Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Améliorez la fluidité et éliminez les hésitations répétées; organisez la réponse en une phrase thématique puis une ou deux phrases de détails précises. Travaillez la prononciation et la réduction des répétitions («I when I when I») et évitez les redondances entre «free» et «carefree».

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my family and friends to play games like football and tag, and I remember running until I was completely exhausted. Those visits made me feel independent and joyful.

Gợi ý: Corrigez les erreurs grammaticales et les mots mal choisis; structurez la réponse avec une phrase principale puis un exemple clair. Évitez les répétitions («I I») et les mots incorrects («fear independent»). Travaillez la liaison entre idées (par exemple: «because… For example…»).

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relieve stress and recharge. For example, after long hours at work I walk in a nearby park and listen to the birds, which helps me relax and clear my mind.

Gợi ý: Réduisez les hésitations («uh») et corrigez l'accord sujet-verbe («parks… help» → «parks… help» is okay but check surrounding grammar) ; formulez une raison claire puis une conséquence concrète. Évitez les formulations répétitives comme «must invest, therefore invest».

Ví dụ: Yes, I would. Increasing parks and green spaces helps people relax and improves mental health, so cities should invest more in public green areas to benefit residents' well‑being.

Gợi ý: Supprimez les hésitations et les répétitions («especially, uh, especially», «beautiful, uh, beautiful») ; commencez par une phrase claire puis ajoutez un ou deux détails précis comme exemples d'activités ou d'animaux à observer. Utilisez un vocabulaire descriptif pertinent («seasonal scenery», «traditional landscaping» sont bons).

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit national parks abroad, especially Japanese gardens, because I admire their seasonal scenery and traditional landscaping. I would also enjoy wildlife watching, for example spotting birds and small mammals in their natural habitat.

× Yes, I when I when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a kid.

The student omitted the auxiliary 'did' needed for past simple questions or short answers and repeated words. Correct form: 'Yes, I did when I was a kid.' Use 'did' for short affirmative response to 'Did you like...?' and remove repetition.

× I love going to parks with my family and my close friends.

✓ I loved going to parks with my family and my close friends.

The question asked about childhood, so past tense should be used. Change 'love' (present) to 'loved' (past simple) to match the time reference.

× It made me feel free, carefree and independent.

✓ It made me feel free, carefree, and independent.

Sentence is correct in tense but missing a comma before 'and' for clarity. Use the Oxford comma in lists to improve readability.

× We usually went there to play games like football or tag and I remember running around until I was exhausted.

✓ We usually went there to play games like football or tag, and I remember running around until I was exhausted.

Add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' connecting two independent clauses to correct sentence structure.

× Yes, I still go to parks now because they help me to refresh and forget the stress of work.

✓ Yes, I still go to parks now because they help me refresh and forget the stress of work.

After 'help' the infinitive can be used without 'to' in this context. 'Help me refresh' is more natural than 'help me to refresh.'

× This the green space and voice of birds re energize me.

✓ The green spaces and the voices of birds re-energize me.

Missing verb 'are' or incorrect article and singular/plural. Also 'voice of birds' should be plural. Use 'The green spaces and the voices of birds re-energize me.' and hyphenate 're-energize.'

× For example after long hours of work I I go there to unwind and fear independent.

✓ For example, after long hours of work I go there to unwind and feel independent.

Remove duplicated 'I'. 'Fear' is a wrong word; use 'feel' for emotion. Add a comma after 'For example' for correct punctuation.

× Yes, I would, uh, because creating more parks and green spaces help people to relax and clear their minds, uh, which uh, improve their mental well-being.

✓ Yes, I would, because creating more parks and green spaces helps people relax and clear their minds, which improves their mental well-being.

Subject-verb agreement error: singular noun phrase 'creating more parks and green spaces' (considered singular activity) or treat 'creating' as singular gerund; therefore use 'helps' and 'improves'. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'help' and filler 'uh' for clarity.

× Uh, so uh, cities must invest, therefore invest in green areas.

✓ So cities must therefore invest in green areas.

Redundant words and comma misuse. Combine 'therefore' properly and remove fillers for a concise sentence: 'So cities must therefore invest in green areas.'

× Yes, I would like to visit national parks abroad, especially, uh, especially Japanese gardens because I admire their beautiful, uh, beautiful seasonal scenery and distinctive traditional landscaping.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit national parks abroad, especially Japanese gardens, because I admire their beautiful seasonal scenery and distinctive traditional landscaping.

Remove repeated words and filler 'uh'. Place commas correctly and avoid redundancy: 'especially Japanese gardens' and 'beautiful seasonal scenery' are sufficient.

× I also enjoy observing wildlife, so I would love to spend time spotting animals.

✓ I also enjoy observing wildlife, so I would love to spend time spotting animals.

This sentence is grammatically correct and matches the context; no change needed.