Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and sentence structure, make a clear topic sentence, add specific details and linking words. Correct verb forms (e.g., "I was really into"), use concise phrasing and avoid redundancy. Limit to up to 4–5 short sentences and use one linking word to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I was really into going to parks when I was a child because they were peaceful after school. For example, I often rode my bike there with my mother and other children from the neighborhood. Also, we sometimes played games on the grass, which made those afternoons memorable.

Gợi ý: Fix minor grammar errors and improve cohesion. Use a clear topic sentence stating current habit, then link to reasons and effects with connecting words (e.g., "however", "because", "so"). Be specific about activities and frequency to add content depth.

Ví dụ: I don't go to parks very often because my schedule is hectic. However, when I have spare time I usually walk or do light exercise there to improve my health, and I appreciate the peaceful atmosphere because it helps me relax.

Gợi ý: Use correct tense and clearer phrasing; give one or two specific reasons and a brief consequence. Replace vague phrasing like "tried to make new policy" with accurate expressions ("is planning/has introduced policies"). Keep it concise and linked.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would. Recently the government in Vietnam has been planning to build more parks so citizens can enjoy green space. This would encourage children to play outside more often instead of spending too much time on smartphones.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear, direct answer naming specific places and use correct prepositions (e.g., "parks in Europe or America"). Avoid filler words and be specific about what you want to see or do. Use linking words to explain reasons or comparisons.

Ví dụ: I don't have a specific park in mind, but I would like to visit parks in Europe or the United States. I want to compare how they are designed and see how local people use those spaces, for example whether they have large playgrounds or walking trails.

× When I was a kid, I really into going to parks because of the tranquility that brings to me after school.

✓ When I was a kid, I was really into going to parks because of the tranquility that they brought me after school.

Missing auxiliary verb 'was' causes incorrect verb form; 'really into' requires linking verb 'was'. 'Brings' should match past context 'brought'. Also use 'they' to refer to parks and omit 'to' after 'brought'. Suggestion: include correct past tense auxiliary and ensure pronoun and verb tense agreement.

× More than that, I can enjoy the time to ride a bike with my mother or other kids with the same neighborhood.

✓ More than that, I could enjoy riding a bike with my mother or other kids from the same neighborhood.

Phrase 'can enjoy the time to ride' is awkward and tenses should match past context; use 'could' for past ability. 'Ride a bike' as an activity is better as the gerund 'riding'. Preposition 'with the same neighborhood' is incorrect; use 'from' to indicate origin. Suggestion: use modal 'could' for past and gerund after 'enjoy'.

× Well, to be honest, I don't go to the park often because my hectic schedule.

✓ Well, to be honest, I don't go to the park often because of my hectic schedule.

Missing preposition 'of' after 'because' when giving a noun phrase reason: the correct idiom is 'because of'. Suggestion: include 'of' when following 'because' with a noun phrase.

× However, when I have spare time, I try to go to the parks or outside and enjoy some outdoor activities to improve my health and also enjoy the tranquility.

✓ However, when I have spare time, I try to go to the park or go outside and enjoy outdoor activities to improve my health and enjoy the tranquility.

Use singular 'the park' when speaking generally about visiting parks; 'the parks' is odd here. Repetition 'enjoy some outdoor activities' can be simplified to 'enjoy outdoor activities'. Suggestion: use consistent article use and avoid redundancy.

× Well, absolutely yes. Right now in Vietnam, the government tried to make new policy and build more parks that the citizens can enjoy the tranquility and the children may spend more time outdoor activities instead of smart devices.

✓ Well, absolutely yes. Right now in Vietnam, the government is trying to make new policies and build more parks so that citizens can enjoy the tranquility and children can spend more time doing outdoor activities instead of using smart devices.

Tense: 'tried' implies past; use present continuous 'is trying' for ongoing action. 'Make new policy' should be plural 'policies'. Use 'so that' for purpose, and 'may' is awkward here; use 'can' for ability. 'Spend more time outdoor activities' missing 'doing' and 'using smart devices' is the correct verb phrase. Suggestion: match tense to 'right now', pluralize nouns where needed, and add necessary verb forms.

× Well, right now I cannot think about that, but of course I really want to go to the parks and some Europe or American.

✓ Well, right now I cannot think of that, but of course I really want to go to parks in Europe or America.

Use 'think of' not 'think about' for immediate inability to recall. 'Go to the parks and some Europe or American' is incorrect: 'parks in Europe or America' expresses the intended meaning. 'American' should be the noun 'America'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and geographic nouns.

× I want to see how different the parks in my country and other country look like and also enjoy the environment there with natives, uh, foreign people.

✓ I want to see how the parks in my country and in other countries differ, and also enjoy the environment there with local and foreign people.

Sentence has pronoun and noun agreement issues: 'other country' should be plural 'other countries'. 'how different ... look like' is incorrect; use 'how ... differ' or 'how ... look'. 'natives' is awkward in this context; 'local' is more natural. Suggestion: use parallel structures ('parks ... differ') and consistent plural nouns, and prefer 'local and foreign people'.