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant and gives a clear contrast between preferring to stay indoors and occasionally visiting parks. However, the first sentence is slightly long and repetitive, and “go to parks or any other place that often” is unnatural. Use a concise topic sentence followed by one specific childhood detail, such as what you did in the park or why you found it relaxing. Connect the ideas with linking words such as “although” or “however.”

Ví dụ: I did not visit parks very often as a child because I generally preferred staying indoors. However, I enjoyed going there occasionally, especially to play on the swings and get some fresh air. I found those visits quite relaxing.

Gợi ý: You answer the question directly and provide reasons, but the response contains repetition of “because” and “however,” as well as an awkward sentence beginning with “And.” Correct “there aren't much parks” to “there aren't many parks,” and say “in the present” as “nowadays.” The answer also contradicts itself slightly by saying you do not like parks but visit them occasionally; clarify that you dislike crowded parks but enjoy quieter ones. Avoid repeating the childhood point unless it directly supports your current opinion.

Ví dụ: I do not enjoy visiting parks as much as I did when I was a child. Nowadays, they are often crowded and full of insects, so I usually prefer walking on my terrace. However, I sometimes visit a quiet park, especially if it has good play equipment and is not too busy.

Gợi ý: Your main opinion is understandable, but the answer is difficult to follow because it contains several ideas in one long sentence. Correct “water podies” to “water bodies,” “more of water bodies and less of parks” to “more water bodies and fewer parks,” and “I would not prefer seeing” to “I would not want to see.” Most importantly, your reasoning is unclear: you seem to say that you do not want more parks because the existing ones are small and unattractive, but this is not a logical reason. Explain whether you would support more parks if they were well-designed and useful for families.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Although my city is famous for its lakes and other water bodies, it does not have many attractive green spaces. New parks with trees, walking paths, and areas for families would make the city more pleasant, especially at weekends.

Gợi ý: You communicate your preference clearly and give conditions under which you would visit a park. However, “being in the nature” should be “being in nature,” “there aren't any on my mind” is unnatural, and the final sentence is incomplete because it ends with “I would love to.” Avoid using “however” twice and make the conditional sentence complete by adding “visit them.” You could also name a type of park or describe specific features, such as natural scenery, quiet walking trails, or good company.

Ví dụ: I do not have a particular park in mind because I am not a regular park visitor. However, I would like to visit a quiet park surrounded by trees and natural scenery. If it had comfortable walking trails, good swings, and pleasant company, I would definitely enjoy spending time there.

× I prefer walking on my terrace, however I do visit the parks occasionally.

✓ I prefer walking on my terrace; however, I do visit the parks occasionally.

The original sentence joins two independent clauses with only a comma. Use a semicolon before however and a comma after it, or divide the sentence into two sentences.

× And in my childhood I used to love them for the swings, however there aren't much parks with good swings in the present.

✓ In my childhood, I used to love them for the swings; however, there aren't many parks with good swings nowadays.

Parks is a plural countable noun, so use many rather than much. Much is used with uncountable nouns. Many is also more natural than much in this context.

× And in my childhood I used to love them for the swings, however there aren't much parks with good swings in the present.

✓ In my childhood, I used to love them for the swings; however, there aren't many parks with good swings nowadays.

In the present is not the natural expression for talking about the current time. Use nowadays, at present, or currently. Here, nowadays is the most natural choice.

× My city is known as the city of Lake so there are more of water podies and less of parks so I would not prefer seeing more parks in my city because there aren't many good ones that are just small gardens for families to hang out on the weekends.

✓ My city is known as the city of Lake, so there are more water podies and fewer parks. Therefore, I would not prefer seeing more parks in my city because there aren't many good ones that are just small gardens for families to hang out in on weekends.

More of and less of are not used correctly before these plural countable nouns. Use more and fewer: more water podies and fewer parks. Fewer is used with plural countable nouns, while less is used with uncountable nouns.

× My city is known as the city of Lake so there are more of water podies and less of parks so I would not prefer seeing more parks in my city because there aren't many good ones that are just small gardens for families to hang out on the weekends.

✓ My city is known as the city of Lake, so there are more water podies and fewer parks. Therefore, I would not prefer seeing more parks in my city because there aren't many good ones that are just small gardens for families to hang out in on weekends.

The original sentence contains several independent clauses joined repeatedly with so, which makes it difficult to follow. Divide it into two sentences and use therefore to show the logical connection.

× I do like being in the nature, however I'm not a big fan of visiting the parks so there aren't any on my mind that I would love to visit in the future.

✓ I do like being in nature; however, I'm not a big fan of visiting parks, so there aren't any on my mind that I would love to visit in the future.

Nature is generally used without the definite article when referring to the natural world in general. Parks also does not need the when referring to parks in general rather than particular parks.

× However if I come across some really good parks that actually have more of swings and they are more connected to the nature and I get a good company I would love to.

✓ However, if I come across some really good parks that have more swings, are more connected to nature, and offer good company, I would love to visit them.

More of swings is incorrect because swings is a plural countable noun. Use more swings. The phrase is also smoother when the three descriptions are placed in a parallel structure.

× However if I come across some really good parks that actually have more of swings and they are more connected to the nature and I get a good company I would love to.

✓ However, if I come across some really good parks that have more swings, are more connected to nature, and offer good company, I would love to visit them.

Nature is normally used without the in this general meaning. Say connected to nature, not connected to the nature.

× However if I come across some really good parks that actually have more of swings and they are more connected to the nature and I get a good company I would love to.

✓ However, if I come across some really good parks that have more swings, are more connected to nature, and offer good company, I would love to visit them.

Company is usually an uncountable noun when it means companionship, so it does not take the article a. Use good company or have good company.

× However if I come across some really good parks that actually have more of swings and they are more connected to the nature and I get a good company I would love to.

✓ However, if I come across some really good parks that have more swings, are more connected to nature, and offer good company, I would love to visit them.

The original sentence contains too many clauses joined with and, and the final phrase I would love to is incomplete in this context. Use a parallel list of descriptions and complete the final verb phrase with visit them.