Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Make the answer grammatically consistent (use past tense), remove fillers, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I especially liked walking around and observing nature, because it gave me fresh air and a chance to watch people and learn about different behaviours.

Gợi ý: Avoid repetition and capitalize correctly; combine sentences to be more natural. Replace vague phrases like “avoids stress” with specific effects and use a linking word to show cause.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. After work I often go there to relax and unwind, because the quiet atmosphere and greenery help reduce my stress and clear my mind.

Gợi ý: Be concise and avoid hesitations. State your opinion, give one or two specific reasons, and use a linking word to connect the reason to the opinion.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because many urban areas prioritize malls over green spaces, and adding parks would improve residents’ health and provide communal areas for families.

Gợi ý: Avoid fillers and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the park, then give specific activities and a brief reason using a linking word.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit Central Park in New York because its vast lawns and paths are perfect for walking or jogging; moreover, I’d love to relax on the grass and enjoy the lively atmosphere.

× As a child, I do like going to the parks because it allowed me to walk and observe my surroundings and breathe fresh air and just umm, people watch.

✓ As a child, I liked going to parks because it allowed me to walk, observe my surroundings, breathe fresh air, and just people-watch.

Mixing present tense 'do like' with past context 'as a child' and 'allowed' is inconsistent. Use past tense 'liked' to match 'as a child'. Also 'the parks' is unnecessary; use 'parks'. Combine verbs with commas and hyphenate 'people-watch' as a compound verb for clarity.

× As an adult, I like going to parks. I still like going to parks because it allows me to relax after work and it gives me Peace of Mind because it it avoids stress.

✓ As an adult, I like going to parks. I still like going to parks because they allow me to relax after work and give me peace of mind because they help reduce stress.

Pronoun-verb agreement and tense: 'parks' is plural so use 'they allow' not 'it allows'. Repetition 'it it' is an error. 'Peace of Mind' should be lowercase 'peace of mind'. 'Avoids stress' is awkward; use 'help reduce stress' for natural expression.

× Yes, I think parks would be a great addition to our city, especially now that cities are, umm, cities have more malls than parks. I think parks should be built.

✓ Yes, I think parks would be a great addition to our city, especially now that cities have more malls than parks. I think more parks should be built.

Redundant phrasing 'cities are, umm, cities have' creates a sentence structure problem. Remove the repetition. Also 'I think parks should be built' is acceptable but 'more parks should be built' clarifies the meaning given the comparison.

× I do. I think Central Park in, I mean Central Park in New York is a great park to just walk or jog or just people watch. I think being there and just lying in the grass would feel so good.

✓ I do. I think Central Park in New York is a great place to walk, jog, or people-watch. I think being there and lying on the grass would feel so good.

Remove hesitation and repetition 'Central Park in, I mean Central Park in New York'. Use 'place' instead of 'park' to avoid repetition. Parallel verb forms: 'walk, jog, or people-watch'. 'Lying in the grass' is acceptable but 'lying on the grass' is more natural in English.