Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 表現を自然にし、誤った語や曖昧な語を正すこと。具体的な活動や頻度を明確に述べ、文法（時制・語順）を整えると流暢さが上がります。例えば“greeting parks”“walked dark, wore feathers”のような不適切なフレーズを避け、代わりに「自転車に乗った」「散歩した」「両親と一緒だった」など具体的で簡潔な表現に直してください。5文以内で主語→詳細→理由の順に組み立てる練習をしましょう。

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I loved going to parks as a child and I often rode my bicycle there with my parents. We usually visited on weekends, and I liked exploring the playgrounds and watching birds. Those visits helped me relax and enjoy being outdoors.

Gợi ý: 時制の一貫性を保ち、主語の選び方を自然にする必要があります。最初の文で過去形“I did”は誤りなので現在形“I do”を使いましょう。内容は良いので、頻度や例（散歩、ジョギングなど）を少し追加して具体性を出すと高得点になります。接続語を使って文の流れを滑らかにする練習もしてください。

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I still go to parks regularly, usually after work to clear my head and get some exercise. For example, I often jog for thirty minutes or take a short walk along the river, and that helps me feel refreshed.

Gợi ý: 意味が伝わりにくい誤訳・語彙の選択ミスが多いです。まずは簡潔で正確な語彙（vanities→?、tree lined past→tree-lined paths、reduce cars→reduce car use、residents fiscal→residents' well-being）に直す練習をしてください。論理的な構成（主張→理由→具体例）を守り、専門的な語を使う場合は正しい形を確認しましょう。接続詞（because, so, therefore）を使って因果関係を明確にしてください。

Ví dụ: Yes, I would. I think more green spaces and tree-lined paths would give people safe places to exercise and relax. This would also encourage fewer car trips and improve residents' health and quality of life if the local government invested in parks.

Gợi ý: 文法（現在完了の使い方や不完全なフレーズ）と語彙の誤りを直してください（I have been to parks in London、it took→it has、strawing→strolling、along around→along）。情報は良いので、比較表現や具体的な興味（ピクニック、ボートなど）を加えて簡潔に述べる練習をするとよいです。5文以内で明瞭に構成しましょう。

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park someday. I have been to parks in London before, but Central Park seems much larger and offers many attractions. I would enjoy strolling along the paths and around the lakes, and I can imagine spending a whole afternoon having a picnic and exploring the gardens.

× I loved greeting parks as a child.

✓ I loved visiting parks as a child.

The verb 'greeting' is incorrect in this context; we use 'visit' to talk about going to places. Use 'visiting' (verb + -ing) after 'loved' to indicate a habitual past activity: 'I loved visiting parks as a child.' Suggestion: replace 'greeting' with 'visiting' and keep the -ing form after 'loved'.

× I often brought my bicycle with my parents or walked dark, wore feathers.

✓ I often rode my bicycle with my parents or walked in the park, wearing sneakers.

Multiple errors: 'brought my bicycle with my parents' should be 'rode my bicycle with my parents' (correct verb for using a bike). 'walked dark, wore feathers' is ungrammatical and likely word choice errors. 'walked in the park' fixes location; 'wearing sneakers' is a plausible intended phrase. Suggestion: choose appropriate verbs and noun phrases and keep parallel structure (rode ... or walked ...), and use present participle 'wearing' to describe what you had on.

× Those visits helped me relax and enjoy being outdoors.

✓ Those visits helped me relax and enjoy being outdoors.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'Helped' properly marks past habit; 'enjoy being outdoors' is correct. No change needed.

× I did. I still go to the parks regularly.

✓ Yes, I do. I still go to parks regularly.

The student answered 'I did' which conflicts with 'still go' (present). Use 'Yes, I do' to indicate current preference. Also omit the definite article before 'parks' when speaking generally: 'go to parks' or 'go to the park' depending on meaning. Suggestion: use present tense auxiliary 'do' for current habits.

× It helped me feel refreshed during the day.

✓ It helps me feel refreshed during the day.

The student uses past tense 'helped' but is describing a present, habitual effect of going to the park after work. Use present tense 'helps' for general truth or habitual result. Suggestion: match tense to intended meaning: past for a single past event, present for habitual effects.

× Yes, I don't want to see more vanities, said my city.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more green spaces in my city.

The original is ungrammatical and uses wrong words: 'don't want to see more vanities, said my city' is incorrect structure and word choice. Likely intended meaning is expressing desire for more parks/green spaces. Use 'I would like to see more green spaces in my city.' Suggestion: use clear subject and correct nouns and modal 'would like' to express preference politely.

× Especially fashionable green spaces, parks and tree lined past would give people safe present places to exercise and relax, which would also help reduce cars.

✓ Especially more green spaces, parks, and tree-lined paths would give people safe places to exercise and relax, which would also help reduce car use.

Errors: 'fashionable' wrong modifier, 'tree lined past' should be 'tree-lined paths', 'safe present places' incorrect word order and choice, and 'reduce cars' should be 'reduce car use' or 'reduce the number of cars'. Hyphenate 'tree-lined' and use plural 'paths'. Suggestion: simplify and choose correct nouns and compound adjectives.

× If the local government invested more in public parks and regional facilities, it could improve residents fiscal.

✓ If the local government invested more in public parks and regional facilities, it could improve residents' quality of life.

'Residents fiscal' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'residents' fiscal situation' or better 'residents' quality of life'. Also need an apostrophe for the possessive 'residents''. Suggestion: use clear noun phrases (quality of life, living standards) and proper possessive.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you would like to visit in the future?

The original is understandable but informal; 'would like to visit' is a more natural way to ask about future desires. Use 'visit' (verb) instead of 'go to' for clarity when speaking about attractions.

× I have been parks in London before, but Central Park seems much larger and full of different attractions it took.

✓ I have been to parks in London before, but Central Park seems much larger and full of different attractions.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'been'. Also 'it took' is unnecessary and ungrammatical here. Use present perfect 'have been to' to describe past experiences relevant to now. Suggestion: include 'to' and remove extra words.

× It looks particularly beautiful for strawing and walking along the path and along around the lakes, and I can imagine spending a whole afternoon.

✓ It looks particularly beautiful for strolling and walking along the paths and around the lakes, and I can imagine spending a whole afternoon there.

Errors: 'strawing' is misspelling; correct word is 'strolling'. 'along the path and along around the lakes' is redundant; use 'along the paths and around the lakes'. Add 'there' to complete the clause. Suggestion: use correct verb forms and avoid redundancy.