Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be concise, correct grammar, and use a clear topic sentence followed by one specific supporting detail. Avoid unnecessary words and fix verb forms and prepositions (e.g., “brought” → “bring” is wrong; use “we would bring” or “we often took my cousins with us”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. My mother often took me to a park near her office, and sometimes we would bring my cousins along, which made the visits more fun.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct, natural response and give one clear reason with a linking word. Avoid wordy phrases like “If you were to ask my current self now.” Use correct collocations (e.g., “greenery” or “green spaces” instead of “seeing greens”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I’m a nature lover, and being around greenery calms me and helps me relax.

Gợi ý: Give a direct answer, then one or two specific reasons using linking words. Remove fillers (“uh”) and correct grammar (e.g., “only a handful of parks”, “the city is very urban”, “it mostly has buildings”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I would, because our city has only a handful of parks and is very urban, so adding more green spaces would improve air quality and give people places to relax.

Gợi ý: Reply directly and name the park clearly (e.g., Central Park). Give a concise reason with a linking word and a specific image or activity to make it vivid. Avoid vague phrases like “the central part in New York City.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I’d love to visit Central Park in New York City because I’ve seen it in many films, and I imagine walking along the tree-lined paths and visiting the ponds and open lawns.

× So back when I was a child, my mother and I frequently went to parks because one of the parks in the city is near her office and sometimes we would brought my cousins with it.

✓ So back when I was a child, my mother and I frequently went to parks because one of the parks in the city was near her office and sometimes we would bring my cousins with us.

Two issues: (1) 'is near her office' should be past tense 'was near her office' to match 'back when I was a child' (consistency of past tense). (2) 'we would brought' is incorrect because 'would' is followed by the base form of the verb; use 'would bring' or simply 'brought'. Also 'with it' is unnatural for people — use 'with us'. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout narrative and use correct verb forms after modal 'would'.

× If you were to ask my current self now, I would say yes. I totally love going to parks since I found out that I am a nature lover and seeing greens in my surroundings calms me.

✓ If you were to ask me now, I would say yes. I totally love going to parks since I found out that I am a nature lover, and seeing greenery in my surroundings calms me.

'My current self' is wordy and unnatural; use 'me now'. 'Seeing greens' is unidiomatic — use 'seeing greenery' or 'greenery' and add a comma before the conjunction. Tenses are acceptable, but 'seeing greenery... calms me' is present simple describing a general truth. Keep concise subject phrasing for clarity.

× Yes, I totally love to since our city has only handful of parks and uh, the city is urban and there aren't really so many parks in there and it's always have a city buildings.

✓ Yes, I totally do, since our city has only a handful of parks. The city is urban, and there aren't many parks there, and it always has city buildings.

Several issues: 'love to' is incomplete — better 'love to' followed by a verb or say 'love it' or 'I do'. 'Only handful' needs an article: 'a handful'. 'There aren't really so many parks in there' is awkward; simplify to 'there aren't many parks there'. 'It's always have a city buildings' mixes tenses and number: use 'it always has city buildings' or better 'it is mostly full of buildings'. Corrections address pluralization ('a handful', 'buildings') and subject-verb agreement.

× Totally. And one of them, in my mind, is the central part in New York City. I've always seen it in the movies and series that I've watched, and I can imagine myself walking in there.

✓ Totally. One of them, in my mind, is Central Park in New York City. I've always seen it in movies and TV series, and I can imagine myself walking there.

'The central part in New York City' is vague; likely meant 'Central Park'. 'In the movies and series that I've watched' is wordy — use 'in movies and TV series'. 'Walking in there' is unidiomatic; use 'walking there'. Also 'TV series' instead of just 'series' clarifies meaning. These changes correct preposition use and improve pronoun/reference clarity.