Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Reduce hesitations and fix grammar/inaccuracies. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concise, specific details using linking words. Correct tense and singular/plural errors (e.g., "looking forward to them", "interesting to see how people keep fit in nature").

Ví dụ: Yes. I loved going to the park as a child because it felt relaxing and fun. For example, I often watched people jogging and exercising there, which made the place lively and inspiring. Additionally, I enjoyed playing on the swings and exploring the trees.

Gợi ý: Be more fluent and grammatical: remove filler words, use articles and plural forms correctly ("visit the park on weekends", "sit on a bench"). Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a linked supporting detail or example. Use linking words like "often" or "usually" correctly.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Whenever I have free time on the weekend, I often visit the park with friends and we usually sit on a bench to watch birds. This helps me relax after a busy workweek.

Gợi ý: Answer is relevant and coherent but reduce hesitation and redundancy. Use precise linking words (e.g., "because", "therefore") and concise phrasing. Provide one specific reason and an example of benefit (health, community space).

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks because my city is becoming crowded and polluted, and parks can improve air quality and provide green spaces. For instance, a new neighborhood park would give residents a safe place to exercise and relax after work.

Gợi ý: Make the response more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "I don't have a specific park in mind"), then give a reason and a brief example. Avoid repeating similar ideas; use linking words like "because" and "so" correctly.

Ví dụ: I don't have a specific park planned, but I would definitely visit any attractive green park nearby because I find green scenery relaxing and it helps me unwind. For example, if a botanical garden opened near my neighborhood, I would go there to relax and take photos.

× It was quite relaxing for me and I was often uh, looking forwards to see them.

✓ It was quite relaxing for me and I was often, uh, looking forward to seeing them.

Use 'looking forward to' followed by a gerund (verb+ing). 'Looking forwards to' is incorrect spelling/form and 'to see' should be 'to seeing' because 'to' is a preposition here, not part of an infinitive.

× Also I saw a lot of people jogging over there and doing exercises.

✓ Also, I saw a lot of people jogging over there and doing exercises.

Add a comma after 'Also' for correct punctuation and natural pause. Grammatically the sentence is acceptable; no article change needed. This suggestion focuses on fluency and punctuation rather than strictly grammatical error.

× It was quite uh, interesting scene to see how the people are keeping themselves so fit in a natures.

✓ It was quite an interesting scene to see how people keep themselves so fit in nature.

Use the indefinite article 'an' before a singular count noun 'interesting scene'. Remove the definite article 'the' before 'people' for general reference. 'Are keeping' is changed to simple present 'keep' for general habitual action. 'natures' is incorrect plural; use 'nature'.

× I love to go to the park now also.

✓ I still love to go to the park now.

'Now also' is unnatural in English; use 'still' to indicate continuation from past to present. Maintaining present simple tense is correct for habits.

× Uh, so whenever I get, uh, time after my busy work schedule, I often visit park during weekend.

✓ Uh, so whenever I get time after my busy work schedule, I often visit the park during the weekend.

Use 'the park' for a specific place in context and 'the weekend' to refer to that period. Remove unnecessary commas. 'Visit park' is ungrammatical without an article.

× Umm, I go with my friends, uh, and it's quite interesting to walk around and see nature.

✓ Umm, I go with my friends, and it's quite interesting to walk around and see nature.

Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Pronouns are fine; this improves fluency and punctuation.

× Uh, we usually sit on the bench and look around, uh, do a bird watch.

✓ We usually sit on a bench and look around, and do some bird watching.

Use 'a bench' (one typical bench) not 'the bench' unless a specific bench was mentioned. 'Do a bird watch' is unnatural; use 'do some bird watching' or 'watch birds.'

× Yes, I would love to see more parks in my city as I'm thinking my city is getting more congested and polluted.

✓ Yes, I would love to see more parks in my city as I think my city is getting more congested and polluted.

Use simple present 'I think' for current opinion rather than present continuous 'I'm thinking.' 'I'm thinking' suggests a temporary process rather than stating an opinion.

× Parks will really help, uh, to balance the environment and the pollution as well.

✓ Parks will really help to balance the environment and reduce pollution as well.

Replace 'the pollution' with 'pollution' or 'reduce pollution' for natural phrasing. 'Help to balance the environment' is acceptable but 'reduce pollution' clarifies the intended meaning.

× And, uh, it's quite, really nice for the people to have a park around them so they can go and sit there after the busy, hectic life schedule.

✓ And it's really nice for people to have a park nearby so they can go and sit there after a busy, hectic life.

Remove redundant modifiers 'quite, really' and 'the' before 'people.' Use 'nearby' instead of 'around them.' 'Life schedule' is awkward; 'after a busy, hectic life' or 'after a busy, hectic day' is more natural.

× I haven't decided going to any park in the future but I feel if I get a chance to visit nice park around me I will definitely go there because uh, green scenery always attracts me and it uh, gives me relaxing, uh, time and also it helps me to unwind.

✓ I haven't decided on going to any park in the future, but I feel if I get a chance to visit a nice park nearby, I will definitely go there because green scenery always attracts me and it gives me relaxing time and helps me to unwind.

Use 'decided on going' or better 'decided on visiting' for correct verb pattern. Add articles: 'a nice park nearby.' Remove filler words and unnecessary commas. Keep 'will definitely' for future intention. 'Gives me relaxing time' could be improved to 'relaxing time' or 'relaxation.'

× So I definitely think I'm looking forward to visiting.

✓ So I definitely think I'm looking forward to visiting it.

Add the object 'it' or 'them' (parks) to complete the idea. Alternatively, use 'So I'm definitely looking forward to visiting.' Present continuous 'I'm looking forward' correctly expresses future expectation; include object for clarity.