Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Melhore a clareza e a coerência. Organize a resposta com uma frase tópica direta e 1–2 detalhes específicos. Evite hesitações e repetições (por exemplo “uh”, “you know”). Use tempos verbais consistentes e complete as ideias. Pratique frases curtas e ligadores simples como “because” ou “when” para conectar ideias.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often visited small local parks with my parents because they were close to our home and had playgrounds. I remember playing on the swings and having picnics, which made those visits very special.

Gợi ý: Reduza as repetições e organize melhor as ideias. Comece com uma frase direta, depois dê 1–2 razões específicas (use conectores como “because” ou “so”) e um exemplo curto. Evite enchimento e repita adjetivos apenas quando necessário.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks with my family because they help me relax and there are many trees that make the area peaceful. For example, last weekend we sat under a large tree and had a small picnic while the children played nearby.

Gợi ý: Seja mais direto e complete a ideia. Use uma estrutura clara: opinião + razão(s) + sugestão ou exemplo. Evite frases fragmentadas e melhore a gramática (por exemplo, “the regional government is” em vez de “the government here in regional to be”). Use vocabulário relevante como “investment”, “urban green spaces” e “public demand”.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they improve quality of life and offer green space for families. I think the regional government focuses too much on beaches and roads, so they should invest more in urban parks, especially in densely populated neighborhoods.

Gợi ý: Seja específico quanto ao lugar e explique por quê. Use frases claras e evite repetir palavras. Corrija nomes próprios e expressões: por exemplo, “Central Park in New York” e evite confusão com Orlando. Dê 1–2 razões ou uma lembrança desejada para enriquecer a resposta.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York because I have seen many photos of its large lawns and historic areas. It would be special to walk around the lake and visit the famous spots with my family, something we cannot do near our home.

× Yes, but see, my in my account is not common.

✓ Yes, but in my case it is not common.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and extra words ('see', duplicate 'my'). Use 'in my case' to express personal situation. Suggestion: remove filler 'see' and the extra 'my', and place 'in my case' before 'it is not common'.

× Have a lot of parks, uh, do it too.

✓ There are a lot of parks that do the same.

Original lacks a clear subject and proper verb structure. Use 'There are' for existence and clarify 'do the same' to indicate similarity. Suggestion: use 'There are' + plural noun and a relative clause for clarity.

× It's more complicated to, to walk in the park, etcetera with my family or my parents.

✓ It's more complicated to walk in the park with my family or my parents.

Repeated 'to' and filler 'etcetera' make the sentence ungrammatical. Remove duplication and vague 'etcetera'. Maintain infinitive 'to walk' followed by the prepositional phrase 'in the park'.

× But uh, I like, I remember that when I go to the.

✓ But I remember when I used to go to the park.

Sentence is incomplete and tense is inconsistent. 'I remember when I used to go' correctly places the action in past habitual. Add 'to the park' to complete the thought.

× Yeah, yeah. I love going to the park with my family, uh, because this moment, uh, I'm very relaxed and because you have a lot of trees over there, it's, it's more calm, calm, uh, quiet space.

✓ I love going to the park with my family because at that moment I feel very relaxed, and because there are a lot of trees it is a calmer, quieter space.

Mixed tenses and informal phrases ('this moment') cause confusion. Use 'at that moment I feel' for present feeling during the visit. Use 'there are' for plural 'trees' (existence) and adjectives 'calmer, quieter' with correct order. Remove fillers and duplicate words.

× It's, it's amazing time that I spend the time with my family in that place.

✓ It's an amazing time when I spend time with my family in that place.

Missing article 'an' before 'amazing time' and awkward repetition 'spend the time'. Use 'when' to link the experience. Suggestion: eliminate redundant 'the' and add the article.

× Sure, I would like, but the government here in regional to be specifically is very complicated.

✓ Sure, I would like more parks, but regional government here is quite complicated.

Awkward phrasing and extra words ('to be specifically'). Rearranged to subject 'regional government here' + verb 'is' + adjective 'complicated'. Suggestion: simplify and place modifiers next to the noun.

× Uh, in my opinion, in regional, the people, uh, concerned only about the beaches here and, and the roads, uh, because in Rio Janeiro we have a lot of beach here.

✓ In my opinion, regionally people are only concerned about the beaches and the roads because in Rio de Janeiro we have a lot of beaches.

Use adverb 'regionally' instead of 'in regional'. Missing verb 'are' after 'people'. Plural 'beaches' matches 'a lot of'. Correct place name 'Rio de Janeiro'. Suggestion: use adverbial forms and ensure subject-verb presence and noun plurality.

× It's a stunning place, but we need.

✓ It's a stunning place, but we need more green spaces and parks.

Incomplete sentence 'we need.' needs an object. Specify what is needed to complete the thought. Suggestion: add 'more green spaces and parks' to clarify.

× Oh, certainly, umm, central parking in New York, It's, uh, it's, uh, that's a dream for, for me and my family to visit over there.

✓ Oh, certainly. Central Park in New York is a dream for me and my family to visit.

Misnaming 'Central Park' as 'central parking', incorrect punctuation and repetition. Use the proper name 'Central Park' and a clear clause 'is a dream for me and my family to visit'. Remove filler repetitions.

× But I know in United States, but only Orlando, FL, but park over there in, in New York, it's, it's will be amazing.

✓ I have been to the United States only in Orlando, Florida, but the park in New York would be amazing to visit.

Missing article 'the' before 'United States', unclear chronology. Use 'have been to' for experience, specify 'Orlando, Florida', and correct future expression 'would be amazing to visit'. Remove extra fillers and ensure proper prepositions and articles.