Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is natural and relevant, but it is slightly long and contains some redundancy (e.g., “do our games there and do other fun stuff”). To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., “play games” rather than “do our games” and “activities” instead of “fun stuff”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents often took my siblings and me there after school and on weekends, where we would play football and ride bicycles. Those regular visits helped me develop a lifelong love of outdoor activities.

Gợi ý: The answer is direct and clear but brief and could be improved with a reason and a contrast for coherence. Use linking words (e.g., “because,” “however”) and add a specific example of what you prefer doing at home to make it more vivid. Avoid passive phrasing like “don't really think that I enjoy.”

Ví dụ: Not so much now, because I prefer quiet time at home. For example, I often read or listen to music in my room, which helps me relax after work, whereas parks can feel busy and noisy.

Gợi ý: Good direct response but a little wordy and repetitive (“I don't think I want another one added” and “I think those suffice”). Improve by using a concise topic sentence, then give one specific reason and, if possible, a brief suggestion or comparison. Use precise vocabulary like “sufficient” and “recreational needs.”

Ví dụ: No, I don't think more parks are necessary. There are already plenty, and they meet the recreational needs of most residents; instead, the city could focus on maintaining existing parks and improving facilities like benches and restrooms.

Gợi ý: The answer is honest but vague and contains informal language (“per SE”, “wanna”). To improve, be specific: if you cannot name a park, mention the type of park or country you’d like to visit and why. Use formal phrasing and link ideas with words like “however” or “but.”

Ví dụ: I can't name a specific famous park at the moment, but I would like to visit national parks abroad, for example in New Zealand or Canada, because I enjoy hiking and seeing dramatic natural scenery.

× In fact, my parents used to bring my siblings and me to a park to play after our classes or during weekends so we can do our games there and do other fun stuff.

✓ In fact, my parents used to bring my siblings and me to a park to play after our classes or during weekends so we could play games there and do other fun stuff.

The sentence mixes past habitual 'used to' with present modal 'can'. When describing past routines, use past modal 'could' or past simple to maintain consistent tense. Replace 'so we can do our games' with 'so we could play games' for tense consistency and more natural phrasing.

× Now that I'm in my late 20s, I don't really think that I enjoy going to parks anymore.

✓ Now that I'm in my late 20s, I don't really enjoy going to parks anymore.

Using 'don't really think that I enjoy' is wordy and awkward. The present simple negative 'don't really enjoy' expresses the speaker's current preference more directly and matches the present time frame.

× In the city where I live, there are a lot of parks already, so I don't think I want another one added because I think those suffice the purpose of being an avenue of fun and entertainment for people who love outdoors.

✓ In the city where I live, there are already a lot of parks, so I don't think I want another one added because I think they serve the purpose of providing a place for fun and entertainment for people who love the outdoors.

Several issues: word order ('already a lot of parks' is more natural than 'a lot of parks already'), 'those suffice the purpose' is incorrect phrasing — use 'they serve the purpose' or 'they suffice' without 'the purpose'. 'Being an avenue of' is awkward; use 'providing a place for'. Also 'people who love outdoors' needs the definite article 'the outdoors'. These are prepositional and article/preposition usage problems.

× Honestly, I'm not really familiar with parks worldwide per SE, so I don't think I can say or name a specific park I wanna go to, but I want to explore more outdoors.

✓ Honestly, I'm not really familiar with parks worldwide per se, so I don't think I can name a specific park I want to go to, but I want to explore the outdoors more.

Use lowercase 'per se' and no abbreviation 'SE'. 'Wanna' is colloquial; use 'want to'. 'Explore more outdoors' is awkward; use 'explore the outdoors more' to include the definite article. These are errors in idiomatic usage and article use.