Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and grammatical, give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Avoid sentence fragments and repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., “because”, “for example”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were my main place to play and meet friends. For example, the large park in my hometown had slides, swings and an open field where we played football every afternoon.

Gợi ý: Use a natural topic sentence and avoid repeating the same idea. Combine related details using linking words and be specific about frequency or activities to make the answer richer.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially for my morning walk and weekend picnics with family. Because it is peaceful and close to my home, I often meet neighbours there and sometimes play frisbee with friends on Sundays.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear direct response, then give a concise reason with specific comparisons. Avoid vague phrasing and repetition (e.g., “hometown” used repeatedly).

Ví dụ: Not really — our town already has a very large park that meets our needs. Since the population is small, one big green space is sufficient for walking, sports and community events.

Gợi ý: Give a clear, specific example of a park you want to visit and explain why. Avoid unclear references and grammatical errors. Use linking words to explain reasons or plans.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit Millennium Park in Chicago because I enjoy modern urban parks with public art and concerts. I hope to travel there next year to see the Cloud Gate sculpture and attend an outdoor music event.

× It's quite a large park with some. Slides and all, and there was also a space to.

✓ It's quite a large park with some slides and other facilities, and there was also a space to relax.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains punctuation errors ('some.' then 'Slides'). This is a sentence structure issue: fragments and misplaced periods interrupt meaning. Combine fragments, lowercase 'slides', and add a clear purpose phrase ('space to relax') to complete the thought and make the sentence grammatically correct.

× Surely I am still going to park for morning walk and to spend some time with my friends and my family.

✓ Yes, I still go to the park for a morning walk and to spend time with my friends and family.

Use simple present for habitual actions ('I still go') rather than present continuous with adverbs of frequency. Add the definite article 'the' before 'park' and remove redundant 'my' before 'family' for natural English.

× It's quite a peaceful place in my hometown where I can spend time with my friends, my neighbors and my parents.

✓ It's quite a peaceful place in my hometown where I can spend time with my friends, neighbors, and parents.

Prepositions are acceptable, but the sentence is improved by removing unnecessary possessive 'my' before 'neighbors' and 'parents' for naturalness and adding the Oxford comma for clarity. This falls under preposition/word choice and style.

× Not really, because in my hometown there are not many people here, just some few people who live in an hometown.

✓ Not really, because there are not many people in my hometown; only a few people live there.

The phrase 'some few' is incorrect; use 'a few' or 'only a few'. Also replace 'an hometown' with 'my hometown' and correct word order for natural English. This is a quantifier and article usage issue.

× So I feel like in my hometown, the park was so enormous, so it's quite good for us.

✓ I feel that the park in my hometown is very large, so it is a great place for us.

Mixed tenses and awkward connectors create a sentence structure problem. Use present tense 'is' to match the ongoing state, avoid repeating 'so', and replace 'enormous' with 'very large' or keep 'enormous' if preferred; clarify the result clause for coherence.

× I love travelling and parks, so absolutely in the future I want to go to Ms. one hour where I have not yet, so I am quite interested in adventures in all.

✓ I love traveling and parks, so in the future I definitely want to visit many parks I have not been to yet; I am very interested in new adventures.

The original sentence is fragmented, contains unclear phrases ('Ms. one hour where I have not yet') and repeated connectors. This is a sentence structure and clarity issue. Replace unclear fragments with 'visit many parks I have not been to yet', use 'definitely' for emphasis, and simplify the final clause for clarity.