Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be direct and clear: start with a topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “slides”, “swings”, “rides”) and avoid unclear phrases. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences and use a linking word when adding details (e.g., “because”, “so”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I could play with my friends. For example, we often spent hours on the swings and slides, and sometimes rode small amusement rides. Those visits were a highlight of my weekends.

Gợi ý: Answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence, then give a concise reason and one specific detail. Avoid filler phrases (e.g., “you know”) and contradictions (saying grown-up and teenager is confusing). Use linking words like “because” or “although.”

Ví dụ: Not really, because I prefer indoor activities now. Although I still enjoy walking in parks sometimes, I rarely visit them for play like I did as a child.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear, polite topic sentence then give specific reasons. Avoid unclear or incorrect phrases (e.g., “hacking apart”, “one second for the city”). Use linking words such as “because” and give two concrete benefits (e.g., health, community). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they improve people’s health and create safe places for families. For instance, parks encourage exercise and give children a place to play, which helps build a stronger community.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear answer naming the park, then explain why with specific details. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “Disneyland”, “theme park”, “amusement park”), avoid filler words, and use linking words like “because” or “since”. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to visit Disneyland in the future because it is a famous theme park with many attractions. Since we don't have one in my country, it would be exciting to experience the rides and shows there.

× Yeah, every child lives apart.

✓ Yeah, every child lives nearby.

The student used 'apart' incorrectly; 'apart' means separated, which doesn't fit context. Likely intended meaning is that children live near parks or together; replace with 'nearby' or rephrase to 'every child lives nearby' or 'every child lives close to parks'. Use correct preposition/adverb for location.

× Like more fun to go with their friends and have fun and ride those lighters.

✓ It's more fun to go with friends, have fun, and ride the swings.

Sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Like' at start is informal filler; 'more fun to go with their friends' needs subject and verb: 'It's more fun to go with friends'. 'Ride those lighters' is incorrect vocabulary; likely 'ride the swings'. Combine coordinated verbs with commas and 'and'.

× To be honest, no, it says, you know, I'm not a child anymore.

✓ To be honest, no. I don't anymore; I'm not a child.

'It says' is incorrect reporting and unnecessary. Use simple present negative 'I don't anymore' or 'I no longer am' to express current state. Maintain natural spoken present-tense phrasing.

× I'm a grown up.

✓ I'm grown up.

'A grown-up' as a noun is correct but in context 'I'm grown up' or 'I'm a grown-up' both acceptable; however student later says 'I'm a teenager' which conflicts. Prefer 'I'm not a child; I'm a teenager' for clarity.

× I'm a teenager.

✓ I'm a teenager.

Grammatically correct. No change needed; keep as is.

× Oh my God yes.

✓ Oh my God, yes.

Add comma after interjection for clarity in writing. Otherwise acceptable spoken phrase.

× First reason I love when a kid is smiling and hacking apart.

✓ First, I love to see a child smiling and laughing in the park.

'Hacking apart' is incorrect; likely intended 'laughing a lot' or 'having fun'. 'When a kid is smiling' should be 'to see a child smiling'. 'Child' or 'kid' number agreement and article use adjusted. Use 'in the park' for clarity.

× One second for the city.

✓ It's also good for the city.

'One second for the city' is unclear and ungrammatical. Probably means 'it's good for the city' or 'it's beneficial for the city'. Use clear subject and verb.

× The honest Disneyland, it's a park, right?

✓ Honestly, Disneyland is a park, right?

'The honest' is incorrect word order and wrong word; use adverb 'honestly'. Also avoid comma splice; combine into clearer phrasing. 'It's a park, right?' is fine as tag question.

× I just wild Disneyland cousin is so big and we don't have an in our country so it's a big transformer to visit it.

✓ I just think Disneyland is so big, and we don't have one in our country, so it's a big attraction to visit.

Original sentence has multiple errors: 'wild' should be 'think' or 'would', 'cousin' is wrong word, 'we don't have an in our country' missing noun 'one' and extra 'in', and 'transformer' is incorrect — likely 'attraction'. Rephrase to clear, grammatical sentence with correct nouns and connectors.