Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating 'especially', use correct tense and plural forms, and add one specific detail. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes. I loved going to the local park about ten minutes from my home. I often went with my grandmother, who introduced me to her friends, which helped me become more confident speaking to strangers. I also made several close friends there and we used to play games together every afternoon.

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and fluency: avoid awkward phrases like 'I do my some daily' and 'relax my mind exceptionally'. Use linking words (because, so) naturally and be specific about routines. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Definitely. As a dietitian, I try to live healthily, so I walk in the nearby park every morning to relax and get fresh air. I also use the open areas for short workouts because there is plenty of green space, and sometimes I meet friends there for a quick chat.

Gợi ý: Organize ideas into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting reasons using linking phrases. Correct grammar (e.g., 'high-rise', 'outskirts') and avoid wordiness. Be specific about what kind of parks or benefits you want.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would. My city is getting crowded and many green areas have been lost to high-rise buildings, so people lack space for exercise. I hope future development plans include more parks, especially in the outskirts, to give families places to relax and children room to play.

Gợi ý: Be specific and accurate with names and grammar. Use linking words to explain reasons and give one or two concrete details about what you want to see. Avoid vague phrases like 'countless video' and 'hybrid cats' unless clarified.

Ví dụ: Yes. I would love to visit the Gir National Park in Gujarat because it protects endangered species like the Asiatic lion. I have seen many videos about their conservation work and I want to observe the animal-care practices and guided safaris to learn more about their efforts.

× Yes, I enjoyed a lot especially going to the local park which was just 10 minutes away from my home.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed it a lot, especially going to the local park which was just 10 minutes away from my home.

The sentence is missing the object pronoun 'it' after 'enjoyed' and the adverb 'a lot' should follow the verb phrase; placing 'especially' after the comma clarifies the focus. Suggestion: include the object 'it' when using 'enjoy' with a general activity and place adverbs like 'a lot' directly after the verb phrase. Grammar problem type ID: 20

× Especially with my grandmother, she used to introduce me to lots of her friends so that I can develop good public speaking skills.

✓ Especially with my grandmother, she used to introduce me to lots of her friends so that I could develop good public speaking skills.

The modal/time reference is inconsistent: 'used to' indicates past habit, so the clause of purpose should use past modal 'could' rather than present 'can'. Also the sentence begins with 'Especially with my grandmother' which is a fragment-like modifier but acceptable when connected. Suggestion: match verb tenses in both clauses when describing past habits. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Moreover, I have made lots of friend in that park.

✓ Moreover, I have made lots of friends in that park.

The noun 'friend' should be plural 'friends' after 'lots of' because 'lots of' requires a plural count noun. Suggestion: use 'friends' or 'a lot of friends' for correct plural agreement. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Definitely yes. Being a dietitian, I practice what I preach, so visiting a nearby public park for my daily walk helps me to unwind and relax my mind exceptionally.

✓ Definitely yes. Being a dietitian, I practice what I preach, so visiting a nearby public park for my daily walk helps me unwind and relax my mind.

The infinitive 'helps me to unwind' can omit 'to'; 'relax my mind exceptionally' is awkward—'exceptionally' is misplaced and unnecessary. Suggestion: use 'helps me unwind and relax my mind' or 'helps me relax' for more natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID:20

× Moreover, I do my some daily physical workout over there as it has enough green space and sometime I run into my friend.

✓ Moreover, I do some daily physical workouts there because it has enough green space, and sometimes I run into my friends.

Word order 'do my some' is incorrect; use 'do some daily physical workouts' or 'do my daily workouts'. 'Over there' can be simplified to 'there'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb of frequency). 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' if encountering different people. Suggestion: use correct determiner order, pluralize when needed, and use 'sometimes' for recurring events. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Definitely yes, my city has become overcrowded and most of the green space is taken by high riser buildings and people are struggling to do their daily activity because they themselves have limited space.

✓ Definitely yes. My city has become overcrowded, and most of the green space is taken by high-rise buildings, so people are struggling to do their daily activities because they have limited space.

Run-on sentence and awkward phrasing: 'high riser buildings' should be 'high-rise buildings'; 'daily activity' should be plural 'daily activities'; 'they themselves have limited space' is redundant—'they have limited space' suffices. Suggestion: split into clearer clauses, correct compound adjectives, and ensure noun number agreement. Grammar problem type ID:26

× And I really hope for as my city is being planned nowadays especially in outskirt area so it will have more green space.

✓ I really hope that, as my city is being planned nowadays—especially in the outskirts—it will include more green space.

Starting with 'And' is informal; 'hope for as' is ungrammatical. Use 'hope that' to introduce the content of the hope. 'Outskirt area' should be 'outskirts' or 'outskirt areas'. Suggestion: use 'hope that' and rephrase for clarity and correct noun forms. Grammar problem type ID:16

× I'm highly interested to explore Natural Park which is situated in Gujarat.

✓ I'm very interested in exploring the Natural Park, which is situated in Gujarat.

Use 'interested in' rather than 'interested to'; use gerund 'exploring' after 'interested in'. If 'Natural Park' is a proper name, include the definite article if customary: 'the Natural Park'. Also add a comma before the nonrestrictive relative clause. Suggestion: use 'interested in exploring' and include appropriate article. Grammar problem type ID:22

× I saw countless video of it as it is not only preserving endangered species but also taking care of some hybrid cats and I really wanted to know how they keep their animals with utmost care.

✓ I have seen countless videos of it; it not only preserves endangered species but also takes care of some hybrid cats, and I really want to know how they keep their animals with the utmost care.

'Saw' can be updated to present perfect 'have seen' for recent experience; 'video' should be plural 'videos'. Use present simple 'preserves' and 'takes care' to describe what the park does currently. 'Really wanted' conflicts with present interest—use 'really want'. Add 'the' before 'utmost care'. Suggestion: match tense consistently and pluralize count nouns; use articles where needed. Grammar problem type ID:5