Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you like going to parks as a child?
Thí sinh
As a child I like to go to Park Girls Park at many different games and I like to go there with my childhood friends.
Giám khảo
Do you still like going to parks now?
Thí sinh
Nowadays I don't really go to the park because I'm different, you know, story work. So I don't get time to go park. But when, whenever I get time, I definitely wanted to go back.
Giám khảo
Would you like to see more parks in your city?
Thí sinh
Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city called cause uh my city don't have many parks as well. So for the children's and for relaxation we need more parks. So I would like to see more parks.
Giám khảo
Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?
Thí sinh
No, I don't have really idea about parks. So I want, I don't think I will go to the park in the future.
Did you like going to parks as a child?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: Make your answer more grammatically correct, concise, and include a clear topic sentence plus one specific supporting detail. Use past tense for childhood and avoid repetition. Connect ideas with a simple linking word.
Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. For example, I often visited a place called Girls Park where we played many games like hide-and-seek and swing races with my childhood friends.
Do you still like going to parks now?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: Clarify your reason using correct grammar and tenses, keep it concise, and use a linking word to contrast past enjoyment with current situation. Replace vague phrases like "I'm different" and "story work" with clear explanations.
Ví dụ: I don't go to parks very often now because I am busy with work and studies. However, whenever I have free time, I definitely like to visit a park to relax.
Would you like to see more parks in your city?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Avoid repetition and improve grammar (subject-verb agreement). Give one or two specific reasons and use a linking word to connect ideas. Be concise and natural.
Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because there are few at the moment. More parks would provide safe places for children to play and quiet areas for people to relax after work.
Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: Give a clearer, more natural response. If you are unsure, say so and offer a brief reason or alternative plan. Use present simple for general statements and avoid contradictory phrases.
Ví dụ: I don't have any specific parks in mind right now, but I might visit local parks in the future if I have free time. For instance, I would like to try any new park that has good walking paths and green spaces.
× As a child I like to go to Park Girls Park at many different games and I like to go there with my childhood friends.
✓ As a child I liked going to Girls' Park to play many different games, and I liked to go there with my childhood friends.
The sentence refers to childhood (past), so the verb should be in the past tense (liked, liked going). Also use the gerund 'going' after 'liked' for activities. Use possessive form 'Girls' Park' if that is the park's name, and 'to play many different games' is clearer than 'at many different games'.
× Nowadays I don't really go to the park because I'm different, you know, story work.
✓ Nowadays I don't really go to the park because my situation is different, you know, I have a lot of work.
The original mixes unclear phrase 'I'm different' and 'story work'. To express current reason use present simple and clear noun phrases: 'my situation is different' and 'I have a lot of work'. This corrects tense and clarity issues.
× So I don't get time to go park.
✓ So I don't have time to go to the park.
Use 'have time' to express availability, and include the article 'the' with 'park' when referring to a specific place. Also include the preposition 'to' before 'the park'.
× But when, whenever I get time, I definitely wanted to go back.
✓ But whenever I get time, I definitely want to go back.
The clause 'whenever I get time' is present/future reference, so the main verb should be present/future ('want') rather than past ('wanted'). Keep tense consistent: 'get' and 'want' both present.
× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city called cause uh my city don't have many parks as well.
✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because my city doesn't have many parks.
Replace 'called cause uh' with 'because' to show reason. Use correct subject-verb agreement 'city doesn't' not 'city don't'.
× So for the children's and for relaxation we need more parks.
✓ So for children and for relaxation we need more parks.
Do not use the possessive apostrophe when speaking generally about children: 'children' is the plural noun. 'For relaxation' is fine; the sentence reads better without 'the' before 'children'.
× No, I don't have really idea about parks.
✓ No, I don't really have an idea about parks.
Word order: place 'really' before the verb phrase. Use the article 'an' with 'idea'. This keeps present tense consistent for current lack of knowledge.
× So I want, I don't think I will go to the park in the future.
✓ So I don't think I will go to the park in the future.
Remove the unnecessary 'So I want,' which is incomplete. The intended meaning uses future tense 'will go' to express future intention or prediction; the corrected sentence is concise and grammatically coherent.