Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is natural and relevant, with a clear topic sentence and a personal example. To improve, tighten phrasing to avoid redundancy (e.g., combine short ideas), use more precise vocabulary (e.g., “played hide-and-seek” instead of “little hide and seek games”), and vary sentence structures. Keep within 3–4 sentences and add a linking word when moving to the anecdote.

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I often spent my weekends at the local park making friends; for example, once I walked over and asked to join a game of hide-and-seek, and we played for hours.

Gợi ý: Good content and clear reason, but the response is long and slightly repetitive. Break it into two concise sentences: state whether you still like parks, then give a specific reason and a linking word (e.g., “however” or “so”) to improve coherence. Use more precise verbs (e.g., “relax” or “people-watch”) and avoid repeating ‘park’ too often.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy local parks; however, because I’m busy with my studies, I usually only visit on weekends to study with friends and get some fresh air.

Gợi ý: The idea is clear but contains a typo (“parts” instead of “parks”) and some informal phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., “firstly… secondly…”). Be concise and avoid repeating ‘want’.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would. Firstly, more parks would give children safe places to play and socialise; secondly, they would offer quiet outdoor spaces where stressed students like me can relax.

Gợi ý: The answer addresses the question but is slightly imprecise and repetitive. Use clearer categories (e.g., “theme and amusement parks” vs “neighbourhood parks”), and a linking word to explain why. Also avoid “a lot of parks” — specify types or examples. Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

Ví dụ: Yes. In the future I’d like to visit theme parks and large amusement parks rather than just neighbourhood parks, because the rides and lively atmosphere help me unwind after stressful study periods.

× When I was younger I used to enjoy my weekends at the park making friends.

✓ When I was younger, I used to enjoy spending my weekends at the park making friends.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund (verb + -ing) that clearly expresses the activity. 'Enjoy my weekends at the park making friends' is ambiguous; adding 'spending' clarifies the action and reads naturally. Also add a comma after the subordinate clause 'When I was younger.'

× I remember one time I walked up to a group of friends and asked them if I could join their little hide and seek games.

✓ I remember one time when I walked up to a group of children and asked if I could join their little hide-and-seek game.

The original is understandable but slightly awkward: 'one time I walked' benefits from 'one time when I walked' for clarity. 'A group of friends' is better as 'a group of children' in context of playground games, and 'hide and seek' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective or written as 'hide-and-seek' and 'game' should be singular when referring to one instance. Also omitting the second 'them' with 'asked if I could' is more natural.

× I enjoyed that very well.

✓ I enjoyed that very much.

'Very well' is typically used to describe ability or performance; to express strong liking, 'very much' is the correct adverbial phrase. This aligns with natural English collocation.

× Yes, I still like going to the local parks next to my home and watching kids have fun on school days, but unfortunately due to my studies I don't have enough time to watch them so I only go to the park on weekends to study with my friends and get some fresh air.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the local park near my home and watching kids have fun after school, but unfortunately due to my studies I don't have enough time to watch them, so I only go to the park on weekends to study with my friends and get some fresh air.

Use singular 'park' if referring to one local park; 'next to my home' is less natural than 'near my home.' 'On school days' implies during school; 'after school' fits watching kids play. Add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses. Maintain present simple tense consistency.

× Yes, I would like to see more parts in my country because I want kids to have fun, make bonding times with their friends and family, and mainly because I want a place to go to whenever I'm stressed and want some fresh air away from study time and school.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my country because I want kids to have fun, spend time bonding with their friends and family, and mainly because I want a place to go whenever I'm stressed and need some fresh air away from studying and school.

'Parts' is a spelling/word choice error; it should be 'parks.' 'Make bonding times' is unnatural; 'spend time bonding' is the correct verb+noun phrase. 'Away from study time and school' is wordy; 'away from studying and school' is clearer. Changed 'want some fresh air' to 'need some fresh air' for naturalness.

× Yes, in the future I would like to go to a lot of parks, for example like theme parks and amusement park, rather than just normal parks because I want it to be a place where I can relieve some stress from my studies.

✓ Yes, in the future I would like to go to many parks, for example theme parks and amusement parks, rather than just ordinary parks because I want them to be places where I can relieve some stress from my studies.

Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for countable plural 'parks' in more formal speech. Do not use both 'for example' and 'like' together; choose 'for example' here. 'Amusement park' should be plural to match 'theme parks' and 'parks.' 'Normal parks' is better as 'ordinary parks.' Pronoun agreement: 'it' should be 'them' to match plural 'parks.' 'A place' -> 'places' to match plural subject.