Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and subject-verb agreement, and avoid repetition (e.g., don’t repeat "parks").

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my parents often took my brother and me to the playground where I enjoyed using the monkey bars; those afternoons were my favorite because I could play with friends and explore safely.

Gợi ý: Give a direct answer, then explain briefly with clear reasons and one linking word. Fix awkward phrasing and avoid fillers like "uh". Offer a balanced comment if possible (e.g., mention conditions when you would go).

Ví dụ: Not really, because it is usually too hot in the middle of the day. However, I would still go early in the morning or on cooler days when the weather is pleasant for a walk.

Gợi ý: Speak more clearly and use correct grammar and vocabulary. Give one clear benefit and support it with a specific reason. Avoid vague phrases and fillers, and correct subject-verb agreement and prepositions.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would. More parks would attract tourists and also benefit local residents because they provide free recreational spaces and improve the neighborhood’s appearance, which makes people feel their taxes are well spent.

Gợi ý: Answer directly, then add a couple of specific details using linking words. Remove fillers and correct phrasing (e.g., "sit on the hills" → "sit on the grassy slopes"). Mention one reason why you want to visit to show personal interest.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York. I want to stroll around the lake and sit on the grassy slopes to relax, and also to see how such a large green space benefits city residents by providing a peaceful environment.

× 'Actually, yes, I like going to parks.'

✓ 'Actually, yes, I liked going to parks.'

'The examiner asked about childhood (past), so the student should use past tense to match the time frame. Use liked (past simple) to indicate a past habit. Suggestion: use past simple when referring to past preferences or habits.'

× 'When I was a child, before I was going to the parks with my parents and me and my brother play in the activity area in the park and where there are monkey bars and that is my favorite activity to do in the park.'

✓ 'When I was a child, I used to go to the parks with my parents, and my brother and I played in the activity area with the monkey bars; that was my favorite activity.'

'Multiple tense and structure errors: "before I was going to the parks" is incorrect for a habitual past action — use "I used to go" or simple past. "me and my brother play" has wrong word order and tense; use "my brother and I played". "where there are monkey bars" mixes clauses awkwardly; integrate as "with the monkey bars". Also change "is my favorite" to past tense "was my favorite" to match past reference. Suggestion: break long sentences into clearer clauses and keep past tense consistent for past habits.'

× 'Actually, no, because the temperature now is a lot different than before.'

✓ 'Actually, no, because the temperature now is very different from before.'

'Use "different from" rather than "different than" for standard English. "a lot different" is informal; "very different" is clearer. Keep present tense "now" but prefer idiomatic preposition usage. Suggestion: use "different from" and avoid informal intensity phrases.'

× 'I think, uh, going to the park at the peak of the afternoon is really, uh, difficult because it's really hot and I don't want to go to the park early in the morning or late in the evening.'

✓ 'I think going to the park in the middle of the afternoon is really difficult because it is very hot, and I prefer not to go early in the morning or late in the evening.'

'"Peak of the afternoon" is non-idiomatic; use "middle of the afternoon". Avoid repeated filler words and duplicate adverbs ("really, uh, difficult" and "it's really hot"); replace with clearer wording. "I don't want to go" is acceptable, but "I prefer not to go" sounds more natural. Suggestion: remove fillers and choose idiomatic time expressions.'

× 'Actually yes, I think having more parks in my city UMM entices not only the tourists that is coming in my city, but also the people that are living UMM around living in it to be grateful that their tax monies are used properly.'

✓ 'Actually, yes, I think having more parks in my city would entice not only the tourists who come to my city, but also the local residents, who would appreciate that their tax money is being used properly.'

'Several issues: modal verb and subject-verb agreement (see next item) and word choice. Use "would entice" to express a hypothetical effect. "tourists that is coming" is wrong: use "tourists who come" (use who for people and present simple for habitual/general). "people that are living around" is awkward; use "local residents". "tax monies" is unnatural; use "tax money". Use progressive passive "is being used" to indicate ongoing proper use. Suggestion: simplify phrasing, use correct relative pronouns and idiomatic nouns.'

× '...not only the tourists that is coming in my city...'

✓ '...not only the tourists who come to my city... '

'"Tourists" is plural, so the verb must be plural (or use base form with who + present simple). "that is coming" uses singular verb "is" incorrectly. Use "who come" or "who are coming" (plural agreement) depending on intended meaning. Suggestion: match verb number to plural subject and prefer "who" for people.'

× '...but also the people that are living UMM around living in it to be grateful...'

✓ '...but also the people who live around it, who would be grateful...'

'"that are living UMM around living in it" is ungrammatical and includes fillers. Use "people who live around it" for a clear relative clause. Also add a second relative clause "who would be grateful" to show result. Suggestion: remove fillers and use "who" for people and simple present for habitual states.'

× 'Yes, actually I really want to go to New York and go to Central Park.'

✓ 'Yes, actually I really want to go to New York and visit Central Park.'

'Not a tense issue strictly, but phrasing is repetitive: "go to New York and go to Central Park" repeats "go". Use "visit" for variety and clarity. Keep present tense for future intention; could also say "I would really like to go" for politeness. Suggestion: use varied verbs and appropriate modal (would like) for future desires.'

× 'I really would love to stroll around the lake and also, umm, sit on the hills, uh, in that park and to observe on how Central Park helps its citizens by providing a green scenery among the city.'

✓ 'I would really love to stroll around the lake, sit on the hills in the park, and observe how Central Park helps its citizens by providing green scenery in the city.'

'Incorrect verb form use and extra preposition: "to observe on" is wrong — use "observe" or "observe how". "Green scenery among the city" is unidiomatic; use "in the city". Remove fillers and unnecessary "to" before the second infinitive when coordinating verbs. Suggestion: use parallel verb forms, remove extra prepositions, and use idiomatic location phrases.'