Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be clear and direct: start with a concise topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid incorrect words (e.g. 'pubs' → 'parks') and awkward phrases ('surrounding their temperature'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were safe places to play with my friends. For example, I remember playing hide-and-seek under the trees and having picnics with my parents, which made those days very joyful.

Gợi ý: Keep the clear direct answer, then give one or two linked specific reasons or examples. Improve grammar (use articles: 'the park' or 'parks') and combine short choppy sentences with linking words (e.g. 'because', 'so'). Avoid repetition ('go to park' repeated).

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I find the natural scenery calming. For instance, I often walk in the park after work to relax and clear my mind, which helps reduce my stress.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and then give two concise, specific benefits using linking words. Correct grammar ('enjoy their free time', 'reduce people’s stress') and avoid wordiness and repetition ('enjoy' used many times).

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in the city because they provide free places for families to relax and socialise. Also, parks improve mental health by giving people a peaceful environment to exercise or unwind after work.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct answer, then name the park and give one or two clear, specific reasons why you want to visit. Fix factual/word errors ('Kathmandu district', 'young people', avoid 'dry picnics') and avoid repeating the park name too often. Use a linking word like 'because' or 'for example'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit Ratna Park in Kathmandu because it is centrally located and known for its greenery. For example, I would like to see families having picnics there and experience the lively atmosphere with children playing.

× If I used to go to pubs inside, I used to make a lot of fun with my friends and my parents, enjoying the surrounding their temperature.

✓ When I used to go to parks as a child, I used to have a lot of fun with my friends and my parents, enjoying the surroundings and the weather.

Original has incorrect word choices and gerund use: 'make a lot of fun' is incorrect; use 'have a lot of fun'. 'Pubs inside' is wrong contextually; likely 'parks'. 'enjoying the surrounding their temperature' mixes nouns and possessive incorrectly. Use 'enjoying the surroundings and the weather'. Improve by using correct collocations and gerund phrases.

× So it is the best time to enjoy it as a child in the park.

✓ It was the best time to enjoy being a child in the park.

Sentence is awkward and contains incorrect pronoun reference 'it'. Also tense should match past habitual 'used to' context. Rephrase to 'It was the best time to enjoy being a child in the park' for correct structure and clarity.

× Yes, absolutely. Nowadays I only go to park to enjoy the view, the natural beauty, that background.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Nowadays I only go to the park to enjoy the view and the natural beauty in the surroundings.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'park'. 'That background' is awkward; use 'the surroundings' or 'the scenery'. Use parallel structure with 'view and the natural beauty'.

× It is the peaceful environment in the park.

✓ The park has a peaceful environment.

Original uses 'It is the peaceful environment' which is unnatural. Rephrase to subject 'The park' and verb 'has' for natural adjective use. Alternatively 'It is a peaceful environment' would be grammatical but 'The park has a peaceful environment' is clearer.

× Sometimes I go to park and reduce my stressful routine of my work.

✓ Sometimes I go to the park to relieve the stress of my work routine.

Missing article 'the' before 'park'. 'Reduce my stressful routine of my work' is unidiomatic; use 'relieve the stress of my work routine' or 'reduce stress from my work'. Also use infinitive 'to relieve' for purpose.

× Yes, it is a very good idea to develop more parks in our city because many people can go in the parks and enjoy it their valuable time with their friends, parents and enjoy the natural beauty of that place.

✓ Yes, it is a very good idea to develop more parks in our city because many people can go to the parks and enjoy their time with friends and family while appreciating the natural beauty of those places.

Replace 'go in the parks' with 'go to the parks'. Remove incorrect 'enjoy it their valuable time' and use 'enjoy their time'. 'Parents' can be 'family' for natural collocation. Ensure plural agreement 'those places' for multiple parks.

× It helps to reduce the stress of the people from the daily routine activities and it is the most peaceful environment in the society nowadays.

✓ They help reduce people's stress from daily routines, and parks are among the most peaceful environments in society today.

Original has wrong article and preposition use: 'reduce the stress of the people from the daily routine activities' is awkward; use 'reduce people's stress from daily routines'. 'the most peaceful environment in the society nowadays' should be plural 'environments in society today'. Also match subject plurality: 'They' (parks) help.

× In Nepal, there is the famous park called Ratna Park, which is located at the center of the Kathandu district.

✓ In Nepal, there is a famous park called Ratna Park, which is located at the center of the Kathmandu district.

Article use: use 'a famous park' not 'the famous park' unless uniquely identified earlier. Also spelling correction 'Kathmandu'. The 'there is' construction is fine but needs correct article.

× Many people go to the Ratna Park to enjoy the beauty of that park.

✓ Many people go to Ratna Park to enjoy its beauty.

Do not need 'the' before proper park name when speaking generally: 'go to Ratna Park'. Use pronoun 'its' instead of 'that park' for conciseness and natural reference.

× Many children and young peoples can be seen in that park enjoying with their friends, having picnics, dry picnics and enjoy their valuable time.

✓ Many children and young people can be seen in the park enjoying time with friends, having picnics, and enjoying their time.

Use 'young people' not 'young peoples' (plural count noun). 'Enjoying with their friends' should be 'enjoying time with their friends'. 'Dry picnics' is unclear; remove or clarify. Ensure parallel verb forms: 'enjoying', 'having', 'enjoying' or better: 'enjoying time with friends and having picnics'.