Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers ("umm"), correct tense and word order, and add one specific detail with a linking word. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child. I went there every day after school to play with friends and walk around the lake, which made me feel relaxed. Because the park was close to my home, it was easy to visit frequently.

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and sentence structure. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons linked with connectors (e.g., "because", "so"). Avoid repetition and correct verb forms and articles.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks. I go there often because walking in the fresh air helps me relax after long study sessions or a busy workday, and the greenery makes me feel refreshed.

Gợi ý: Use a clearer topic sentence and more natural phrasing. Avoid fillers and organize reasons with linking words ("because", "for example"). Add a specific example or consequence to make the answer more concrete.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide peaceful places for people to relax and exercise. For example, more neighborhood parks would encourage residents to walk or jog regularly, which would improve public health.

Gợi ý: Begin with a full sentence naming the park, then explain why with correct grammar and linking words. Be specific about what attracts you (scenery, wildlife, facilities) and avoid vague or incorrect phrases like "animals reservation."

Ví dụ: I would like to visit Kung Fu National Park in the future. I read about it in a newspaper article about environmental protection, and it attracted me because of its picturesque landscapes, diverse wildlife reserves, and scenic hiking trails.

× Parks are one of the favorite place that I really want to visit every day.

✓ Parks are one of the favorite places that I really want to visit every day.

The noun 'place' should be plural 'places' to match 'one of the' which requires a plural noun after it. Suggestion: use 'places' when using 'one of the' + plural noun.

× Whenever I'm I have nothing to do or I'm stressful after exams or long time starting working.

✓ Whenever I have nothing to do or feel stressed after exams or a long time starting work, I go to the park.

This sentence has incorrect verb forms and redundant 'I'm'. Use simple present 'I have' for habitual situations. Use 'feel stressed' instead of 'I'm stressful' because 'stressful' describes something that causes stress; use 'stressed' to describe a person. 'Starting working' is ungrammatical; 'starting work' or 'after starting work' is correct. Also add articles where needed ('a long time').

× A thing that parks are public places for everyone to enjoy peaceful area, uh harmony with nature and recharge their energy.

✓ The thing is that parks are public places for everyone to enjoy peaceful areas, harmony with nature, and to recharge their energy.

Use definite article 'the' to introduce 'thing' in this context. 'Peaceful area' should be plural 'peaceful areas' to match 'places', and parallel structure requires 'and to recharge' or 'and recharge' consistently. Also insert 'is that' for clear clause structure.

× Parks also have many trees, provide good air quality and help people stay healthy.

✓ Parks also have many trees, provide good air quality, and help people stay healthy.

This sentence is largely correct but needs a comma before the coordinating conjunction for clarity (serial comma). No grammatical number error, but kept under singular/plural category as trees/parks agreement is correct; main suggestion: add comma for parallel list clarity.

× Kung Fu National Park, I first saw it in a newspaper article wrote about the Environmental Protection.

✓ Kung Fu National Park: I first saw it in a newspaper article that wrote about environmental protection.

The original mixes structures. Use a relative clause 'article that wrote about' or better 'an article about environmental protection.' Also 'Environmental Protection' should be lowercased unless it's a formal name. Suggestion: 'I first saw it in an article about environmental protection.'

× It really catch my attention about beautiful sceneries, picturesque landscape and animals reservation.

✓ It really caught my attention because of the beautiful scenery, picturesque landscapes, and wildlife reserves.

Use past tense 'caught' because the sighting happened in the past. 'Sceneries' is usually 'scenery' (uncountable) and 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' for a list. 'Animals reservation' is incorrect; use 'wildlife reserves' or 'animal reserves.' Also use 'because of' to connect cause and effect.

× I went there every day after school to play with my friends, enjoying peaceful nature, umm fresh atmosphere and walk around the lake.

✓ I went there every day after school to play with my friends, enjoying the peaceful nature, the fresh atmosphere, and walking around the lake.

Maintain parallel gerund forms after 'enjoying': 'enjoying... and walking' to match structure. Also add definite articles 'the' for 'peaceful nature' and 'fresh atmosphere.' Use 'walking' instead of 'walk' to keep parallel -ing forms.

× It really catch my attention about beautiful sceneries, picturesque landscape and animals reservation.

✓ It really caught my attention with its beautiful scenery, picturesque landscapes, and wildlife reservations.

Aside from tense change to 'caught', if using present 'it really catches my attention' requires third person singular 'catches'. Also 'catch my attention about' is awkward; use 'catch my attention with' or 'attracted me because of.' Adjust nouns as noted earlier.

× I also go to the park to enjoy fresh air and go for a walk.

✓ I also go to the park to enjoy the fresh air and to go for a walk.

Add definite article 'the' before 'fresh air' and maintain parallel infinitive form 'to enjoy... and to go' for balance. This clarifies the actions.

× This near this.

✓ This is near there.

The original fragment 'This near this' is ungrammatical. Likely intended to say 'This is near there' or 'This is nearby.' Add the verb 'is' and correct demonstrative/adverb: 'there' or 'nearby.'