Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장의 시제 일관성이 부족하고 표현이 반복됩니다. 과거 경험을 말할 때는 과거 시제를 일관되게 사용하고, 중복되는 표현(예: relieve stress)이 아니라 더 구체적인 활동이나 감정을 덧붙여 말하세요. 또한 문장을 간결하게 시작한 뒤, 연결어를 사용해 세부사항을 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were my favourite place to relax. For example, I often played hide-and-seek with my siblings and ran around the playground, which made me feel free and happy.

Gợi ý: 의사 전달은 되지만 표현이 반복적이고 일부 문장은 어색합니다. 이유를 말할 때는 이유를 자연스럽게 연결하는 접속사를 사용하고, 활동에 대한 구체적인 예시나 빈도(How often)를 추가하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me unwind after a busy day. Nowadays I usually go with friends, and we often take a long walk and chat for an hour, which helps us catch up and relax.

Gợi ý: 문법(단수/복수, 관사)과 표현의 정확성이 필요합니다. 'one of the biggest city'는 'one of the biggest cities'로 고쳐야 하고, 이유를 말할 때 더 구체적인 혜택(예: 공기질, 여가 공간)을 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Seoul is one of the biggest cities in the world, and having more parks would provide cleaner air and more places for people to relax and exercise.

Gợi ý: 답변 내용은 괜찮지만 표현이 반복됩니다('beautiful scenery' 두 번). 이유와 감정(왜 가보고 싶은지)을 구체적으로 설명하고, 문장 연결을 자연스럽게 하기 위해 접속사를 사용하세요. 또한 'one time' 대신 'one day' 또는 'sometime'이 더 자연스럽습니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, there is a park nearby with large windmills and stunning views. I saw a YouTube video showing the windmills and walking paths, so I would love to visit there someday to take photos and enjoy the scenery.

× Yeah, I like going to parks when I was a child because I could relieve stress and spend time with my family or friends.

✓ Yeah, I liked going to parks when I was a child because I could relieve stress and spend time with my family or friends.

Tense inconsistency: 'when I was a child' refers to past time, so the verb should be past tense ('liked') to match. Use past tense throughout the clause to maintain time consistency. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs for events that happened in the past, e.g., 'I liked going'.

× When I visit parks, I usually went through with my family and we played hide and seek and I could run a lot.

✓ When I visited parks, I usually went with my family; we played hide-and-seek and I could run a lot.

Mixed tenses and incorrect preposition: 'When I visit parks' is present while other verbs are past; change to 'visited'. 'Went through with my family' is incorrect collocation; use 'went with my family'. Hyphenate 'hide-and-seek' as a fixed phrase. Suggestion: Keep the past tense, use correct preposition 'with', and use punctuation to separate ideas.

× Yes, I still like it because it makes me relieve stress and unwind.

✓ Yes, I still like it because it helps me relieve stress and unwind.

Verb choice and structure: 'makes me relieve' is unnatural. Use 'helps me relieve' or 'allows me to relieve'. 'Helps me relieve' is more idiomatic. Suggestion: Use verbs like 'helps' or 'allows' before an infinitive for effects on the subject.

× We can just take a walk together and chat because of the reason.

✓ We can just take a walk together and chat for that reason.

Awkward phrase 'because of the reason' is incorrect. Use 'for that reason' or simply 'because of that'. Suggestion: Prefer concise phrases like 'for that reason' or 'because of that'.

× Yes, I'd like to visit many parks in my city because I live in Seoul, which is one of the biggest city in the world.

✓ Yes, I'd like to visit many parks in my city because I live in Seoul, which is one of the biggest cities in the world.

Singular/plural mismatch: 'one of the biggest city' is incorrect because 'one of the' must be followed by a plural noun ('cities'). Suggestion: Use plural form after 'one of the'.

× There are many parks that I've never visited, so I want to go there and enjoy the nature.

✓ There are many parks that I've never visited, so I want to go to them and enjoy nature.

Pronoun and article use: 'go there' is vague when referring to multiple parks; use 'go to them'. 'Enjoy the nature' is unidiomatic; use 'enjoy nature' (no article). Suggestion: Match pronouns in number with nouns and omit 'the' before 'nature' unless specific.

× Yes, there is a park in my city which has big windmills and beautiful scenery.

✓ Yes, there is a park in my city that has big windmills and beautiful scenery.

Relative pronoun: 'which' is formal/non-restrictive and normally set off with commas; for essential information use 'that'. Suggestion: Use 'that' for defining clauses without commas.

× The park is popular because of the beautiful scenery and I saw a YouTube video about the park so I really want to visit there one time.

✓ The park is popular because of its beautiful scenery, and I saw a YouTube video about the park, so I really want to visit it sometime.

Pronoun and adverb issues: 'visit there' is incorrect; use 'visit it'. 'One time' is unnatural in this context; use 'sometime' or 'one day'. Also add possessive 'its' for 'beautiful scenery'. Suggestion: Use 'its' for possession, 'visit it' for a single park, and 'sometime' or 'one day' for future desire.