Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答要更直接、语法更准确，并减少重复。注意时态一致（过去时描述童年），用一到两句主题句然后用一到两句补充细节，避免冗长和口语填词。可练习将相似信息合并并使用连接词如“because”、“so”来使句子连贯。

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I usually went with my parents and we often had picnics or played games there, so I have many happy memories.

Gợi ý: 回答表达能传达意思但重复和犹豫较多。需要简洁表达原因并用恰当词汇描述感受。避免多次重复词语（如“green”）和停顿词（如“and and”）。可加入一两个具体活动来丰富内容。

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because the greenery helps me relax. After a busy day I like to sit on a bench and read or take a short walk among the trees.

Gợi ý: 回答含义明确但结构混乱且有大量重复。应先给出直接回答，再用一到两句简洁具体说明好处，如放松、社交和儿童活动。避免语言冗余并使用连接词如“for example”或“so”。

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in my city. They provide peaceful spaces for relaxation, and children can play and meet friends, which improves community life.

Gợi ý: 回答有想法但语法和用词不够准确，发音犹豫反映在书面表达上。应先直接回答想去的公园名称或类型，再说明具体原因及个人关联（例如学习景观设计）。注意单复数和句子简洁。

Ví dụ: I'd like to visit various historic or classical gardens in the future because they are beautifully designed. As a student studying landscape design, I can learn a lot from their layout and plant choices.

× Of course I like when I was a child, I usually go to the park with my parents.

✓ Of course I liked it when I was a child; I usually went to the park with my parents.

该句混用了现在时“like/ go”与过去时间状语“when I was a child/ usually (过去习惯)”。谈论过去的习惯应使用过去时。建议把动词改为过去时（liked, went），并用分号或逗号+连词把两个分句连接清楚。

× We play or part.

✓ We played or had fun.

原句结构不完整且单词“part”用法不当。要表达“玩耍/玩”或“玩耍或聚会”，应使用完整动词短语，如 played 或 had fun。由于是在叙述过去习惯，用过去时。

× I'll have a picnic there in the park in I can think that I have a good time in my childhood in the park.

✓ We would have picnics in the park; I can say I had a good time there in my childhood.

原句混合了将来时（I'll）和对过去的描述，且结构混乱。应把句子拆成两部分，第一部分说明过去常做的事（would have picnics 或 had picnics），第二部分总结过去感受（I had a good time）。同时调整时态一致性。

× Nowadays I still go to the park because it can make me relax after hardest work.

✓ Nowadays I still go to the park because it helps me relax after hard work.

原句用“can make me relax”虽可理解但不自然；“hardest work”比较级/最高级使用不当，描述一般的繁重工作应用“hard work”。建议用现在时的常用表达“helps me relax”。

× Of course I like it because in the in the park I can I feel always very relaxed when I was and and watching the green trees and green green plants can make my eyes feel comfortable.

✓ Of course I like it because in the park I always feel very relaxed; watching the green trees and plants makes my eyes feel comfortable.

原句存在时态、语序和重复问题。不能在现在喜好句中再使用过去时“when I was”。应保持现在时（I always feel）；主语单复数与动词须一致（plants makes → make，但主语是 watching … は作为主语时用单数动名词 makes）。同时删去重复词并整理语序。

× All of them can make me feel relaxed after a hard day's work.

✓ All of them make me feel relaxed after a hard day's work.

此处强调习惯性事实，用一般现在时更自然，去掉“can”使陈述更肯定。

× Of course I want because the park is a place which can make people feel calm and can make people stop their peace and stop enjoy the enjoy the nature surround surround them eyes and also park is a good park for a good place for child to play and make friends.

✓ Of course I want more parks because a park is a place that makes people feel calm and helps them enjoy the surrounding nature. Parks are also good places for children to play and make friends.

原句冗长、重复且语法混乱：“stop their peace”不合逻辑，应改为“helps them enjoy/feel peaceful”；重复词（enjoy the enjoy、surround surround）要删除。注意名词单复数和定冠词（children, parks）。将句子拆成两句更清晰。

× I want to go to the all kinds of soldier garden in the future as they are very beautiful and it is a very classical garden design.

✓ I want to visit all kinds of soldier gardens in the future because they are very beautiful and have a very classical garden design.

“to the all kinds of”中定冠词使用错误，正确说法为“visit all kinds of ...”或“go to the ...”。名词复数需一致（gardens），并把原因从句用 because 连接。

× It is a very good example as a as a student who are learning the landscape design.

✓ It is a very good example for a student who is learning landscape design.

原句中关系从句主语“who”指代“a student”，应与单数动词“is”一致，而不是“are”。另外短语“as a as a”重复，应删去，介词用“for”更自然，去掉多余定冠词。