Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (singular/plural, verb forms), avoid repetition, and add one specific detail. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, so). Keep to a maximum of 4–5 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were safe and spacious. For example, I used to ride my bike and play on the swings with my friends. I often visited the park with my parents and we usually had small picnics on Sundays, which I really enjoyed.

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and coherence. Use one strong topic sentence, then a linked supporting sentence with specific activities. Avoid unclear pronouns and fragments. Use linking phrases like "because", "for example", "sometimes" correctly.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are peaceful and help me relax after a busy day. For example, I often go for a short walk, sit on a bench to read my favorite book, or sometimes meet friends for coffee.

Gợi ý: Be specific and correct word choice. Begin with a direct sentence, then explain with a precise reason and a concrete example. Replace unclear words (e.g., "lecturing play") with accurate expressions like "take children to play". Use linking words to connect cause and effect.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide relaxing green spaces for exercise and socializing. For example, my neighborhood has almost no parks, so families often have to travel to another district to take their children to play.

Gợi ý: Improve grammar, clarity and specificity. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the park, then say where you heard about it and why you want to visit, using correct verb forms and singular/plural agreement. Use linking words like "because" and avoid vague phrases.

Ví dụ: I would like to visit Crook Food National Park in the future. I read about it in a newspaper article on environmental protection, and it caught my attention because it offers many activities and scenic areas where I could relax and enjoy nature.

× I enjoyed them because they were open and safe and they could play on swings and ride my bikes, for example.

✓ I enjoyed them because they were open and safe and I could play on swings and ride my bike, for example.

The student mixed plural and singular pronouns and nouns incorrectly. 'They' refers to 'parks' but the activities should be described from the speaker's perspective using 'I'. Also 'bike' should be singular when referring to the speaker's own bicycle. Suggestion: keep subject consistent (I) and use singular 'bike' or plural 'bikes' only if intending more than one.

× I often went there with my parents and weekends and we have small picnics at weekends and we have small picnics.

✓ I often went there with my parents on weekends and we had small picnics.

The original repeats phrases and has incorrect connector 'and weekends'. Use the preposition 'on' for days/time periods and keep tense consistent (past 'went' and 'had'). Remove repetition.

× I really do like going to the parks now because they are really peaceful and it helps me relax after busy days.

✓ I really do like going to parks now because they are really peaceful and they help me relax after busy days.

Subject agreement error: 'parks' is plural so verb should be plural 'help' rather than 'helps'. Also avoid unnecessary article 'the' unless referring to specific parks. Suggestion: match subject number with verb.

× For example, I often go there for a short walk or sit and read theirs on weekends, read my favorite books, what my favorite streams and sometimes I met my friends.

✓ For example, I often go there for a short walk, sit and read my favorite books on weekends, listen to my favorite streams, and sometimes meet my friends.

Multiple issues: wrong pronoun 'theirs' (should be noun 'books' with 'read'), incorrect tense 'met' (should be base form 'meet' after 'sometimes'), and unclear phrase 'what my favorite streams' corrected to 'listen to my favorite streams'. Ensure parallel structure in the list of activities.

× Well yes, I'd like to see more parks in the city because they're relaxing and give people a great place to exercise and meet.

✓ Well yes, I'd like to see more parks in the city because they're relaxing and give people a great place to exercise and meet friends.

The verb 'meet' usually needs an object like 'friends' or 'others' to be clear. Add an object to complete the phrase.

× For example, my neighborhood has very few green spaces, so families have to travel to another district to go for a walk or lecturing play.

✓ For example, my neighborhood has very few green spaces, so families have to travel to another district to go for a walk or to play.

'Lecturing play' is incorrect and likely a mistranslation. Use 'to play' for recreational activities and include 'to' before the infinitive for parallel structure. Remove 'lecturing' which is unrelated.

× Maybe Crook Food National Park. I first known about it on a newspaper about Environmental Protection and it really caught my attention about because they're really interesting and involves many activities and scenic spaces for me to relax and enjoy.

✓ Maybe Crook Food National Park. I first learned about it in a newspaper article about environmental protection and it really caught my attention because it's really interesting and involves many activities and scenic areas for me to relax and enjoy.

Multiple tense and form errors: 'first known' should be past 'first learned' or 'first heard', and use 'in a newspaper article' rather than 'on a newspaper'. Remove extra 'about' after 'caught my attention'. 'They're' (they are) is incorrect for referring to a park; use 'it's' (it is). 'Scenic spaces' is acceptable but 'scenic areas' is more natural. Also 'involves' matches singular 'it'.