Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장이 어색하고 문법 오류와 단어 선택 실수가 많습니다. 먼저 주요 내용(좋아했는지)과 이유(무엇을 했는지)를 명확한 주제문과 1~2개의 구체적 세부사항으로 나눠 말하세요. 접속사(and, because, so 등)를 적절히 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어주고, 과거 시제와 복수/단수 형태를 정확히 쓰세요. 예: 'I liked going to the park as a child'로 시작하고, 'we played baseball and made drawings' 같은 구체적 활동을 덧붙이세요.

Ví dụ: I liked going to the park as a child because it was where we played baseball and made little drawings. The place felt more like a playground than a formal park, and those simple games left me with many happy memories.

Gợi ý: 의미 전달이 부분적으로 되지만 어색한 표현과 문법 오류가 있어 점수가 낮습니다. 현재의 취향을 주제문으로 말한 뒤 이유와 구체적 활동(예: 산책, 반려견과 놀기)을 연결어(‘because’, ‘so’, ‘nowadays’)로 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 또한 'work'와 'playing'을 혼동한 부분을 고치고, 불명확한 표현('better pill work')은 정확한 단어로 바꾸세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks as an adult, but it feels different now. These days I often go there to walk my dog and relax because I prefer a slower pace and some quiet time rather than busy activities.

Gợi ý: 의견은 분명하지만 문법(관사, 복수형)과 반복이 잦아 유창성이 떨어집니다. 먼저 간단한 주제문으로 찬성 여부를 말하고, 도시 비교(Seoul vs current city)와 이유(녹지 부족, 해안 도시)를 논리적으로 연결하세요. 관사(a/the)와 복수형(parks, green spaces) 사용에 주의하고 반복 표현을 줄이세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Compared to Seoul, where there are some green areas, the coastal city I live in now has very few green spaces, so adding more parks would improve residents' quality of life.

Gợi ý: 문법 오류(시제, 수일치)와 문장의 미완성이 있어 이해하기 어렵습니다. 먼저 미래에 가고 싶은 공원을 명확히 말하고, 그 이유(예: 자연, 사슴 관찰, 역사)를 구체적으로 제시하세요. 불필요한 정보는 빼고 하나의 완결된 문장으로 마무리하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to visit Richmond Park in the UK in the near future because it is famous for its large open spaces and wild deer. I remember hearing about its peaceful atmosphere, and I want to see it for myself.

× Yes, I like I went to park as a little child, but I don't think we can call it a park.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park as a child, but I don't think we could really call it a park.

The student mixes present tense 'like' with past events 'went' causing tense inconsistency. Use past tense 'liked' and the gerund 'going' to talk about habitual past actions. Also include the definite article 'the' before 'park' when referring to a specific place. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent (past) and use 'the park' and 'going'.

× I prefer a leaper as a battlefield because we play baseball and made the portraits and doing some work game there.

✓ I preferred a field as our playground because we played baseball, made portraits, and did some work-related games there.

Several issues: 'leaper' is incorrect word choice; likely 'field' or 'playground' is intended. 'Prefer' should be past tense 'preferred' to match narration. Parallel verb forms are required: use past simple for series of past actions ('played', 'made', 'did'). 'Doing some work game' is ungrammatical and unclear; change to 'did some work-related games' or similar. Suggestion: Choose correct nouns and keep verbs in the same tense and parallel form.

× It was good memory.

✓ They were good memories.

Countable noun 'memory' requires plural 'memories' when referring to multiple recollections; agreement with 'good' remains 'good memories'. If referring to a single recollection, use 'It was a good memory.' Suggestion: Decide singular or plural and use appropriate article or plural form.

× Yes, I still like going to park as a adult now, but the feeling is quite different now.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park as an adult, but the feeling is quite different now.

Missing definite article before 'park' and wrong article 'a' before vowel-starting 'adult' requires 'an adult'. Tense 'still like' is fine for present. Suggestion: Use 'the park' for specific/general park visits, and 'an adult' for correct article.

× I like to work and I play with my dog and I like a slow working rather than doing some better pill work.

✓ I like to work and I play with my dog, and I prefer a slower pace of work rather than doing more intense or demanding tasks.

Phrases 'a slow working' and 'better pill work' are ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'prefer' for preference, 'a slower pace of work' for noun phrase, and 'more intense or demanding tasks' to clarify meaning. Maintain parallel structure. Suggestion: Replace literal incorrect words with clear, idiomatic expressions.

× Yes, I like more park in my city.

✓ Yes, I would like more parks in my city.

Count noun 'park' needs plural 'parks' when asking for increased number. Also use modal 'would like' to express desire politely. Suggestion: Use plural form for countable nouns when increasing quantity.

× In Seoul there are few green there, but in in Cheng which I live in here now, we don't have much green here.

✓ In Seoul there is little greenery, but in Cheng, where I live now, we don't have much greenery.

'Green' used as a noun is incorrect; use 'greenery' or 'green spaces'. 'Few' vs 'little' depends on countability; 'greenery' is uncountable so use 'little'. Remove duplicate 'in' and improve relative clause to 'where I live now.' Suggestion: Use correct noun forms and prepositions; 'where' connects clauses naturally.

× This is a seaside city but completely lack of green.

✓ This is a seaside city but it completely lacks greenery.

Missing subject 'it' and verb agreement: 'lack' should be 'lacks' for third person singular. Use 'greenery' instead of 'green' and include 'completely' before verb. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement and use appropriate noun forms.

× So I like to see more park in my area.

✓ So I would like to see more parks in my area.

Again 'park' should be plural 'parks' when requesting an increase. Use 'would like' for polite expression. Suggestion: Use plural for countable nouns when increasing quantity.

× Once I lived in UK there is many park over there.

✓ Once I lived in the UK; there were many parks over there.

Tense consistency: past 'lived' requires past 'were' not present 'is'. Include definite article 'the' before 'UK' and plural 'parks'. Suggestion: Use past tense for both clauses and correct articles and plurals.

× One park name is Richmond Park.

✓ One park's name is Richmond Park.

Smoother phrasing uses possessive 'park's name' or 'One park is called Richmond Park.' Original lacks a linking verb. Suggestion: Use 'is called' or possessive form for naming things.

× They say there are some books over there so but I didn't see any books up there.

✓ They say there are some deer there, but I didn't see any of them.

Context likely refers to wildlife in Richmond Park; 'books' is incorrect. 'Up there' awkward — use 'there'. Use 'any of them' for pronoun reference. If 'books' was intended, keep 'books' but ensure consistent reference. Suggestion: Use correct noun and consistent demonstratives/pronouns.

× So in near future I would like to go Richmond Park and.

✓ So in the near future I would like to go to Richmond Park.

Missing article 'the' in 'the near future' and missing preposition 'to' after 'go'. Remove trailing conjunction. Suggestion: Use 'go to [place]' and include 'the' with 'near future.'