Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Good content and clear memories, but improve grammar, conciseness and natural phrasing. Avoid contractions mismatched tense ("Me and my brother" should be "My brother and I"; "we'll meet" → "we would meet") and reduce redundancy. Use one topic sentence then 1–2 supporting details linked logically.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to the park in the evenings as a child. My brother and I would often meet friends there to play games or ride bicycles, and we especially enjoyed the swings near my house.

Gợi ý: Clear structure with reasons, good linking words (Firstly/Secondly). Improve naturalness by tightening phrasing (avoid overuse of "as" and "on my hands") and be more specific about "noisy and chaotic"—give brief examples. Keep sentences shorter and more natural.

Ví dụ: I don't go to parks as often now because I have little free time—I need to study and care for my cats. Also, many parks near me are quite noisy, with loud music and crowds, which makes them less relaxing.

Gợi ý: Answer is positive but a bit vague and slightly formal. Avoid future progressive "will be looking forward" and repetition. Be specific about what "advanced and modern infrastructure" means (e.g. playgrounds, walking paths, lighting). Keep it concise and natural.

Ví dụ: Yes, I'd love more parks in the city because they would break up the concrete scenery. I hope the new parks would include playgrounds, walking paths and good lighting so people can use them safely.

Gợi ý: Good specific detail (theatrical performances). Improve naturalness by avoiding repetition of "there" and the formal phrase "indulge in the overall experience." Add a brief reason why it appeals to you and keep it concise.

Ví dụ: Yes, there's a park where schoolchildren put on theatrical performances. I've never been, but I'd like to go to see the shows and enjoy the lively atmosphere with families and performers.

× Me and my brother would go there together and we'll meet our friends and play some games or ride a bicycle and have lots of fun.

✓ My brother and I would go there together and we would meet our friends and play some games or ride bicycles and have lots of fun.

Use subject pronouns correctly: 'Me' is an object pronoun but the subject form 'I' is required. Also place the other person first for politeness ('My brother and I'). Consistency of tense: the sentence mixes past habitual 'would' with future 'we'll'; change 'we'll' to 'we would' to match the past habitual context. Use plural 'bicycles' when referring generally. Suggestion: always use subject pronouns for subjects and keep tense consistent.

× These days I don't like going to the parks as much as I used to do as a child and there are many reasons as to why.

✓ These days I don't like going to parks as much as I used to as a child, and there are many reasons for that.

Article and phrasing: 'going to the parks' sounds like specific parks; general preference uses 'going to parks' or 'going to the park'. Also 'used to do' is redundant after 'used to' — use 'used to' alone. 'Reasons as to why' is wordy; 'reasons for that' is clearer. Maintain present simple for current habitual preference.

× Secondly, I find the environment in parks way too noisy and chaotic for my liking.

✓ Secondly, I find the environment in parks far too noisy and chaotic for my liking.

Stylistic: 'way too' is informal; 'far too' is more appropriate in a semi-formal speaking-test context. No grammatical change required for participles, but this improves register. Suggestion: choose vocabulary appropriate to the testing context.

× Yes, I'd love to see more parks in the city and it would be a great change from the regular scenery and I will be looking forward to the new parks which will be equipped with advanced and modern infrastructure.

✓ Yes, I'd love to see more parks in the city; it would be a great change from the regular scenery, and I would look forward to new parks that are equipped with modern infrastructure.

Tense and modality: mixing 'I'd' (I would) with 'I will be looking forward' is inconsistent. Use 'I would look forward' to match the conditional mood. 'Which will be equipped' is wordy and future-tense heavy; use 'that are equipped' to describe the expected characteristic. 'Advanced and modern' is redundant; 'modern' suffices. Suggestion: keep modal verbs consistent and avoid redundancy.

× There is a park in my city where school children perform theatrical performances.

✓ There is a park in my city where schoolchildren perform theatrical productions.

Word choice and compounding: 'school children' is commonly written as 'schoolchildren' in this context. 'Perform theatrical performances' is redundant; use 'perform theatrical productions' or simply 'perform plays'. Suggestion: avoid repeating the same idea; choose precise nouns.

× I have never been there and I would love to go there.

✓ I have never been there, and I would love to go.

Redundancy: repeating 'there' is unnecessary in the second clause. The present perfect 'have never been' correctly indicates past experience up to now; keep it. Suggestion: omit repeated objects when context is clear.

× I want to watch the performances that take place there and indulge in the overall experience.

✓ I want to watch the performances that take place there and to enjoy the overall experience.

Parallel structure: pair verbs consistently—either use two infinitives ('to watch' and 'to enjoy') or two base verbs connected by 'and' if both are complements of 'want'. 'Indulge in the overall experience' is slightly awkward; 'enjoy the overall experience' is clearer and more natural. Suggestion: maintain parallel verb forms and choose collocations that fit the meaning.