Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and use clearer past-tense narration with one strong topic sentence, then a specific supporting detail. Avoid repeating similar phrases (e.g., "I loved it a lot" and "I really like that moment"). Add a linking phrase to connect memory and reason.

Ví dụ: Yes — I loved going to parks with my grandfather when I was a child. For example, he would play ball with me near the swings, and those long afternoon games are my fondest memories because they made me feel close to him.

Gợi ý: Correct small grammar errors and make the answer more coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words (for example, moreover, because) to explain reasons and specific features. Avoid vague phrases like "that moment" and incorrect verbs such as "work through."

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks because they let me relax and breathe fresh air. For instance, the park near my home is well maintained and has a lake, so I often walk around the lake to unwind and escape the city pollution.

Gợi ý: Make your point more precise and use linking words to connect cause and effect. Avoid repetition ("new parks filled with new trees, planting new trees"). End with a clear result or benefit rather than an incomplete phrase like "help to bring down."

Ví dụ: Yes, definitely — more parks are needed because rapid construction is damaging the local ecosystem. Therefore, creating new parks and planting native trees would improve air quality and provide green spaces for residents.

Gợi ý: Combine sentences to avoid choppiness and use clearer phrasing: give one main idea, then give specific examples of what you want to see (design, facilities, flora). Avoid rhetorical questions in a short answer and replace with specific interests.

Ví dụ: Yes — I would like to visit famous parks abroad to see how they are designed and maintained. For example, I want to compare the landscaping, walking paths, and plant varieties in parks in Japan or the UK to learn new ideas for parks at home.

× I like to spend time with the nature.

✓ I like to spend time in nature.

The phrase 'with the nature' is incorrect. Use 'in nature' to express being outdoors surrounded by natural environment. Remove the definite article 'the' because 'nature' is an uncountable noun used in a general sense.

× If you work through the park, you will walk surrounding the lake.

✓ If you walk through the park, you will walk around the lake.

The original sentence misuses 'work' instead of 'walk' and uses 'surrounding' wrongly. Use 'walk through' to indicate moving across the park, and 'walk around' to indicate moving on the path that goes around the lake. 'Surrounding' is an adjective/participle and does not fit here.

× I like that moment too.

✓ I like that moment too.

No grammatical correction needed for tense here; however, for clarity and naturalness 'moment' could be replaced with 'memory' or 'scene' if intended. This suggestion is optional and not required by the provided list.

× As pollution is growing, I like to spend time with the nature to improve my breathing.

✓ As pollution is increasing, I like to spend time in nature to improve my breathing.

'Pollution is growing' is less natural than 'pollution is increasing.' Also 'with the nature' should be 'in nature' (see earlier). Use present continuous 'is increasing' to describe a current trend.

× As a large number of construction is going on in my city, I think it is hampering the ecosystem of my city.

✓ As a large amount of construction is going on in my city, I think it is harming the city's ecosystem.

'Construction' is an uncountable noun, so use 'a large amount of' rather than 'a large number of.' 'Hampering the ecosystem' is awkward; 'harming the city's ecosystem' is clearer and more natural.

× So building new parks filled with new trees, planting new trees there will definitely help to bring down.

✓ So building new parks and planting trees there will definitely help reduce pollution.

The original sentence has a poor structure and missing connectors. Combine actions with 'and' and specify what will 'bring down' — here 'pollution.' Use a clear verb object to complete the idea.

× I haven't been there before.

✓ I haven't been to them before.

The student refers to 'parks that are situated in foreign countries' (plural 'parks'), so the pronoun and preposition should match: 'been to them' or 'been to those parks.' Using 'there' is not wrong but less precise; this correction aligns number and reference.

× What are the features they have in their parks?

✓ What features do their parks have?

The original word order is nonstandard for a question in English. Use auxiliary 'do' and place the subject 'their parks' after it, with the main verb 'have' following the subject. Also remove 'the' before 'features' unless referring to specific features previously mentioned.

× I have listened that they are very beautiful.

✓ I have heard that they are very beautiful.

Use 'hear' rather than 'listen' with 'that' clauses. 'Listen' requires an object (listen to something). 'I have heard that...' correctly reports information received.

× I would definitely like to witness that.

✓ I would definitely like to see them.

'Witness that' is odd when referring to parks; 'see them' or 'experience them' is more natural. Use 'see' to express desire to visit and view the parks.