Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Make the answer more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct vocabulary and linking words. Avoid unclear words (e.g. “shuttle ****”, “bed winter racket”) and reduce redundancy (don’t repeat who took you twice).

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My mother or grandfather often took me there after tutoring, and I usually spent over an hour playing on the rides and running around with a badminton racket. Those visits were a highlight of my week.

Gợi ý: Be more direct and grammatical: use one topic sentence, then add specific routine details with linking words (e.g. "usually" or "often"). Avoid repetitive phrases like “nearby my park that is located near to my home.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Usually after dinner I walk to the small park near my home and spend about half an hour walking or relaxing there.

Gợi ý: Good content and reasons—make sentences smoother and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to sequence points (e.g. “first,” “also”) and correct small grammar issues (e.g. remove “can play a very vital role in”). Be specific about examples or effects.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would. First, many neighborhoods lack green spaces, so new parks would give families a nearby place to relax. Also, parks improve air quality and offer facilities like walking paths and playgrounds where people of all ages can exercise and socialize.

Gợi ý: Provide a clearer timeline and avoid awkward phrasing. Use a topic sentence then add specific reasons why you want to visit and what you will do there. Correct grammar (e.g. “closed for renovations for some time” → “closed for renovations at the moment”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit the Japanese Park in Chandigarh. I saw it once and found it very beautiful; however, it is currently closed for renovations. I plan to go again when it reopens and will recommend it to my family because of its gardens and tranquil atmosphere.

× After tutoring, my mother or my grandfather would often take me there and I enjoyed the rides and usually spent more than an hour playing with them.

✓ After tutoring, my mother or my grandfather often took me there; I enjoyed the rides and usually spent more than an hour playing with them.

Mixed use of 'would often take' with simple past 'enjoyed' and 'spent' creates tense inconsistency. Use simple past consistently for past habits. Also remove redundant 'would' and replace comma with semicolon for clarity.

× Sometimes I would bring a shuttle **** and bed winter racket to play with my mother or my grandfather.

✓ Sometimes I brought a shuttlecock and a wooden racket to play with my mother or my grandfather.

The original sentence uses unclear words 'shuttle ****' and 'bed winter racket' which appear to be incorrect nouns. Use correct vocabulary: 'shuttlecock' (for badminton) and 'racket' with an appropriate adjective if needed. Use simple past 'brought' to match past narrative.

× Yes, I like to go to parks nowadays also whenever I get some time and mainly after having my dinner, I usually go to nearby my park that is located near to my home and also spend half an hour by walking over there.

✓ Yes, I like to go to parks nowadays whenever I have some time, mainly after dinner; I usually go to the park near my home and spend about half an hour walking there.

Original has awkward word order and redundant phrases ('nearby my park', 'located near to my home', 'by walking over there'). Use present simple for habitual actions ('have', 'go', 'spend'), correct word order ('the park near my home'), and concise expressions ('about half an hour walking there').

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because several neighborhoods lack green spaces and having nearby parks would encourage families to spend time outdoors.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because several neighborhoods lack green spaces, and having nearby parks would encourage families to spend time outdoors.

Missing comma before coordinating conjunction joining two independent clauses. Adding the comma improves readability and correctly links the clauses.

× Parks also improve air quality and provide places for children to play and for adults to exercise, such as walking paths or playgrounds can play a very vital role in.

✓ Parks also improve air quality and provide places for children to play and adults to exercise; facilities such as walking paths and playgrounds can play a very vital role.

Original sentence is ungrammatical due to misplaced clause 'such as walking paths or playgrounds can play a very vital role in.' Rearranged to separate ideas and use correct relative phrasing. Use semicolon to separate related independent clauses and list facilities clearly.

× I saw it before and thought it was beautiful but it's currently closed for renovations from some time.

✓ I saw it before and thought it was beautiful, but it has been closed for renovations for some time.

Use present perfect 'has been closed' to indicate a state that began in the past and continues to the present. Replace 'from some time' with 'for some time' which is the correct prepositional phrase.

× So I would like definitely go again when the work is finished and also recommend that park to my family and my friends.

✓ So I would definitely like to go again when the work is finished and also recommend that park to my family and friends.

Incorrect word order 'would like definitely go' — place adverb 'definitely' before the base verb phrase: 'would definitely like to go' or 'would like to go again.' Also remove redundant 'my' before 'friends' for natural phrasing.