Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Bạn cần sửa ngữ pháp (thời quá khứ), dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, và tránh lỗi từ vựng; cung cấp một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể hơn. Ví dụ: dùng 'I didn't really' thay cho 'Not really', 'I preferred' thay cho 'I prefer', và 'there weren't many well-organised parks near my house.' Thêm liên từ đơn giản để mạch lạc (For example, because/since).

Ví dụ: I didn't really like going to parks as a child. I preferred staying at home with my toys and comic books because there weren’t many well-organised parks near my house.

Gợi ý: Bạn cần sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ (thì, chủ-động/tính từ), tránh câu mơ hồ và lặp từ. Dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, thêm liên từ (so, because) và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể (những hoạt động bạn làm). Ví dụ: 'life has improved', 'parks have developed', 'I go to relax, exercise, or read.' Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now. Life has improved and parks have developed, so they are more attractive. I usually go to relax after a stressful day at work, walk along the paths, and sometimes read a book on a bench.

Gợi ý: Cần sửa cấu trúc câu và ngữ pháp số ít/ số nhiều (There to be), tránh lặp và dùng liên từ hợp lý. Nên nói rõ lí do với ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: giảm ô nhiễm, không gian cho trẻ em). Ví dụ câu chủ đề: 'Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city' và theo sau bằng 1–2 lý do cụ thể.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space and help reduce air pollution. For example, more parks would give children safe places to play and improve overall air quality.

Gợi ý: Cần dùng ngôn ngữ tự nhiên hơn, tránh câu hỏi tu từ trong câu trả lời, chỉnh ngữ pháp (family singular/plural), và làm rõ chi tiết (khi nào, với ai, cụ thể hoạt động). Giữ 2–3 câu, dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

Ví dụ: I would like to visit Disneyland Singapore in the future because I enjoy Disney characters and themed attractions. I hope to go with my family someday and try the most famous roller coaster there.

× Not really, when I was a child I prefer staying at home with my toys and my comic books.

✓ Not really. When I was a child I preferred staying at home with my toys and my comic books.

The sentence refers to a past habitual action, so the past tense 'preferred' is required rather than the present 'prefer'. Suggestion: use past simple for habits in the past (e.g., 'I preferred').

× Also they are not so many well organized parks near my house.

✓ Also, there were not so many well-organized parks near my house.

This sentence describes a past situation and also has incorrect word order and quantifier usage. 'There were not so many' or 'there weren't many' is the correct structure for existence with quantifiers in the past. Suggestion: use 'there were not so many' and hyphenate 'well-organized'.

× Yes, I still enjoy going to the park. I see life have been undergone a lot of improvement.

✓ Yes, I still enjoy going to the park. I see life has undergone a lot of improvement.

The clause describes a present observation of changes that have occurred, so present perfect 'has undergone' is correct. 'Have been undergone' is ungrammatical because 'undergo' is an active verb; use 'has undergone'. Suggestion: use 'has/have undergone' depending on subject ('life has undergone').

× Parks also develop itself.

✓ Parks also develop themselves.

The subject 'Parks' is plural, so the reflexive pronoun must be plural: 'themselves', not 'itself'. Suggestion: match reflexive pronoun number to the subject (parks -> themselves).

× I usually go to the park to rewind myself after stressful time at work and I have a well of fun time there.

✓ I usually go to the park to unwind after stressful times at work and I have a lot of fun there.

'Rewind' is incorrect in this context; 'unwind' means relax. 'Stressful time' should be pluralized to 'stressful times' or preceded by an article. 'A well of fun time' is unidiomatic; use 'a lot of fun' or 'a great time'. Suggestion: use idiomatic verbs and phrases: 'unwind' and 'have a lot of fun'.

× Sure, I would like them to be more parks in my city.

✓ Sure, I would like there to be more parks in my city.

The original word order is incorrect. Use the 'would like there to be' construction to express desire for existence. Suggestion: 'I would like there to be more parks'.

× Parks is a great way for people to relax and enjoy themselves with nature.

✓ Parks are a great way for people to relax and enjoy themselves with nature.

'Parks' is plural and requires the plural verb 'are', not 'is'. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number (parks -> are).

× And more parks means more green space for people in the city.

✓ And more parks mean more green space for people in the city.

Because the subject 'more parks' is plural, the verb should be plural 'mean' rather than 'means'. Suggestion: match verb number to plural subject. Also avoid beginning sentences with 'And' in formal speech but acceptable in conversation.

× And make the air more cleaner. Sorry, the air cleaner.

✓ And make the air cleaner.

'More cleaner' is a double comparative; use either 'cleaner' or 'more clean' (cleaner is preferred). The fragment 'Sorry, the air cleaner' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use 'make the air cleaner'.

× I would like to visit Disneyland Singapore in the future.

✓ I would like to visit Disneyland Singapore in the future.

Sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed; 'would like to' properly expresses a future desire. Suggestion: none.

× It's an amusement park and I enjoy the Disney character and the theme right?

✓ It's an amusement park and I enjoy the Disney characters and the theme, right?

'The Disney character' should be plural 'Disney characters' if referring to multiple characters. Also add a comma before the tag question 'right?'. Suggestion: pluralize when speaking of more than one character and punctuate tag questions correctly.

× I hope to go with families and try the most famous roller coaster there.

✓ I hope to go with my family and try the most famous roller coaster there.

'Families' without a determiner is unclear; likely the speaker means 'my family' or 'my families' is incorrect. Use 'my family' for the speaker's family. Suggestion: use the appropriate possessive pronoun 'my' with 'family'.