Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unclear phrases like “I like the cool” and use correct past tense consistently. Use linking words (for example, “because” or “and”) to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I usually went with my parents, siblings and cousins, and we spent hours playing on the swings and slides because the playground equipment was exciting and safe.

Gợi ý: Clarify your meaning and avoid hesitation. Give one clear reason why you still go and a brief specific supporting detail. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “it makes me happy” instead of “gives me like happiness”) and remove repetitions.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they make me feel relaxed. For example, I like walking on the paths and using the playground equipment with my younger relatives, which cheers me up after a busy week.

Gợi ý: Be more fluent and specific. State your opinion clearly, then give a focused reason with a concrete benefit (e.g., safety, health). Use linking words like “because” and “so” and avoid filler words (uh, um).

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in the city because they provide safe spaces for children to play and promote physical activity. More parks would also reduce crowding and make neighborhoods healthier.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and use correct future forms. Begin with a clear topic sentence about your plans, then give one specific reason (e.g., benefits for children’s physical and mental health) and an example of an activity you would do with them. Avoid repetition.

Ví dụ: Yes, when I have children I plan to take them to parks regularly to support their mental and physical development. For instance, I would bring them to play on the swings and run on the grass every weekend to help them stay active and happy.

× Yeah, actually I like the cool.

✓ Yeah, actually I liked the cool weather.

The original sentence uses the adjective 'cool' without a noun; in context 'cool weather' is needed. Also the rest of the student's answer refers to the past (as a child), so use past tense 'liked' to match. Suggestion: include the noun after the adjective and keep consistent tense: 'I liked the cool weather.'

× I liked going to park when I was a child.

✓ I liked going to the park when I was a child.

The noun 'park' is singular and specific in this context, so the definite article 'the' is required. Without it, the sentence is ungrammatical. Use 'the park.'

× I usually went with my family and with my siblings and my aunt family.

✓ I usually went with my family, my siblings, and my aunt's family.

'Aunt family' is not a correct noun phrase in English. Use the possessive form 'aunt's family.' Also commas improve clarity in lists. Maintain past tense 'went.'

× I enjoy a lot about equipment in park.

✓ I enjoyed the playground equipment in the park a lot.

The original word order and verb tense are incorrect. 'Enjoy' should be past tense 'enjoyed' to match 'as a child.' 'Equipment in park' needs the article 'the' and a clearer noun phrase 'playground equipment.' Place 'a lot' after the verb phrase. Suggestion: 'I enjoyed the playground equipment in the park a lot.'

× Yes, actually I like going to parks now because it it gives me like happiness and I have a patient about uh, this I can use, I can use playground equipment.

✓ Yes, actually I like going to parks now because it gives me happiness and I have patience to use the playground equipment.

There are several issues: doubled 'it,' informal filler 'like,' and wrong word 'patient' instead of 'patience.' Use present tense 'gives' for current preference. 'Have patience to use' is a natural phrase. Remove unnecessary repetitions. Suggestion: keep sentences concise and use correct nouns derived from verbs ('patience').

× Umm, yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because uh, it can uh, make kids happy and uh, and uh, give more suitable space for children to play on ground, uh, in safety.

✓ Umm, yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they can make kids happy and provide suitable spaces for children to play safely.

Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'parks.' 'Can' is fine but rephrase 'give more suitable space' to 'provide suitable spaces.' 'Play on ground' is awkward; use 'play safely' or 'play on the ground' with article. 'In safety' should be 'safely.' Also remove filler words and repetition. Suggestion: use concise, natural expressions: 'they can make kids happy and provide suitable spaces for children to play safely.'

× Chair Yes, in fact, when I have a kids, so I should bring them to parks for mental for their mental health.

✓ Yes, in fact, when I have kids, I should bring them to parks for their mental health.

Use 'kids' (plural) without the article 'a.' Remove extraneous words 'Chair' and 'so.' 'For mental for their mental health' is redundant; use 'for their mental health.' Maintain future reference with 'when I have kids.'

× So I prefer I I really choose this option for my kids for better life for them.

✓ So I would choose this option for my kids to give them a better life.

The original repeats 'I' and has awkward phrasing 'prefer I I really choose.' Use conditional 'would choose' to indicate preference. 'For better life for them' should be 'to give them a better life.' Suggestion: avoid repetition and use a clear verb structure: 'I would choose this option for my kids to give them a better life.'