Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and use past-tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I loved going to parks as a child.”), then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition like “I used to” three times and correct grammar (e.g. “the happiest part”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often played in the sandbox and rode the slides, and I also met many of my friends there, which made those afternoons the happiest part of my day.

Gợi ý: Give a direct answer with one clear reason and use correct grammar. Reduce fillers (uh) and avoid repetitive phrases like “right now.” Use linking words to connect idea (e.g. “but”, “because”, “so”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I still like going to parks, but I rarely have the time these days because my work schedule is very busy, so it is difficult for me to visit parks regularly.

Gợi ý: Give a direct opinion and support it with one or two specific reasons using linking words. Replace vague phrases like “green energy” with clearer terms (e.g. “green space”, “improved air quality”). Remove filler words and keep sentences concise.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would. More parks would provide green space and improve air quality, and they create lively, family-friendly areas where children and older people can exercise and socialise.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and give a specific plan or example of a park you want to visit or an activity you would do there. Avoid fillers and use clearer phrasing (e.g. “to relax and recharge”). Limit to one or two sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I plan to visit local parks more often in the future to relax and recharge; for instance, I want to take weekend walks in a nearby botanical garden to enjoy the greenery and clear my mind.

× Yes, I love going to the park as a child because I used to play with the sand and I used to ride the slides and I used to love it.

✓ Yes, I loved going to the park as a child because I used to play with the sand, ride the slides, and really enjoy it.

The speaker describes childhood (past), so present tense 'love' is incorrect. Use past tense 'loved'. Also streamline repetitive 'I used to' by using it once then parallel verbs, and remove redundant 'I used to love it'. Suggestion: maintain past tense when talking about habitual actions in childhood and use parallel verb forms for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× And I love going to parks because there I met more of my friends, which was the most happiest part of my day.

✓ And I loved going to parks because I met more of my friends there, which was the happiest part of my day.

First, tense should be past ('loved' and 'met') for childhood. 'There I met' is awkward; place adverb 'there' should follow the verb or object. 'Most happiest' is incorrect because 'happiest' is already a superlative; 'most' is redundant. Suggestion: use 'the happiest' and position adverbs naturally. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× Yes, I would love to go to a park now, but uh, due to my schedule right now because how life have been so busy right now, uh, me going to park is kind of very difficult because I do not get enough time to go to parks.

✓ Yes, I would love to go to a park now, but due to my schedule and how busy life has been, going to a park is very difficult because I do not get enough time.

Multiple issues: 'have been' should be 'has been' because the subject 'life' is singular (third person). 'Me going to park' is nonstandard; use the gerund phrase 'going to a park' or 'my going to a park'. Remove redundant 'right now' and 'because' duplication. Also 'to park' needs the article 'a'. Suggestion: use correct subject-verb agreement, proper gerund structures, and avoid repeated words. Grammar problem type ID: 27

× Uh, that adds more green energy and more liveliness in the areas and uh, seeing, uh, the children and the old people walking and playing in the park, that is a very wholesome moment.

✓ That adds more greenery and liveliness to the area, and seeing the children and older people walking and playing in the park is a very wholesome moment.

Use 'to the area' rather than 'in the areas' for intended meaning. 'Green energy' is not the intended phrase; 'greenery' or 'green space' fits parks. 'Old people' is better phrased as 'older people' or 'elderly people' for politeness. Remove unnecessary commas and filler words. Suggestion: choose correct prepositions and more appropriate nouns for clarity and tone. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Uh, yes. I would like to go to parks in my future because, uh, I would like to keep some time away from my busy schedule and spend it with the greenery, with the liveliness in the parks.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to parks in the future because I want to set aside some time from my busy schedule to spend it among the greenery and liveliness of the parks.

Use 'in the future' rather than 'in my future'; 'would like' is OK but repeating it is redundant so use 'want' for variety. 'Keep some time away' is awkward; 'set aside some time' is more natural. Use 'among the greenery' and 'liveliness of the parks' for better preposition and noun usage. Suggestion: prefer natural collocations and avoid repetition. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× And so that, uh, it refreshes my mind and it regenerates my whole mood.

✓ This refreshes my mind and regenerates my mood.

The filler 'and so that, uh' is unnecessary; start with the subject 'This' to refer to spending time in parks. Use present simple 'refreshes' and 'regenerates' when describing general effects; keep concise by removing 'my whole' which is redundant. Suggestion: use clear subject and concise verbs to express general truths. Grammar problem type ID: 8