Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Make your answer more direct and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "the kind person" and use plural or specific examples.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they made me feel relaxed. For example, I enjoyed walking under the trees and playing on the swings with my friends, which helped me forget about school for a while.

Gợi ý: Give a clearer, grammatically correct response and use linking words to connect reasons. Replace unclear phrases like "comfort lots of difficulties myself" with precise descriptions of pressures. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences).

Ví dụ: Not really. As a university student I am often busy and stressed because of heavy coursework and exams, so I have less time to visit parks. However, I sometimes go for a short walk to clear my mind when I feel overwhelmed.

Gợi ý: Clarify your main idea and correct incorrect word choices. Begin with a direct opinion, then give a specific reason. Use linking words (for example, however) and avoid contradictory or unclear statements. Mention realistic place (city, neighbourhood) instead of "hotel."

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space and places for people to relax. For example, new parks near residential areas would give families and students a nearby place to exercise and unwind.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear answer and explain briefly with specific reasons. Use correct grammar and linking words. If you don't plan to visit parks, explain why (e.g., prefer studying at home, limited time) instead of vague phrasing like "leave my bedroom alone."

Ví dụ: Not really. Although parks are nice, I usually prefer staying at home to study and relax because I can concentrate better. If I have free time, I might visit a nearby park to get fresh air, but it's not something I plan often.

× Yes, I really feel comfortable and relaxed because of its environment and the kind person.

✓ Yes, I really felt comfortable and relaxed because of the environment and the kind people.

Pronoun 'its' is incorrect because 'parks' is plural and should be referred to with 'the' or 'their'; context asks about childhood (past), so past tense 'felt' is appropriate. 'the kind person' should be 'the kind people' or 'kind people' because parks are associated with many people, not a single undefined person. Suggestion: use correct pronoun or article and match number and tense (e.g., 'I really felt comfortable and relaxed because of the environment and kind people').

× Not exactly because I'm a university student now and I need to comfort lots of difficulties myself, for example the pressure of study and so forth.

✓ Not exactly, because I'm a university student now and I need to cope with many difficulties myself, for example study pressure, and so forth.

The verb 'comfort' is incorrect in this context; use 'cope with' to express handling difficulties. 'Lots of' with 'difficulties' is informal; 'many difficulties' is better. 'the pressure of study' should be 'study pressure' or 'the pressure of studying.' Maintain present tense 'I'm' and use appropriate verbs. Suggestion: replace 'comfort' with 'cope with' and use 'many difficulties' or 'a lot of difficulties.'

× To be honest, I really hope that many old parks are built in my hotel.

✓ To be honest, I really hope that many old parks will be built near my home.

'Are built' is present passive but the speaker expresses a hope about the future; use 'will be built' for future passive. 'in my hotel' is incorrect location; likely 'near my home' or 'in my neighborhood.' Also 'old parks' may be intended as 'more parks' or 'restored old parks.' Suggestion: use future passive 'will be built' and correct the location phrase.

× In the other hands, it actually brings me a few of comfortable.

✓ On the other hand, it actually brings me a little comfort.

Phrase 'In the other hands' is incorrect; correct idiom is 'On the other hand.' 'it actually brings me a few of comfortable' is ungrammatical: use 'brings me a little comfort' or 'makes me somewhat comfortable.' 'a few' pairs with countable nouns; 'comfort' is uncountable, so use 'a little.' Suggestion: use idiomatic connectors and match quantifier to noun type.

× No, also the parks have lots of advantage but just I leave my bedroom alone I will feel happy.

✓ No. Although parks have many advantages, I feel happy simply by leaving my bedroom and going out on my own.

The original is ungrammatical and has wrong word order and connectors. 'also' misplaced; use 'Although' to contrast. 'lots of advantage' should be 'many advantages.' 'just I leave my bedroom alone I will feel happy' needs reordering: 'I feel happy simply by leaving my bedroom' or 'just by leaving my bedroom I feel happy.' Suggestion: restructure sentence for clarity, use correct plural 'advantages' and correct adverb placement 'simply' or 'just by.'