Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, like), correct grammar (past tense), and add one specific detail. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I usually went with my family and sometimes had small picnics with friends, where we played games and ran around. Because of that, I have fond memories of smelling flowers and playing outdoors.

Gợi ý: Be more natural and structured: give a direct topic sentence, then provide two clear supporting points using linking words (for example, because and also). Remove hesitations and correct collocations (e.g. "spend time" not "have a time").

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks on weekends. I go with my family because it brings back childhood memories, and it also gives me a peaceful place to walk and reflect on my own.

Gợi ý: Make your point clearer and use precise language: start with a direct statement, explain two specific reasons with examples, and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, because, so, therefore) and correct grammar (e.g. "I would like to see" ).

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because green spaces improve residents' mental health and encourage outdoor exercise. For example, a nearby park would give people a quiet place to relax and meet friends, which could boost community wellbeing.

Gợi ý: Be specific and coherent: give a clear topic sentence, then mention one or two specific types or names of parks and reasons why you want to visit them. Use correct grammar and avoid repeating words. Link ideas with words like "because" and "for example".

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit large parks with extensive gardens and green spaces because I enjoy peaceful walks and photography. For instance, I hope to visit a popular western park known for its cool, cloudy weather and wide lawns next year.

× Yes, I did, uh, when I was child I uh, mostly like go to park with my family and spend uh, a time with my friends in the bar uh, like, uh, we have like a small picnic. Uh, also I like like run, uh, run around the park and smell the flower, so.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, I mostly liked going to the park with my family and spent time with my friends at the park. We had a small picnic. I also liked running around the park and smelling the flowers.

Multiple present tense and base-form verbs are used incorrectly where past tense or gerunds are required. Use past tense 'liked' and 'spent' to match 'when I was a child'. Use gerunds (going, running, smelling) after verbs of preference or as objects. Also include articles ('a child', 'the park', 'the flowers') and correct preposition ('at the park' instead of 'in the bar'). Suggestions: use consistent past tense for past events and gerunds for activities.

× Actually, yes, I do, uh, in the weekend I like, uh, go to the park, uh, with my family, uh, because like, I have a time to recall the memory when I was a child and I walk around the, uh, the park, which filled me, uh, like a quiet and peaceful, uh, also like I have a time with myself too.

✓ Actually, yes, I do. At the weekend I like to go to the park with my family because I have time to recall memories from my childhood and I walk around the park, which makes me feel quiet and peaceful. I also have time to be with myself.

Errors: incorrect article and preposition use ('in the weekend' -> 'at the weekend'); unnecessary duplicate definite article ('the, uh, the park'); incorrect noun form ('a time' -> 'time'; 'the memory' -> 'memories'); wrong verb form ('which filled me... like a quiet and peaceful' -> 'which makes me feel quiet and peaceful'). Suggestions: use 'at the weekend' or 'on weekends', use plural 'memories' for general recollections, remove duplicate articles, and use correct verb phrases ('makes me feel').

× Yes, I would to see more park in my city because I feel the city is can affect the people in the city and they're affect their energy and can improve improve the country because like we have a quiet place can give the person to generate more.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because I feel the city can affect its people and their energy, and having more parks can help improve the country. A quiet place can help people to be more creative and relaxed.

Errors: incorrect modal construction ('I would to see' -> 'I would like to see'); singular/plural agreement ('park' -> 'parks'); awkward modal use and redundancy ('is can affect' -> 'can affect'); pronoun reference ('they're affect their energy' unclear -> 'its people and their energy'). Suggestions: use 'would like' for polite desire, ensure subject-verb agreement, pluralize count nouns, and simplify modal verbs (use 'can' once).

× Yes, I want to visit many a park actually the park which is a big or have a large garden or the green place or green space.

✓ Yes, I want to visit many parks, especially those that are large or have big gardens or green spaces.

Errors: incorrect use of 'many a park' (ungrammatical) and inconsistent singular/plural ('have a large garden' should agree with subject). Use plural 'parks' after 'many'. Use relative clause with plural agreement ('those that are large or have big gardens'). Suggestion: use 'many parks' and concise descriptions 'large' or 'with big gardens/green spaces'.

× Also I want to visit the park which is in the West side of the country which I feel the weather is. There are more more more perfect and like cloudy which it can.

✓ Also I want to visit parks in the west of the country because I feel the weather there is more suitable; it is often cooler and cloudier.

Errors: fragmented sentence and incorrect clause structure ('which I feel the weather is.' is incomplete); repetition and unclear comparative ('There are more more more perfect and like cloudy which it can'). Also incorrect preposition 'in the West side' -> 'in the west' or 'on the west side'. Suggestions: combine ideas into a clear sentence, avoid unnecessary repetition, use comparative descriptions like 'cooler' or 'more cloudy' (better: 'cloudier'), and place adjectives correctly.