Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and noun/verb forms and avoid redundant phrases.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often played in the paddling pool and tried simple games with my friends, which helped me meet many other children and make new friends.

Gợi ý: Use correct verb forms and avoid fillers. Give a clear topic sentence then two specific reasons with linking words (e.g. 'because' and 'for example'). Keep within 2–4 sentences and remove hesitations.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because the fresh air and breeze calm me down. For example, after a long workday I often sit on a bench and watch people and flowers, which helps me relax and clear my mind.

Gợi ý: Avoid fillers and repetition. State your opinion clearly, then give specific reasons and an example. Use correct comparative and quantifier forms (e.g. 'fewer parks', 'more parks').

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are fewer green spaces now due to rapid development. For example, more parks would encourage people to spend less time on smartphones and more time enjoying nature and exercising.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear, well-structured response: name the park, state its location, and give two specific reasons with linking words. Correct awkward phrasing and avoid unnecessary pauses.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have one in mind: Kalangarh Sanitary Park in central Chennai. I want to visit because it offers many activities such as a zip line and playground slides, and because the park looks beautifully landscaped and family-friendly.

× I would love to go to park as a child because I love playing in the swimming while flights with my friends and it is a place where we can meet so many other new kid and to get to know their names and to become a friends and then I would say.

✓ I would love to go to the park as a child because I loved playing in the swimming pool and flying kites with my friends, and it was a place where we could meet many new kids, learn their names, and become friends.

Multiple article errors and related noun forms: 'go to park' needs the definite article 'the park' for a specific place; 'the swimming' is incorrect — use 'the swimming pool'; 'flights' seems intended as 'flying kites' or similar activities — corrected to 'flying kites'; 'other new kid' should be plural 'new kids'; 'to become a friends' should be 'become friends'. Also tense consistency: the student is describing childhood, so past tense is appropriate ('would love' kept for habitual past, changed some verbs to past: 'loved', 'was', 'could'). Suggestion: use articles before countable nouns, match singular/plural forms, and keep consistent past tense when talking about childhood.

× Yes, I still like to going to parks even nowadays, because it is a place where we feel refreshed and the wind, the breeze over there, it makes me calm, makes my mind calm.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks nowadays because they are places where I feel refreshed, and the wind and breeze there calm me and clear my mind.

'like to going' is incorrect: after like use the gerund 'going' or the infinitive 'to go' but not both; 'even nowadays' is redundant — use 'nowadays'; 'it is a place' should match plural 'parks' so use 'they are places'; 'the wind, the breeze over there, it makes me calm' has subject repetition and awkward structure — simplified to 'the wind and breeze there calm me and clear my mind'. Suggestion: choose correct verb form after 'like', ensure subject and verb number agree, and avoid redundant pronouns.

× So after a long day, I would like myself to be there at the park, uh, sitting alone and looking at the flowers and trees and enjoying looking at everybody.

✓ So after a long day, I would like to be at the park, sitting alone, looking at the flowers and trees, and enjoying watching everyone.

'I would like myself to be there' is incorrect pronoun/reflexive use — say 'I would like to be there'; 'enjoying looking at everybody' is awkward: use 'enjoying watching everyone'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary reflexive pronouns and choose natural verbs for activities (watching rather than looking at everybody).

× What else they does, Yeah.

✓ What else do they do?

Subject-verb inversion and agreement problem: in a question with 'they' the auxiliary should be 'do' and main verb 'do' — 'they does' is incorrect. Also punctuation and word order: form question 'What else do they do?'. Suggestion: Use correct auxiliary verbs for questions and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Umm, actually, uh, there are only less parks in my city because, uh, it, it, it is a place where so many, uh, buildings, offices and malls over the, uh, everything are built over here, but not so many parks.

✓ Actually, there are very few parks in my city because many buildings, offices, and malls have been built here, so there are not many parks.

'only less parks' is ungrammatical: use 'very few parks' or 'not many parks' for scarcity; 'so many ... over the, uh, everything are built over here' is awkward and tense-inappropriate — changed to present perfect 'have been built' to indicate development up to now. Suggestion: use correct quantifiers ('few', 'many', 'not many') and clearer sentence structure; use present perfect when referring to changes that have occurred.

× Uh, it would be really great if there are more parks because to avoid, uh, smartphones and to get to be with nature, I would say.

✓ It would be really great if there were more parks because they would help people avoid smartphones and be closer to nature.

Conditional sentence requires subjunctive/past form 'were' after 'if' for unreal present situations: 'if there are' should be 'if there were'. Also 'because to avoid smartphones and to get to be with nature' is ungrammatical — turned into a clear purpose/result clause. Suggestion: use correct conditional forms and express purposes with natural phrasing ('help people avoid...', 'be closer to nature').

× Yes, I got a park in my mind already.

✓ Yes, I have a park in mind already.

'I got a park in my mind' is nonstandard and uses 'got' informally; English usually uses 'have a park in mind' or 'I have a park in mind' and omits 'the' or 'a' before 'mind'. Also 'got' should be avoided in formal speech. Suggestion: use 'have X in mind' to express an idea or plan.

× Uh, it is called as a Kalangarh sanitary, uh, park, which is located in uh, central part of the Chennai, which I wanted to visit for a long time because it got so many uh, things to do inside the park like the zip line, the swings, the slides, everything was so beautiful to see.

✓ It is called Kalangarh Sanitary Park, which is located in the central part of Chennai; I have wanted to visit it for a long time because it has so many things to do, like zip lines, swings, and slides — everything looks so beautiful.

'called as' is incorrect — use 'called' without 'as'; 'central part of the Chennai' should be 'the central part of Chennai' (no article before city), and 'got so many' is informal and wrong tense — use 'has so many' or 'had' depending on tense; switched to present perfect 'have wanted' to express a desire continuing up to now. Also pluralized attractions ('zip lines') and improved phrasing. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and articles with place names and natural collocations ('called X', 'in the central part of Chennai', 'has many things to do').

× I wanted to.

✓ I want to.

The short sentence follows present discussion of desire to visit in the future; using past tense 'wanted' conflicts with earlier present perfect 'I have wanted' — choose present 'I want to' or 'I have wanted to' and complete the thought. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and complete the sentence with an appropriate verb phrase (e.g., 'I want to visit it').