Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Reduce hesitation words and repetition, produce a clear topic sentence then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep answers concise (max 4–5 sentences) and avoid filler like 'umm' and repeated phrases. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g. "it kind of relaxed me" → "it relaxed me") and use more precise vocabulary (e.g. 'scenery' instead of 'nice to my eyes').

Ví dụ: I loved going to parks as a child because they relaxed me and boosted my mood. For example, I enjoyed watching the trees and flowers, which felt calming, and I liked seeing families and dogs playing together because it made the place feel friendly. Because of these things, parks became my favourite place to unwind.

Gợi ý: Make the main point clear in one sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition ('also' used many times) and incorrect collocations ('take off your mind' → 'take your mind off stress', 'to distress' incorrect). Use simpler, accurate phrases and reduce list-like repetition.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me take my mind off stress. For instance, I often have small picnics with friends where we share sandwiches and chat, and we sometimes play frisbee, which always lifts my mood.

Gợi ý: Give a concise main answer then support it with clear, accurate reasons. Avoid vague or awkward explanations; use correct scientific phrasing (trees produce oxygen and help reduce pollution). Remove hesitations and repetition. Limit to 2–3 sentences and include linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because trees improve air quality and reduce pollution. For example, parks provide green spaces that absorb carbon dioxide and produce oxygen, making the city healthier for residents.

Gợi ý: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence naming the park(s), then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and repetition ('nice' repeated). Use correct grammar (e.g. 'parks around London are well maintained'). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I'd like to visit the parks in London, such as Hyde Park, because they are well maintained and have historical features. For instance, I want to see the Serpentine and the formal gardens, and enjoy walking in green, carefully kept surroundings.

× Yes, I'd love going to the park as a child because it kinda relaxes me.

✓ Yes, I loved going to the park as a child because it kind of relaxed me.

The original mixes past-time reference ('as a child') with a present modal 'I'd love' plus '-ing' form. Use simple past 'loved' to match past time. Also 'kinda' is informal; use 'kind of' and match past tense 'relaxed'. Suggestion: Use consistent tense that matches time expressions (e.g., 'as a child' -> past tense).

× Umm it it's good for my mental health and well-being.

✓ It was good for my mental health and well-being.

Because the time reference is past ('as a child'), the adjective phrase should be used with past tense linking verb 'was' rather than present 'is'. Suggestion: Keep the verb tense consistent with time markers.'

× It's also nice and relaxing to my eyes.

✓ It was also pleasant and relaxing to look at.

The phrase 'relaxing to my eyes' is awkward in standard English. 'Pleasant and relaxing to look at' conveys visual relaxation; use past tense 'was' to match 'as a child'. Suggestion: Rephrase for natural collocation (e.g., 'relaxing to look at').

× I can feel the breeze in in the around my surroundings,

✓ I could feel the breeze in my surroundings,

Redundant and incorrect prepositions 'in in the around' should be reduced to a single correct preposition 'in' or 'around'. Also match past tense 'could' for past reference. Suggestion: Eliminate repetition and choose a single preposition appropriate for the context.'

× I can see the dogs walking in the park with their UMM with their families and I can see lots of people laughing.

✓ I could see dogs walking in the park with their families, and I could see lots of people laughing.

Use past tense 'could' to match past-time narration and remove filler 'the' before 'dogs' unless referring to specific dogs. Also combine clauses with proper punctuation. Suggestion: Maintain consistent tense and remove hesitations in written form.'

× I still love going to parks now because it's also the best way for distractions and also take off your mind from stress and to distress.

✓ I still love going to parks because they are a good way to distract yourself from stress and to relieve stress.

Original mixes singular/plural and incorrect infinitive forms. 'Parks' is plural so use 'they are'. 'Best way for distractions' is unidiomatic; use 'a good way to distract yourself' and 'relieve stress' rather than 'to distress'. Suggestion: Ensure subject-number agreement and use standard collocations like 'distract yourself' and 'relieve stress'.

× And also it's a good way to do some picnics in the park with your family and friends, do some little sandwich together, eat together, laugh together, had a good time together and also play some some small.

✓ It's also a good way to have picnics in the park with family and friends: make some small sandwiches, eat together, laugh, have a good time, and play some small games.

Use 'have picnics' rather than 'do some picnics'. 'Some little sandwich' is ungrammatical—use 'small sandwiches' or 'some small sandwiches'. Maintain parallel verb forms: 'make', 'eat', 'laugh', 'have'. Use 'play some small games' for clarity. Suggestion: Keep parallel structure and correct noun quantifiers (countable plural nouns require plural forms).

× Of course I'd love seeing more parks in my city because it's a good way for cleansing the air.

✓ Of course I'd love to see more parks in my city because they help cleanse the air.

With 'I'd love' the infinitive 'to see' is preferred over the -ing form 'seeing'. Also 'parks' plural agrees with 'they help cleanse' rather than 'it's a good way'. Suggestion: Use correct verb patterns after 'would like/love' and ensure subject-verb agreement.'

× It's emitting the, umm, the oxygen.

✓ They produce oxygen.

Parks/trees 'emit oxygen' is awkward; use 'produce oxygen'. 'The oxygen' is incorrect in this context; use uncountable 'oxygen' or 'produce oxygen'. Also match plural subject 'they'. Suggestion: Use correct verb choice and avoid unnecessary definite articles.'

× So we release the carbon dioxide from our body through breathing out and then we inhale oxygen.

✓ We release carbon dioxide from our bodies by exhaling, and then we inhale oxygen.

Use plural 'bodies' to match 'we'. 'Breathing out' is better as 'exhaling'. Omit 'the' before gases when speaking generally. Suggestion: Use standard verbs for physiological processes and correct plural forms.'

× So the more the more umm, parks and trees. In the city where I live, it's better because.

✓ So the more parks and trees there are in the city where I live, the better it is.

Original is fragmented and repeats 'the more'. Construct the comparative correlative 'the more... the better' and include the verb 'there are'. Suggestion: Use complete comparative structures and avoid sentence fragments.'

× I think the parts that I like to go in the future were is the park around London,

✓ I think the parks I would like to visit in the future are the parks around London,

Multiple errors: 'parts' should be 'parks'. Use 'parks' plural with 'are'. 'Were is' is incorrect and confusing; use 'are' or 'would like to visit'. Suggestion: Use correct noun ('park' vs 'parks') and match verb number with the subject.'

× because most park there are well developed and well looked after being close to the King and Queen so near the parks around there would be nice to see umm, it's very, uh, nice to see nice places, you know, that are well looked after.

✓ because most parks there are well developed and well looked after, being near the royal residences, so the parks around there would be nice to see. It's very pleasant to see places that are well looked after.

Use plural 'parks'. 'Being close to the King and Queen' is awkward; 'near the royal residences' is more natural. Remove repeated 'nice' and filler words. Split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: Use precise vocabulary and avoid repetition and fillers.'