Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more direct at the start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, avoid unrelated details (e.g. adult preferences) and reduce redundancy. Use one or two brief supporting reasons or a short example. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words such as "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Not really. I didn’t often go to parks as a child because there were few public green spaces in my neighborhood. As a result, I have no strong memories of visiting parks when I was young.

Gợi ý: Begin with a clear 'Yes' or 'No' then give a concise reason and one specific detail about frequency or where you go. Correct small grammar and complete your final phrase (e.g. 'near my house'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to make it coherent.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I enjoy walking in parks because being in nature helps me relax and motivates me to lead a healthier lifestyle, so I often go to the small park near my house twice a week.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and provide one or two specific benefits of more parks. Avoid repetitive phrases and minor grammar errors. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' and quantify if possible.

Ví dụ: Yes, absolutely. Because our city has few walkable areas, building several new parks would improve residents’ physical and mental health; for example, parks would give people safe places to exercise and socialize.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear response (e.g. 'Yes') and describe one specific feature of the Chinese parks you liked. Use correct verb forms and a linking phrase to explain why you want that in your city. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes. When I visited China I saw local people doing group exercises and dancing in the park, which created a strong community atmosphere. I would love a park like that here because it encourages regular exercise and brings neighbors together.

× Surprisingly, although I would love to go for a walk as an adult because in Cambodia we rarely have any walkable place or parks, I don't have any memories as a child or as a kid ever wanting to go to a park.

✓ Surprisingly, although I would love to go for a walk as an adult because in Cambodia we rarely have walkable places or parks, I have no memories of ever wanting to go to a park as a child.

This sentence has awkward structure and redundancy (problem type 26). The phrase 'any walkable place or parks' mixes singular and plural and is wordy; use 'walkable places or parks'. 'I don't have any memories as a child or as a kid ever wanting' is ungrammatical and redundant; use 'I have no memories of ever wanting to go to a park as a child.' Suggest simplifying clauses and using 'have no memories of' + gerund to express lack of recollection. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Well yes, I appreciate walking around nature or garden area more or seeing other people walking around doing different things trying to incorporate healthier lifestyle.

✓ Well yes, I appreciate walking in nature or in garden areas and seeing other people doing different activities to adopt a healthier lifestyle.

The original mixes nouns and lacks articles/prepositions (problem type 6 and 11). 'Walking around nature or garden area' is awkward; use 'walking in nature' and 'in garden areas'. 'Trying to incorporate healthier lifestyle' is missing an article and is awkward; use 'to adopt a healthier lifestyle.' Also adjust parallel structure: 'appreciate walking... and seeing...' Suggest maintain consistent prepositions and clear infinitive purpose. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Therefore right now I often go to a park near my.

✓ Therefore, right now I often go to a park near my home.

This sentence is missing a noun after the possessive 'my' (problem type 26 / 12). 'Near my' is incomplete; the correct form is 'near my home' or 'near where I live.' Add the noun to complete the sentence and include a comma after 'Therefore' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:26

× As I have been mentioned before, because we have limited walkable areas, having or building 1 or few parks in the future would be very beneficial especially to those who enjoy walking and seeing other being active.

✓ As I mentioned before, because we have limited walkable areas, having or building one or a few parks in the future would be very beneficial, especially for those who enjoy walking and seeing others being active.

Multiple issues: incorrect passive phrasing 'have been mentioned' (use simple past 'mentioned') and number/article errors (problem type 22). Use 'one or a few' instead of '1 or few.' 'Especially to those' is better as 'especially for those.' 'Seeing other being active' needs plural 'others.' Also add comma before 'especially' for readability. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Recently I've been traveling to China and I saw how a community have been doing some activities and exercises in the park.

✓ Recently I traveled to China and saw how a community was doing activities and exercises in the park.

Tense mixing and subject-verb agreement errors (problem types 5 and 27). 'I've been traveling to China' suggests an ongoing action but 'recently' with 'I saw' indicates a completed trip; use simple past 'I traveled' to match 'saw.' 'A community have been doing' is incorrect; 'community' is singular, so use 'was doing' or 'had been doing.' Choose 'was doing' for a past continuous description. Simplify 'some activities and exercises' to 'activities and exercises.' Grammar problem type ID:5

× So I would personally enjoy something similar to the one in China that I have been seeing.

✓ So I would personally enjoy something similar to what I saw in China.

Awkward and unnecessary progressive perfect phrasing (problem type 26). 'Something similar to the one in China that I have been seeing' is wordy and unclear. Use 'what I saw in China' to refer to a specific example observed during the trip. This simplifies the sentence and uses the correct past tense to match the context. Grammar problem type ID:26