Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and organize your response: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and grammar mistakes (use past tense consistently). Use linking words like “because” and “also” correctly and give concrete examples (e.g., games, picnics, festivals).

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I often had picnics there with my family. For example, we would bring food, play football with my friends, and sometimes celebrate local festivals, which made me feel happy and relaxed.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and use correct tense (present). If your preference changed, say so clearly and give a specific reason. Reduce repetition and filler words. Use a linking phrase like “because” or “now” to show contrast with the past.

Ví dụ: Not really — I don’t visit parks much now because my social life has shifted to malls and coffee shops. For instance, I usually meet friends at a café where we can talk comfortably, so parks are less convenient for me.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and examples. Avoid vague phrases and filler words. Use linking words such as “because,” “for example,” or “also” to connect ideas. Mention benefits of more parks (children’s play, green space, exercise) to sound more convincing.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because many families and children need safe play areas. For example, extra parks would provide green space for exercise, playgrounds for kids, and peaceful spots away from crowded malls.

Gợi ý: Be specific about which parks or what activities you want to try. Start with a clear statement (Yes/No) and then give one or two concrete reasons or plans. Remove repetition and filler words. Use linking phrases like “for example” or “I would like to” to structure your answer.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit new parks in the future, especially modern ones with playgrounds and walking trails. For example, I plan to try a newly built riverside park where I can walk with my family and try outdoor games with my friends.

× Ah, yes, I like going, uh, in the park when I was child because I sit with my family and my friends, uh, we talk about the, uh, important things for my life and uh, we laughing and also, uh, do, uh, do national things that makes me feel happy and relaxed.

✓ Ah, yes, I liked going to the park when I was a child because I sat with my family and my friends, we talked about important things in my life, we laughed, and we did national activities that made me feel happy and relaxed.

The speaker mixes present and past tenses; the question asks about childhood (past). Use past tense verbs (liked, sat, talked, laughed, did, made) and correct articles and prepositions ('the park' -> 'the park' or 'to the park'; 'when I was child' -> 'when I was a child'; 'important things for my life' -> 'important things in my life'). Also use parallel verb forms and remove filler words for clarity. Suggestion: decide on past tense for all actions and keep consistent verb forms and articles.

× Uh, no, I didn't like going to the parks now because, uh, in the past I got with my family and the friends, but now I'm, uh, I am, uh, change their places because, uh, not set out for my age. Uh, I now I prefer go to the malls and umm, coffee shop that things which which makes me feel happy.

✓ No, I do not like going to parks now because in the past I went with my family and friends, but now I have changed where I go because parks are not suitable for my age. Now I prefer going to malls and coffee shops because those places make me feel happy.

The speaker uses incorrect tense forms and mixed time references. Use present simple for current preferences (do not like, prefer) and past simple for past actions (went). Correct verb forms: 'got with' -> 'went with'; 'I am change their places' -> 'I have changed where I go'; 'not set out for my age' -> 'not suitable for my age'. Use 'going to malls and coffee shops' rather than 'prefer go to'. Also correct pluralization and determiners ('the friends' -> 'friends'; 'that things which which' -> 'those places').

× Uh, currently, yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because uh, my city has uh, all small children, they like these things umm, also my hometown is umm, popular of umm, shopping and uh, malls so that yes.

✓ Currently, yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are many young children who would enjoy them. Also, my hometown is known for shopping and malls, so having more parks would be beneficial.

Problems include incorrect quantifier and phrasing ('all small children' -> 'many young children' or 'children'); incorrect preposition and adjective use ('popular of shopping' -> 'known for shopping'); and sentence structure issues. Use 'there are' to introduce existence and choose appropriate quantifiers. Make the sentence clearer and more natural in English.

× Uh, maybe yes, why not? Because I like to change their uh, something I umm, I definitely go there, such as shop and mall. I, I, I also want to change because umm, the park is uh, ancient umm, places. So I, I want to uh, try a new thing such as playing sit with my family and friends that.

✓ Maybe, yes, why not? I like to try different places. I would definitely go to parks, shops, and malls. I also want a change because the parks near me are old, so I want to try new activities like sitting and playing with my family and friends.

The original contains tense and word choice errors and unclear references. Use modal 'would' for hypothetical future visits and 'want' for current desire. Replace 'change their something' with 'try different places' or 'a change'. 'Ancient places' is odd; use 'old' or 'outdated' for parks. 'Playing sit' is incorrect—use 'sitting and playing' or 'playing games' for activities. Improve sentence cohesion and correct verb forms.