Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words like “umm” and correct tense and article errors (e.g. “when I was a child,” “in the park,” “different things”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to the park when I was a child because it was a chance to spend quality time with my parents. For example, we would explore different areas of the park and play on the swings, which made those afternoons memorable.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence and finish your thought. Use specific reasons and linkers (for example, “because,” “so,” “therefore”). Remove fillers and use more appropriate adjectives (e.g. “refreshing” and “relaxing” instead of “mind blowing”). Complete sentences and correct verb forms are important.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are relaxing and help me unwind. For instance, I often meet friends there to chat and take a short walk, which reduces my stress and improves my mood.

Gợi ý: Answer directly with one clear reason and a specific supporting detail. Fix grammar (e.g. “more parks,” “because parks are good for exercise or picnics”) and avoid unclear phrases (“for phone”). Use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because parks provide space for exercise and family picnics. For example, additional green areas would encourage people to jog, play sports, or meet friends outdoors.

Gợi ý: Be specific about the park and give concise details about what you would do there. Use coherent linking words (“for example,” “also”) and avoid repetitive phrases. Correct collocations (e.g. “brand-new park,” “relax there”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I want to visit a brand-new park in the city that I’ve heard is very popular. For example, I would relax there with friends, buy some food from nearby stalls, walk along the paths, and enjoy the peaceful atmosphere.

× Yes, I used to like going to the park when I was child because it is a way to umm, it is a way to involve with our parents and spend the time with our parents and we can explore in park on different thing.

✓ Yes, I used to like going to the park when I was a child because it was a way to be involved with my parents, spend time with them, and explore different things in the park.

Errors: missing article before 'child' (article error, ID 22), incorrect tense consistency ('is' should be 'was' to match past 'used to' — present tense issue ID 6), incorrect verb phrase 'involve with' (incorrect use of prepositions/verb form ID 11 and 8), awkward repetition and word order. Suggestion: add 'a' before 'child', change 'is a way' to 'was a way' to maintain past tense, use 'be involved with' rather than 'involve with', replace 'spend the time with our parents' with 'spend time with them', and move 'in the park' to the end: 'explore different things in the park'.

× Yes, I really like to uh, go park now as well umm, because it is very refreshing and mind blowing.

✓ Yes, I really like to go to the park now as well because it is very refreshing and mind-blowing.

Errors: missing preposition 'to' before 'the park' (preposition/article issues ID 11 and 17), 'mind blowing' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective 'mind-blowing' (adjective use ID 13). Suggestion: add 'to the' before 'park' and use hyphenated compound adjective; keep present tense 'like' and 'is' consistent.

× Umm I really hang out with my parents and friends because it uh gives me inner peace and umm it reduce my.

✓ I usually hang out with my parents and friends because it gives me inner peace and reduces my stress.

Errors: subject-verb agreement 'it reduce' should be 'it reduces' (subject-verb agreement ID 27/third person singular ID 2), incomplete sentence 'reduce my.' missing object (sentence structure error ID 26). Also 'really hang out' is acceptable but 'usually' clarifies frequency. Suggestion: supply the object 'stress' (or 'anxiety') and fix verb to 'reduces'.

× Yes, I really like to see more park in my city because it park is very good for our our exercise or picnic and for phone as well.

✓ Yes, I would really like to see more parks in my city because parks are very good for exercise, picnics, and for taking photos as well.

Errors: 'see more park' should be plural 'more parks' (singular/plural issue ID 1), missing articles and awkward repetition 'it park is' (article/structure ID 17 and 26), repeated 'our' (pronoun error ID 12), 'for phone' unclear—likely 'for photos' (word choice/adjective ID 13). Suggestion: use plural 'parks', restructure sentence to 'parks are very good for exercise, picnics, and taking photos', and remove repeated words.

× So I really excited to see in my.

✓ So I am really excited to see them in my city.

Errors: missing verb 'am' (sentence without a verb ID 23/present tense issue ID 6), incomplete phrase 'to see in my' missing object 'city' (sentence structure ID 26). Suggestion: include the verb 'am' and specify 'them' (the parks) and 'in my city'.

× Yes, I really want to go in the future or park, which is a brand new counterpart.

✓ Yes, I really want to visit a new park in the future, which is a brand-new development.

Errors: 'go in the future or park' is confusing and missing articles (article errors ID 22), 'counterpart' is incorrectly used (word choice/adjective ID 13). Suggestion: use 'visit a new park' and replace 'counterpart' with 'development' or 'attraction' and hyphenate 'brand-new'.

× It is very famous and we can chill there and have something to eat, go for a walk and we can also gossip about our favorite topics and we can really enjoy there and it is very peaceful.

✓ It is very well known, and we can relax there, eat, go for a walk, talk about our favorite topics, and really enjoy the peaceful atmosphere.

Errors: 'famous' is acceptable but 'well known' fits conversational context (adjective choice ID 13), repetitive 'we can' and awkward 'gossip about' formality, and incorrect adverb placement 'really enjoy there' (adverb/place order ID 20). Suggestion: simplify and vary verbs, place 'really' before 'enjoy', and use 'peaceful atmosphere' for natural phrasing.