Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and remove filler sounds (mmm, uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my cousins and friends, and we usually spent the evenings playing games or having picnics, which was a lot of fun.

Gợi ý: Avoid hesitation and produce a direct answer first. Use linking words (however, because) to explain reasons and give one specific example of when you do go. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: I sometimes go to parks with friends, but I don't go very often because I am usually busy with work and studies. However, I do visit a park occasionally at weekends to relax and get fresh air.

Gợi ý: Use a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then support it with specific reasons and linkers (for example, because, therefore). Watch grammar and singular/plural agreement.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks because they provide safe places for children to play and quiet areas for elderly people to relax. For example, additional parks would improve community health and create more opportunities for outdoor exercise.

Gợi ý: Give a direct, coherent answer. If you are unsure, say so clearly and offer a brief reason or a plan. Avoid contradicting phrases and correct verb forms. Limit to 1–2 clear sentences.

Ví dụ: I don't have a specific park in mind right now because I rarely visit parks these days, but I would be interested in visiting a newly built park if it had good walking paths and a playground.

× MMM, uh, yes, I like, I love going to parks. When I was a child, yeah, I used to go umm, with my cousins and friends and we, we usually went there in at evening in the evenings.

✓ MMM, uh, yes, I liked, I loved going to parks. When I was a child, I used to go with my cousins and friends and we usually went there in the evenings.

Tense consistency: The student mixes present ('I like, I love') with past context introduced by 'When I was a child'. Use past tense ('liked', 'loved') to match the past time frame. Also removed redundant words ('umm', repeated 'we') and corrected prepositional phrase 'in at evening' to 'in the evenings'. Suggestion: Establish the time frame first, then use matching past tense verbs throughout the sentence.

× Umm, Now, uh, sometimes I go to park with my friends, but I don't think I have time for, uh, the park and I don't spend a lot of my times outdoors, so I don't go to the parks.

✓ Umm, now, sometimes I go to the park with my friends, but I don't think I have time for the park and I don't spend a lot of my time outdoors, so I don't go to parks.

Article and count noun errors: 'go to park' requires the definite article 'the park' or 'go to parks' for general meaning. 'a lot of my times' is incorrect; use uncountable 'time' (singular). Also avoid repeating 'the park' unnecessarily; choose singular or plural for consistency. Suggestion: Use 'the park' when referring to a specific park, 'parks' when speaking generally, and use 'time' as an uncountable noun.

× Around the number of parks in my city are increasing and it's also a good development as children's and elderly people like to spend their time in leisure time in the park, so I think it's good to see more.

✓ The number of parks in my city is increasing, and it's also a good development because children and elderly people like to spend their leisure time in the park, so I think it's good to have more parks.

Subject-verb agreement and awkward phrasing: 'Around the number of parks' is incorrect; use 'The number of parks'. This subject is singular, so use 'is increasing' (subject-verb agreement). 'children's and elderly people' is incorrect possessive and word order; use 'children and elderly people'. 'spend their time in leisure time' is redundant; use 'spend their leisure time'. Final clause adjusted for natural phrasing: 'have more parks'. Suggestion: Keep subject clear ('The number') to ensure correct verb agreement and avoid redundant words.

× MMM I don't like to go to the park now so I don't think I like. I would love to going new park so I don't want it.

✓ MMM, I don't like to go to the park now, so I don't think I will. I would love to go to a new park, but I don't want it now.

Multiple errors: First clause needed clearer future reference: 'I don't think I like' is ungrammatical in context; 'I don't think I will' matches the question about future visits. 'I would love to going new park' contains incorrect verb form; use the base form after 'would love' -> 'go'. Include the article 'a' before 'new park'. 'so I don't want it' is vague; clarified as 'but I don't want it now' though better would be to state reason. Suggestion: Use correct modal constructions ('would love to + base verb'), include necessary articles, and match tense/modal meaning to the intended idea.