Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 답변은 자연스럽고 내용이 충실하지만 문장 연결과 구체성에서 개선이 필요합니다. 예를 들어 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하고 연결어를 사용해 흐름을 명확히 하세요. 또한 중복 표현(‘going to parks’, ‘visited the parks’)을 줄이면 더 효과적입니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were a safe place to play with my siblings and neighbors. For example, we often played hide-and-seek behind the trees, which helped me become more active and sociable. As a result, I always felt excited and free whenever we went there.

Gợi ý: 전반적으로 의사 전달은 되지만 문법 오류와 반복이 보입니다. 감정 표현을 더 구체적으로 하고 연결어를 사용해 문장을 매끄럽게 하세요. 또한 ‘relieved’ 대신 ‘relieved’ 사용 맥락과 동사 형태를 정확히 사용하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks, especially with my friends. We usually take a long walk and chat about our week, which helps me relax and forget about work. Because of those peaceful walks, I often feel less stressed and more refreshed afterwards.

Gợi ý: 아이디어는 좋지만 문장이 다소 장황하고 일부 표현이 부자연스럽습니다. ‘one of the biggest city’ 같은 단수·복수와 관사 오류를 고치고, 방문하고 싶은 이유를 구체적인 혜택(예: 걷기, 휴식, 커뮤니티 활동)으로 명확히 하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in Seoul because they provide much-needed green space in a crowded city. For instance, additional parks would offer places for exercise, family outings, and community events, making urban life healthier and more enjoyable.

Gợi ý: 응답은 구체적 대상(새 공원, 풍차)을 제시해 좋습니다. 다만 시제와 문장 연결이 매끄럽지 않고 반복이 있습니다. 사진에서 본 구체적 요소(풍차의 모양, 시설 등)와 방문 후 하고 싶은 활동을 덧붙이면 더 설득력 있습니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I plan to visit a newly opened park in my city that I discovered online. It features a large windmill and several walking trails; the photos showed colourful flowerbeds around the windmill, which looked stunning. I’m looking forward to walking the trails and taking photos there.

× Yes I still like it.

✓ Yes, I still like it.

Comma needed after introductory 'Yes' to follow standard punctuation; not a grammar type listed but fits present tense context—ensure clarity and natural phrasing.

× These days I usually go there with my friends.

✓ These days I usually go there with my friends.

Sentence is grammatically correct in present tense; no change needed.

× When I go there with my friends we usually take a walk and chat.

✓ When I go there with my friends, we usually take a walk and chat.

Missing comma after subordinate clause 'When I go there with my friends' for correct sentence structure; ensures clarity.

× It makes me relieved and release my stress.

✓ It makes me feel relieved and helps me release my stress.

Use 'feel relieved' (verb + adjective) not 'makes me relieved'; parallel verbs require structure: 'helps me release' or 'releases my stress'. Corrected to natural collocations.

× I re I still enjoy going to parks.

✓ I still enjoy going to parks.

Typographical duplication 'I re I' causes sentence structure error; remove extra characters to form a correct present-tense statement.

× Yes, I'd like to see more parks because I live in Seoul, which is one of the biggest city in the world.

✓ Yes, I'd like to see more parks because I live in Seoul, which is one of the biggest cities in the world.

Countable noun 'city' needs plural 'cities' after 'one of the biggest'.

× There are many parks where I couldn't visit yet, so I want to try to visit there and see the beautiful sceneries and enjoy the environment.

✓ There are many parks I haven't been able to visit yet, so I want to try to go and see the beautiful scenery and enjoy the environment.

Use present perfect 'haven't been able to visit' rather than 'couldn't visit yet'; 'visit there' is awkward—use 'go'; 'scenery' is uncountable, not 'sceneries'.

× Yes, there is a new park which was built just a few weeks ago in my city.

✓ Yes, there is a new park in my city that was built just a few weeks ago.

Relative clause ordering: place 'in my city' earlier or use 'that' for defining clause; both word order and usage improved for natural English.

× I really want to visit there.

✓ I really want to visit it.

Avoid 'visit there'; use direct object pronoun 'it' for places ('visit it') or say 'go there'.

× The park is popular because of a big windmill and I saw a picture of the park, it looked really cool.

✓ The park is popular because of a big windmill, and I saw a picture of the park; it looked really cool.

Run-on sentence and comma splice. Use a conjunction with comma or separate clauses with semicolon/period to correct sentence structure.

× I want to visit there and spend time.

✓ I want to visit it and spend time there.

Use 'visit it' for the park and 'spend time there'—correct placement of pronoun and preposition for natural expression.