Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Make the tense consistent, organise into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details, avoid repetition, and use linking words. For example, start with a concise statement about liking parks as a child, then add specific activities and an emotional reason. Also correct grammar (e.g., 'When I was a child', 'seesaw with my friends', 'my mother and father').

Ví dụ: When I was a child, I loved going to parks. For example, I often played on the seesaw with my friends and walked around with my mother and father, which made me feel safe and loved.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons using linking words, and correct grammar and word forms. Avoid repeating the same idea twice; use words like 'because' or 'so' to link ideas smoothly. Improve vocabulary: 'adult', 'busy', 'nostalgic', 'spend time'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they remind me of happy childhood memories. Since I am busy with work now and rarely see friends, I go to parks to relax and sometimes meet people, which helps me feel more connected.

Gợi ý: Answer directly, then support with specific reasons and avoid irrelevant details. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'some parks are far from my home') and linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so'). Don't mention unnecessary personal logistics unless it explains accessibility. Limit to 1–2 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because many parks are currently far from where I live, so having more local parks would make it easier for families and children to visit regularly.

Gợi ý: Keep the answer relevant to parks and be specific. Start with a clear statement naming the place, then give one concise reason. Correct grammar and phrase choice (e.g., 'visit Paris', 'see the Eiffel Tower', 'propose to my girlfriend'). Avoid mixing unrelated ideas like 'my future work'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to visit the parks in Paris in the future. For instance, I want to stroll near the Champ de Mars and see the Eiffel Tower, and I hope to share that special moment with my girlfriend when I propose.

× When I'm a child, I like going to park because there's a lot of people and I love playing seesaw with my friend and also I love walking around in the park with my mommy and my mother and father because I feel loved from them.

✓ When I was a child, I liked going to parks because there were a lot of people and I loved playing on the seesaw with my friend, and I also loved walking around the park with my mother and father because I felt loved by them.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly; the time reference is 'as a child' which requires past tense (was, liked, loved, felt). 'When I'm a child' should be 'When I was a child'. 'A lot of people' requires plural verb 'there were'. 'Going to park' should be 'going to parks' or 'going to the park'; 'playing seesaw' needs the correct preposition 'playing on the seesaw'. 'Mommy and my mother and father' is redundant; use 'my mother and father' or 'my parents'. 'Feel loved from them' is incorrect voice and preposition; use 'felt loved by them'. Use consistent past tense throughout. Suggestion: Keep the past tense for all verbs when talking about childhood, use correct prepositions and avoid redundancy.

× Yes I like going to park now even I am adult because park give me my memories as a child with my friends and family because for now I'm busy in the world and no time with my friend. That's what I love to going to park.

✓ Yes, I like going to parks now even though I am an adult because parks give me memories of my childhood with friends and family. Right now I am busy and I have no time with my friends. That's why I love going to parks.

The sentence has tense and grammar issues: 'even I am adult' should be 'even though I am an adult'. Use plural 'parks' or 'the park' consistently. 'Park give me' needs subject-verb agreement: 'parks give me'. 'My memories as a child' is better as 'memories of my childhood'. 'For now I'm busy in the world and no time with my friend' is ungrammatical; use 'Right now I am busy and I have no time with my friends'. 'I love to going to park' mixes infinitive and -ing; use 'I love going to parks'. Suggestion: Use 'even though' for contrast, ensure subject-verb agreement, use correct noun forms and prepositions, and keep consistent plurality.

× Yes, I like to see more parks in my city because some park is is far, far from my home. But today I can go there because I have a vehicle to ride and I have a girlfriend to join with me. That's it.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because some parks are far from my home. Now I can go there because I have a vehicle and my girlfriend can join me.

Use of articles and number is incorrect: 'some park is is far' should be 'some parks are far' (plural subject and correct verb form). 'To ride' after vehicle is unnecessary; say 'I have a vehicle'. 'I have a girlfriend to join with me' is awkward; use 'my girlfriend can join me' or 'my girlfriend joins me'. 'That's it' is colloquial and unnecessary in a formal response. Ensure subject-verb agreement and avoid repeated words ('is is'). Suggestion: Use plural nouns when referring to multiple parks, match verb number, and use clearer phrasing for accompaniment.

× Yes, I like to go in the future in Paris. I want to walk an Eiffel Tower and give a proposal to my girlfriend, my future work and because I feel so, so happy if I'm doing that.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to Paris in the future. I want to walk to the Eiffel Tower and propose to my girlfriend because I would feel very happy doing that.

Tense and phrasing errors: 'I like to go in the future in Paris' should be 'I would like to go to Paris in the future' (conditional/future preference). 'Walk an Eiffel Tower' is incorrect; use 'walk to the Eiffel Tower' or 'walk around the Eiffel Tower'. 'Give a proposal to my girlfriend' should be 'propose to my girlfriend'. 'My future work' is unclear and likely incorrect here; remove it. 'Because I feel so, so happy if I'm doing that' mixes tenses and is awkward; use 'because I would feel very happy doing that'. Suggestion: Use 'would like' for polite future desires, correct prepositions ('to Paris', 'to the Eiffel Tower'), and use 'propose' for engagement. Keep conditional or future forms consistent.