Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장 구조와 문법 오류를 고치고 발화를 자연스럽게 줄이세요. 주제문을 분명히 말한 뒤 구체적 세부사항(무슨 활동을 했는지, 누구와 갔는지, 기분)을 1~2문장으로 덧붙이세요. 연결어(그리고, 그래서, 그래서 나는)를 활용해 문장이 자연스럽게 이어지도록 하세요. 반복(예: 'I I', 'parks and.')과 불필요한 단어를 제거하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often ran around the playground and played games with my siblings, and we bought snacks from a food truck nearby. Those outings made me feel happy and free.

Gợi ý: 발음과 문법을 개선하고 문장을 명확히 하세요. 주제문 후 자녀와 함께 가는 이유나 활동을 구체적으로 한두 문장으로 설명하세요. 소유격과 단수/복수 형태(my children’s → my children) 및 동사 형태(my children's wants → my children want)를 정확히 사용하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually go with my children because they love playing on the swings and running around, and we often spend the whole afternoon there.

Gợi ý: 이유를 말할 때 문장을 논리적으로 연결하세요(이동 이유 → 문제 → 해결책). 문법적 오류('air is more dirty' → 'the air is more polluted'; 'I'm sick that air' → 'I'm affected by the air pollution')를 고치고, 복수형과 관사 사용을 정확히 하세요('more parks', 'the air').

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Since I moved to Seoul, the air has become more polluted, so having more green spaces would improve air quality and give people a healthier place to relax.

Gợi ý: 불필요한 반복('I I')과 애매한 표현을 없애고 구체적인 공원 이름이나 이유를 말하세요('Central Park' 등). 'I love US and New York everyday'는 어색하므로 'I love the US, especially New York'처럼 정확한 표현을 쓰고 상상이나 기대를 한두 문장으로 정리하세요.

Ví dụ: Of course. I'd love to visit parks in New York, especially Central Park. I admire its large lawns and ponds, and I imagine walking there would be a wonderful experience.

× Yes, I I was like to go in the park and running over parks and. Food truck Use the food truck all day.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park, running around in parks, and using food trucks all day.

Multiple issues: 'was like to go' is incorrect for past preference; use simple past 'liked' plus gerunds for activities. 'Go in the park' -> 'go to the park'. 'running over parks' -> 'running around in parks' for correct preposition and meaning. 'Food truck Use the food truck all day' needs verb and correct word order: 'using food trucks all day'. Suggestion: use past tense for childhood habits and gerunds after verbs expressing liking.

× Yes, I still like going to parks. My cha, my children's all go. My children's wants to 1 to go park and play all day so.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks. My children all go with me. My children want to go to the park and play all day.

Errors: 'my cha' unclear — interpreted as 'my children'. "children's" is a contraction or possessive; subject should be 'children' (plural noun) and verb must agree: 'children want' not 'children's wants'. Use 'go with me' or 'go' plus preposition 'to the park'. Remove extraneous '1' and use 'play all day'. Suggestion: ensure subject is the plural noun 'children' and match verb in present simple.

× Yes, I like to see more parks in my city uh, after I moved to Seoul, uh, the air is more dirty, so I'm sick that air, so I want to see more park in my city.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. After I moved to Seoul, the air became more polluted, so I feel sick from the air, and I want to have more parks in my city.

Issues: 'like to see' is acceptable but 'would like' is more natural for preference. Tense mismatch: 'after I moved' (past) then 'the air is more dirty' should be 'the air became more polluted' (past change) and 'polluted' is better than 'dirty'. 'I'm sick that air' is incorrect; use 'I feel sick from the air' or 'sick because of the air'. 'more park' should be plural 'more parks' or 'more park space'. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and use correct adjectives and prepositions ('sick from' or 'sick because of').

× Of course, umm, I I want to go to the park or parks in New York. I love US and New York everyday. Imagine the park Eagle York, uh.

✓ Of course, I want to go to parks in New York. I love the US and New York; I imagine the parks there every day.

Errors: 'I I' duplicate. 'go to the park or parks' - choose 'parks' plural for general desire. 'I love US' needs article 'the US'. 'New York everyday' should be 'New York; I imagine the parks there every day' or 'I think about them every day'. 'Imagine the park Eagle York' is unclear; likely intended 'I imagine Central Park in New York' — replace with clear park name. Suggestion: avoid repetition, use 'the US', and place adverbs correctly ('every day' as two words).