Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and natural. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid overmedical or informal phrases like “dopamine levels” and reduce repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “because,” “and,” or “so”). Keep to a maximum of about 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were full of other kids to play with and I always made new friends. For example, we used to spend hours on the swings and play tag until dusk, which was always thrilling. Because of that, parks were one of my favourite places to be.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct statement, then contrast past and present clearly using linking words like “however” or “although.” Remove redundant phrases (e.g., “I don't think I have the privilege”) and correct small grammar issues. Be specific about when you visit parks now to make the answer richer.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy parks, although I don't play as actively as I did when I was younger. However, when I visit a park now — usually on weekends — I like to sit on the swings or read under a tree because it helps me relax and clear my mind.

Gợi ý: Give a clearer opinion and support it with specific reasons. Use linking phrases (e.g., “on one hand… on the other hand…” is fine) but avoid repeating words and be more concrete about what other facilities you mean. Keep sentences shorter and more direct.

Ví dụ: On one hand, I would like more parks because they provide safe play spaces for children and promote community health. On the other hand, I would also welcome more sports centres or libraries in my neighbourhood, since those would benefit teens and adults as well.

Gợi ý: Be specific and use natural language. If you mean theme parks, say so clearly and avoid clinical expressions like “spike my dopamine levels.” Mention a concrete park or country and a reason you want to go. Keep the answer to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes — I would love to visit Disneyland in California or Tokyo because I enjoy the large rides and immersive shows. For example, I’m especially excited to try the roller coasters and themed parades because they look really exciting.

× I really liked going parks as a child because it provided me a sense of belonging as a lot of other children were there as well and I would always have so much fun playing with them and my dopamine levels would definitely rise and that it would be really exciting for me to go to the park.

✓ I really liked going to parks as a child because it gave me a sense of belonging since many other children were there and I would always have so much fun playing with them; my dopamine levels would definitely rise and it was really exciting for me to go to the park.

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