Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases (e.g., "when I was a child"). Also fix article use and word order ("in the park" → "to the park").

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child. For example, I often played games with neighborhood children on the swings and slides, and I enjoyed watching family picnics there. Because it was a safe place to meet friends, I went almost every weekend.

Gợi ý: Avoid repeating "I love" many times; combine ideas and correct phrasing ("see nature" not "see the nature with the people"). Provide one clear reason and one specific detail using a linking word to connect them.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are peaceful places to walk. For instance, I often take a 30-minute walk along tree-lined paths and watch people exercising or walking their dogs, which helps me relax.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence and expand with a specific benefit using linking words. Fix grammar ("it help" → "they help" or "it would help"). Mention a concrete example of how parks help people to be more convincing.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they help residents relax and stay healthy. For example, new small green spaces near apartment blocks would give children safe places to play and adults a spot for short walks during lunch breaks.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct answer, then give specific reasons and avoid awkward phrasing ("see pictures on the Internet"). Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example") and correct articles ("the parks around Paris").

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit the parks around Paris in the future because I have always admired their design. For example, I want to walk in the Luxembourg Gardens and the Tuileries because I have seen photos of their tree-lined alleys and peaceful lawns, which look very relaxing.

× When I was a child I loved to go to the park because in park you can see a lot of people, a lot of children playing and I love playing with other children when I was a child.

✓ When I was a child I loved to go to the park because in the park you can see a lot of people, a lot of children playing, and I loved playing with other children when I was a child.

The phrase 'in park' is missing the definite article 'the' (Article errors - ID 22). Also maintain tense consistency: the speaker refers to past habits, so 'I love playing' should be 'I loved playing' (Past tense issue - ID 5). Use commas to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: add 'the' before 'park' whenever referring to a specific place and keep past tense verbs when describing past habits.

× I love going to parks because I love to walk, I love to see people, I love the street and I love to see the nature with the people.

✓ I love going to parks because I love to walk, I love to see people, I love the streets, and I love to see nature with other people.

'the street' is unnatural when speaking generally about streets; use plural 'the streets' or simply 'streets' (Incorrect use of articles/adjectives - ID 22). 'the nature' is not needed; use 'nature' without 'the' (Article errors - ID 22). Also 'with the people' is awkward; 'with other people' is more natural. Keep present tense for current preferences (Present tense issue - ID 6). Suggestion: remove unnecessary definite articles and use plural or 'other people' for clarity.

× Yes, I love to see parks in my city and it help a lot of people to relax and to enjoy the nature.

✓ Yes, I love to see parks in my city and they help a lot of people to relax and enjoy nature.

The pronoun 'it' does not agree with the plural noun 'parks'; use 'they' (Subject-verb agreement errors - ID 27). 'to enjoy the nature' should be 'enjoy nature' (Article errors - ID 22). Also streamline infinitive usage by removing redundant 'to'. Suggestion: match pronouns to plural nouns and avoid unnecessary articles before uncountable nouns like 'nature'.

× I want to go parks around Paris because I love Paris a lot and it's been my dream to go there and I see pictures from in the Internet that parks in Paris are very beautiful and very relaxing.

✓ I want to visit parks around Paris because I love Paris a lot; it's been my dream to go there, and I have seen pictures on the Internet showing that the parks in Paris are very beautiful and relaxing.

Multiple issues: 'go parks' requires 'go to' or better 'visit' (Sentence structure errors - ID 26). 'I see pictures from in the Internet' mixes prepositions; correct is 'seen pictures on the Internet' (Incorrect use of prepositions - ID 11) and use present perfect 'have seen' to link past experience to present desire (Present/Past tense issue - ID 6/5). Also add 'the' before 'parks in Paris' for specificity (Article errors - ID 22). Suggestion: use 'visit' for places, use 'on the Internet', and use present perfect 'have seen' when referring to experiences that influence the present.