Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문법과 문장구조를 개선하세요. 과거 시제를 사용해야 하고 주어-동사 일치, 불필요한 단어 반복을 제거해야 합니다. 또한 주제문을 분명히 제시하고 한두 개의 구체적 세부사항(어떤 게임을 했는지, 누구와 갔는지)을 연결어로 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I loved running and playing games in the park with my friends. For example, we often played tag and hide-and-seek on the playground, which was always great fun.

Gợi ý: 문법(조건문과 현재/미래 시제)을 개선하고 문장을 간결히 하세요. 'If I have a semester'는 의미가 불분명합니다. 공원에 가는 목적(운동, 공부, 휴식)을 명확히 말하고 연결어로 이유를 설명하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. If I have free time during the semester, I usually go to a park to study or relax because the quiet environment helps me concentrate.

Gợi ý: 의견을 더 명확하고 자연스럽게 표현하세요. 'Green park' 같은 표현은 'green parks'나 'green spaces'로 수정하고 반복을 줄이세요. 이유(도시 크기 대비 공원 부족)와 구체적 활동(피크닉, 운동)을 연결어로 설명하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would. Although our city is large, it lacks green spaces where people can relax. Therefore, I think we need more parks so families can have picnics and people can exercise outdoors.

Gợi ý: 반복을 줄이고 명확한 이유와 구체적인 기대를 덧붙이세요. 장소 이름은 'Central Park in New York'처럼 자연스럽게 표현하고, 왜 가고 싶은지(풍경, 활동, 명소)를 설명하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York because it is famous worldwide. I want to see its large lawns and lakes, and maybe rent a bike to explore the park's landmarks.

× Yes, I like it.

✓ Yes, I liked it.

The question asks about childhood preferences (past). The student used present tense 'like' but should use past tense 'liked' to match the time frame. Suggestion: use past tense verbs when referring to childhood (e.g., 'I liked it').

× When I was young I really liked to running and some games.

✓ When I was young I really liked running and playing some games.

After 'liked', the base form or gerund should be used; 'to running' is incorrect. Also use 'playing some games' rather than just 'some games' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'liked running' or 'liked to run'; be consistent with gerund or infinitive forms.

× In playgrounds so we our my friends doing running in the park.

✓ In playgrounds, my friends and I used to run in the park.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and extra words ('so we our my friends doing running'). Use correct subject order 'my friends and I' and past habitual expression 'used to run' or 'ran'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: practice subject order and use simple past or 'used to' for habitual past actions.

× Yes I really like it.

✓ Yes, I really like going to parks now.

This question asks about present preferences. The original short reply 'Yes I really like it.' is acceptable but ambiguous; specifying 'going to parks' clarifies the referent. Keep present tense for current preferences. Suggestion: explicitly mention the activity when context could be unclear.

× If I have a semester I going to I'm going to perk for learning.

✓ If I have a semester off, I'm going to the park to study.

The original sentence has word order and word choice errors ('perk' instead of 'park', repeated phrases, missing auxiliary 'am' before 'going'). Use conditional 'If I have a semester off' and future intention 'I'm going to the park to study.' Suggestion: plan sentences clearly: condition + result; check spelling and auxiliary verbs.

× Yes, I think so, because our city is big, but we don't have very Green Park so we can do. Picnic.

✓ Yes, I think so because our city is big, but we don't have many green parks where we can have picnics.

Multiple issues: 'Green Park' incorrectly capitalized and singular; need 'many' for countable plural 'parks'; 'where we can have picnics' corrects fragmented 'so we can do. Picnic.' Suggestion: use plural for multiple parks, correct article/quantifier ('many'), and connect clauses properly.

× So I we think, I think we need a perk.

✓ So I think we need a park.

Extra pronoun 'we' is redundant and 'perk' is misspelled. Use 'park' and a single clear subject 'I think' or 'We think'. Suggestion: avoid redundant subjects and check spelling.

× I really want to try New York Central Park because it is very famous for the world, so I really want to try to go Central Park.

✓ I really want to visit New York's Central Park because it is famous worldwide, so I really want to go to Central Park.

'Try' is awkward with visiting a place; use 'visit' or 'go to'. 'Famous for the world' should be 'famous worldwide'. Also add preposition 'to' before 'Central Park'. Suggestion: use 'visit' for attractions and 'famous worldwide' for global fame; ensure correct prepositions ('go to').