Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: ปรับให้ประโยคเป็นธรรมชาติและลำดับความคิดชัดเจน: พูดตอบตรงคำถามด้วยประโยคหัวเรื่อง แล้วอธิบายรายละเอียดที่สอดคล้องและเป็นรูปธรรม ใช้คำเชื่อมอย่างง่ายเมื่อจำเป็น และหลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่ชัดเจนหรือคำศัพท์พลาด เช่น "putting out pets" หรือวลีที่ไม่สื่อความหมาย ควรจำกัดความยาวไม่เกิน 4–5 ประโยค

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I often went there with my family and our neighbor Maria. My parents would bring our dog, and we enjoyed watching birds and playing on the grass together.

Gợi ý: ทำให้สั้น กระชับ และเป็นธรรมชาติ: ตอบตรงคำถามแล้วให้เหตุผลหรือกิจกรรมที่ทำในสวนอย่างชัดเจน หลีกเลี่ยงประโยคที่สับสนหรือคำที่ไม่เหมาะสม ใช้ linking words เช่น "because" หรือ "to" เพื่อเชื่อมเหตุผลและผลลัพธ์

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are peaceful and good for exercise. I often visit a nearby park to walk, stretch, and relax after work.

Gợi ý: ชี้เหตุผลและข้อเสนอแนะให้ชัดเจน: ตอบด้วยเหตุผลที่จับต้องได้ เช่น แก้ปัญหาความเครียด ส่งเสริมกิจกรรมกลางแจ้ง และเสนอแนวทางที่ชัด เช่น การมีส่วนร่วมของชุมชน ใช้คำเชื่อม (e.g., "because", "so", "for example") และหลีกเลี่ยงวลีไม่ชัดเจน

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in the city because they help people relax and reduce stress. For example, parks give employees a place to exercise during lunch breaks. I also think local communities should help design these parks to make them more useful for everyone.

Gợi ý: ทำให้คำตอบชัดเจนและสมเหตุสมผล: ระบุสถานที่หรือเหตุผลที่ชัด เช่น ต้องการไปสวนที่เชื่อมกับธรรมชาติหรือมีกิจกรรมพิเศษ หลีกเลี่ยงคำฟุ่มเฟือยและคำที่ไม่เข้าใจ ควรใช้ประโยคหัวเรื่องแล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดสั้นๆ

Ví dụ: Yes. In the future I would like to visit a large urban park that is connected to a nature corridor. I imagine a place with walking trails, community gardens and public spaces where people can relax and join outdoor events.

× Yes I did.

✓ Yes, I did.

The sentence is a short answer and is grammatically correct but needs a comma after 'Yes' for standard written punctuation and clarity.

× Since I was a child.

✓ Since I was a child, I used to go to parks.

The original fragment 'Since I was a child.' is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb and clear connection to the rest of the idea. It should be combined with a main clause (e.g., 'I used to go to parks') or rewritten as a complete sentence to convey the intended meaning.

× I went to the park with Maria with my family.

✓ I went to the park with Maria and my family.

Using 'with' twice is awkward and creates an unclear structure. Use 'and' to coordinate the two noun phrases 'Maria' and 'my family' so the meaning is clear.

× My dad and my mom were putting out pets and we are trying to keep girls without a pair of specialists and enjoy watching birds together.

✓ My dad and my mom had pets, and we used to go there to watch birds together.

The original contains several incorrect verb choices and tense inconsistencies ('were putting out pets', 'we are trying to keep girls without a pair of specialists' make no clear sense). I corrected to 'had pets' and 'used to go there to watch birds together' to create a logical past-tense description. Remove unclear phrases that do not fit context.

× There's anything to call.

✓ There isn't much to say.

'There's anything to call' is ungrammatical. The speaker likely meant 'there isn't much to say' or 'there's nothing to call it.' Use 'there isn't much to say' to express lack of notable features.

× So I think, I think parks are assigned how much people in government hearing about adversity and definitely the idea of the screening of public spaces.

✓ So I think parks depend on how much attention the government gives to public spaces and how they plan them.

The original sentence is very unclear and contains awkward phrasing ('assigned how much people in government hearing about adversity', 'screening of public spaces'). I rephrased to a clear idea: parks depend on government attention and planning. This fixes word choice and sentence structure.

× So I often visit them to the relax and exercise.

✓ So I often visit them to relax and exercise.

The article 'the' before 'relax' is unnecessary. After 'to' (infinitive marker), use the base verb 'relax' rather than 'the relax'. Use 'to relax and exercise' to indicate purpose.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because I think of employees overcome and help people relax.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because they help people relax and reduce stress for workers.

Original 'I think of employees overcome' is ungrammatical and unclear. Rewriting clarifies the intended meaning: parks help people relax and reduce stress for employees. This fixes verb choice and sentence structure.

× I would also like the community to be involved in designing them into the spaces, not developments, and encourage more outdoor activities.

✓ I would also like the community to be involved in designing them as public spaces rather than as developments, and to encourage more outdoor activities.

Use 'involved in designing them as public spaces' instead of 'into the spaces'. Also parallel structure requires 'to encourage' or 'and encourage' aligned with 'to be involved'; I used 'and to encourage' for clarity.

× It would be great if I can visit the park inside one umm, get off at 35 nearby together and it's connected with the nature corridor with the urban food council and PS3 public space that did not get French so everyone can come inside here.

✓ It would be great if I could visit a park nearby that is connected to a nature corridor, with community gardens and public spaces that everyone can access.

Use 'could' after 'It would be great if' to express a hypothetical (correct modal verb). The original sentence is rambling and contains unclear fragments ('get off at 35', 'PS3 public space that did not get French'). I simplified to a coherent, grammatical sentence describing a desirable park connected to nature and accessible to everyone.