Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more complete and coherent: give a clear topic sentence, remove hesitations, and add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas. Keep it under five sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. We lived near a big park, and every evening my grandfather would take me there for a walk. We often fed the ducks and played on the swings, which were my favourite activities.

Gợi ý: Make the answer more natural and concise: start with a direct statement, then explain how and why you visit parks now using linking words (for example, "because" or "so"). Avoid fillers and vague phrases like "it's fair."

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now. My husband and I go regularly because we want to spend quality time together and forget about everyday work stress. We usually walk or sit and talk, which helps us relax.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and give specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (for example, "because", "so", "however") and avoid repetition. Mention how more parks would help and give one concrete example.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are only two or three near my neighborhood. More parks would make it easier for people to exercise and relax, especially for families and pregnant women like me who prefer not to travel far.

Gợi ý: Be specific and fluent: give a clear topic sentence naming the park, explain why you want to go and add a short time-related detail using linking words. Remove hesitations and redundant phrases.

Ví dụ: Yes, I really want to visit the new dinosaur-themed park in Tashkent. I am curious about the exhibits and it seems fun for families, but we haven't had time to go yet; I hope to visit next month.

× We lived uh, near to the park and every evening my grandfather, uh.

✓ We lived near the park, and every evening my grandfather would take me there.

Original sentence is incomplete and uses unnecessary 'to' after 'near'. It also ends abruptly. Corrected version completes the idea with a clear verb phrase ('would take me there') matching past habitual action and removes the preposition error. Suggestion: avoid filler 'uh' and ensure sentences have a clear subject and verb.

× Actually yes, now my husband is my partner.

✓ Actually yes, now my husband is my partner.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable but 'is my partner' is redundant because husband implies partner; no change needed. Keep present tense to state current situation.

× When we go to the park we always try to have a quality time and umm like avoiding works like everyday life problems.

✓ When we go to the park we always try to have quality time and avoid everyday work problems.

'have a quality time' is incorrect collocation; use 'have quality time' or 'have a good time'. 'Avoiding works like everyday life problems' mixes gerund with verb form and misuses 'works'. Correction uses base verb 'avoid' to match 'try to' and replaces 'works' with 'everyday work problems' for clarity. Remove fillers and streamline phrase structure.

× So yes it's fair.

✓ So yes, it's nice.

'It's fair' is awkward in this context; 'nice' or 'pleasant' better expresses enjoyment of parks. Also insert comma after 'So yes' and ensure adjective fits meaning.

× Yes, I would like, but in Tashkent there's no like a lot parks, so we only go two or three parks near to our neighborhood.

✓ Yes, I would like to, but in Tashkent there are not many parks, so we only go to two or three parks near our neighborhood.

'no like a lot parks' is ungrammatical. Use 'there are not many parks' for quantity. Also need 'to' after 'go' when indicating destination ('go to two or three parks'), and remove unnecessary 'to' after 'near'.

× And now as I'm pregnant, I cannot, I cannot go far away.

✓ And now, since I'm pregnant, I cannot go far away.

Repetition 'I cannot, I cannot' is redundant. Use 'since' or 'because' to show reason and keep present continuous 'I'm pregnant' with present ability 'cannot'. Add commas for clarity.

× Actually, yes, I have one like desire to go to the thematic park.

✓ Actually, yes, I have a desire to go to the theme park.

'one like desire' is informal and nonstandard; use 'a desire' or 'one desire'. 'Thematic park' is unnatural; 'theme park' is standard English.

× Uh, it's the dinosaur park.

✓ It's the dinosaur park.

Minor filler 'Uh' should be removed for clarity. Otherwise sentence is fine. Keep simple present 'it's' to identify the place.

× Uh, like recently opened it in Tashkent, but uh, still we had no time.

✓ It recently opened in Tashkent, but we still have not had time to go.

Original uses incorrect word order and tense. 'Like recently opened it' is ungrammatical; correct to 'It recently opened'. 'We had no time' should be present perfect 'we have not had time' because the lack of time continues to the present. Remove fillers.

× We like have no time to go there.

✓ We don't have time to go there.

'We like have no time' mixes 'like' incorrectly and uses double negation style. Use simple negative 'We don't have time' or present perfect 'We haven't had time' depending on context. Here present simple suits ongoing situation.