Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct past tense verbs, avoid repetition, and add a brief specific detail. Keep it within 3–4 sentences. Use a clear topic sentence then one or two supporting details with linking words.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to the park near my home when I was a child. For example, I often spent whole afternoons there playing on the swings and climbing frames with my friends. Because of those visits, I have many happy memories from childhood.

Gợi ý: Correct tense and phrasing, reduce verbosity and avoid repeating words. Start with a direct answer, then give a concise reason using linking words (for example, "because" or "so"). Provide one specific example of how you use free time.

Ví dụ: Not really, because my schoolwork is very busy at the moment. Therefore, I usually spend my limited free time studying English or working on science projects, which I believe is a better use of my time right now.

Gợi ý: Avoid contradictory or unclear phrases and repetition. Give one clear reason and one specific example. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, definitely, because parks give people a place to relax and enjoy nature. For example, a new park with walking paths and benches would encourage families to go outside instead of spending time on screens.

Gợi ý: Improve accuracy and coherence: name the park or describe it clearly, correct grammar (e.g. "on social media", "the people seem friendly"), and give concise sensory details. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to visit Parc des Buttes-Chaumont in Paris, which I saw on social media. It looked beautiful with many trees, winding paths and green lawns, and the peaceful atmosphere seemed very relaxing.

× I remember Once Upon a time I go to the park near my home and I played there for an entire afternoon and I played the slice with my friends and it was a really memorable memory for me.

✓ I remember once upon a time I went to the park near my home; I played there for an entire afternoon and played games with my friends, and it was a really memorable experience for me.

The sentence mixes present tense 'go' with past context. Use past tense 'went' and 'played' for actions that happened. Also replace awkward phrase 'played the slice' with 'played games' and 'memorable memory' with 'memorable experience' to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: keep verbs in the past when recounting past events and choose concise nouns. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I'm unfortunately no because my schoolwork is quite busy nowadays and I don't have much free time now.

✓ Unfortunately, no; my schoolwork is quite busy nowadays and I don't have much free time.

The phrase 'I'm unfortunately no' is incorrect. Use 'Unfortunately, no' to respond negatively. Also avoid redundant 'now' with 'nowadays'. Ensure present simple 'is' and 'don't have' correctly describe current habitual state. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Instead I will use my free time that are so valuable to improve myself in English or in different science related subjects because I think it's more useful to improve myself in those times.

✓ Instead, I will use my free time, which is very valuable, to improve my English and other science-related subjects because I think it is more useful to improve myself at those times.

Pronoun and relative clause errors: 'that are' doesn't agree with singular 'free time'; use 'which is'. Also 'improve myself in English' is better as 'improve my English'. 'Different science related subjects' should be 'other science-related subjects'. Clarify 'those times' to refer to free time. Maintain future intention with 'will'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Parks can help people to feel relaxed and spend their free time there and accept spending their time on their screens.

✓ Parks can help people feel relaxed and spend their free time there instead of spending it on screens.

Conjunction and sentence structure: 'accept spending their time on their screens' is incorrect and unclear. Use a contrast 'instead of' to show parks are an alternative to screen time. Also omit 'to' after 'help' when followed by bare infinitive 'feel'. Grammar problem type ID:16

× I think playing in the parks is really a relaxing, comfortable way for them to relax and play in the park is a really good lecture activity for me.

✓ I think playing in parks is a really relaxing and comfortable way for people to unwind, and playing in the park is a very enjoyable activity for me.

Redundancy and awkward adjectives: 'relaxing, comfortable way for them to relax' repeats the idea. 'Lecture activity' is incorrect; likely 'leisure activity' or 'enjoyable activity' fits. Use plural 'parks' consistently and simpler structure. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I have seen a park in Paris in the social media like the rules and the people there are really so enjoyable and this it seems fun to play in that park.

✓ I have seen a park in Paris on social media; the rules and the people there seem really pleasant, and it looks like it would be fun to play in that park.

Preposition: use 'on social media' not 'in the social media'. Tense 'have seen' is OK for recent experience. 'Like the rules' unclear—clarified to 'the rules and the people there seem really pleasant'. Remove extra words 'this it'. 'Really so enjoyable' is ungrammatical; use 'really pleasant' or 'very enjoyable'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× There are so many trees and so many greeneries and the five are so relaxing and.

✓ There are so many trees and lots of greenery, and the vibe is very relaxing.

'Greeneries' is nonstandard; use 'greenery'. 'The five' is likely 'the vibe' or 'the feel'—correct to 'the vibe'. Remove trailing 'and'. Use concise parallel structure. Grammar problem type ID:13