Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct vocabulary/grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix collocations (e.g., 'attractions' not 'attraction places').

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, there were many attractions like bumper cars and swings, which made visits exciting; as a result, I went almost every weekend.

Gợi ý: Reduce hesitations and correct tense/phrasing. Use a clear present tense statement, then give one specific reason with a linking word. Replace vague phrases ('when I something in park') with a precise activity.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I try to visit regularly because walking or exercising there helps me relax and feel refreshed.

Gợi ý: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Give one clear reason with a specific benefit and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Correct collocations (e.g., 'affect people's lifestyles') and remove filler phrases.

Ví dụ: Absolutely. I would like more parks because currently there are very few, so adding parks would improve people's lifestyles by providing safe places for exercise and family activities.

Gợi ý: This answer is clear and specific; to improve, tighten language slightly and use one linking word to connect reasons. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid unnecessary details.

Ví dụ: Yes, I want to visit a park on a hill about 100 meters high. It offers panoramic views of the city and a peaceful atmosphere, so I could relax there and take photographs.

× When I was a child, I was really passionate about going to parks because there was a lot of attraction places such as crashing cars and others.

✓ When I was a child, I was really passionate about going to parks because there were a lot of attractions, such as bumper cars and others.

Errors: subject-verb agreement with there + plural noun (use 'were'), incorrect noun form 'attraction places' should be 'attractions', incorrect item 'crashing cars' likely meant 'bumper cars'. Suggestion: Use 'there were' for plural and use correct noun forms and collocations. ID:27

× Uh, actually, yes. Uh, I tried to go parks on a regular basis and what, whenever I get a chance, uh, I try to go there because, uh, when I something in park, I feel more confident and more fresh.

✓ Uh, actually, yes. I try to go to parks on a regular basis, and whenever I get a chance, I try to go there because when I am in a park, I feel more confident and refreshed.

Errors: unnecessary past tense 'tried' inconsistent with habitual present (use 'try'); missing preposition 'to' after 'go'; missing article 'a' before 'park' or use 'in a park'; incorrect verb form 'when I something in park' — likely 'when I am in a park' or 'when I do something in the park'; adjective 'more fresh' should be 'refreshed'. Suggestion: Use present simple for habits, include correct prepositions and articles, and use appropriate adjective forms. ID:6

× Absolutely, I would like to see many parks in my city because actually right now there are few parks in my city and increasing the number of parks in our city may may affect people lifestyle in terms of you know, people can spend their time on in park.

✓ Absolutely, I would like to see many parks in my city because right now there are few parks, and increasing the number of parks in our city may affect people's lifestyles, since people can spend their time in parks.

Errors: redundant 'actually', duplicate 'may may', missing apostrophe in 'people lifestyle' (should be 'people's lifestyles'), incorrect preposition 'on in park' should be 'in parks', article/number phrasing 'there are few parks' is okay but 'there are few parks' implies scarcity — consider 'there are only a few parks'. Suggestion: Remove redundancies, fix possessive, pluralize 'lifestyles' and use correct prepositions. ID:22

× Yes, there's one park I really want to visit, but it's quite far from my home.

✓ Yes, there is one park I really want to visit, but it is quite far from my home.

Errors: 'there's' and 'it's' are contractions acceptable in speech; however for clarity in formal writing expand to 'there is' and 'it is'. No major grammar error otherwise. Suggestion: In formal responses avoid contractions. ID:22

× It's located on a hill more than 100 meters high, so it offers a beautiful panoramic view of the whole city and peaceful atmosphere where I could relax and take photos.

✓ It is located on a hill more than 100 meters high, so it offers a beautiful panoramic view of the whole city and a peaceful atmosphere where I can relax and take photos.

Errors: missing article before 'peaceful atmosphere' (add 'a'), tense/modal mismatch 'could' implies conditional — use 'can' for general ability in future/real situation. Suggestion: Add the article and use 'can' for factual ability. ID:22