Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is generally relevant and gives personal details, but it is a little long-winded and has some language inaccuracies (e.g. “close garden/park,” “in touch till now”) and unclear phrasing. To improve, make the topic sentence clear, reduce redundancy, correct vocabulary (use “near” instead of “close” for location), and add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Aim for 2–4 concise sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents often took me to a small park near our house where I rode my bike and played football with several neighbourhood friends. In fact, I’m still in touch with some of those friends today.

Gợi ý: This response communicates the idea but contains unclear phrases and several errors (garbled phrase “agile tear down find myself,” repetition, and word form issues). To improve, start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add a specific condition and an example. Use appropriate linking words like “because” and “however,” and avoid repetition.

Ví dụ: I don’t go to parks as often as I used to because I’m busy with work. However, I still enjoy visiting when I’m with close friends and we can find a quiet, uncrowded park where we can relax without interruptions.

Gợi ý: Good direct answer with clear reasons and specific detail (number estimate). Improve by tightening language, fixing grammar (singular/plural, articles), and using linking words to make the cause-effect clearer. Also add a brief suggestion of what kind of parks would help.

Ví dụ: Yes, definitely. There are fewer than five public parks in my city, so the existing ones are often overcrowded. As a result, people can’t relax there; I would welcome more small, well-maintained parks with seating and green spaces.

Gợi ý: Your answer shows personal interest and a vivid image, but it’s unclear (name of the park is incorrect) and ends abruptly. To improve, state the park name accurately (e.g. Jardin du Luxembourg) and explain specifically why you want to visit, using one or two descriptive reasons and a linking phrase. Finish with a complete sentence.

Ví dụ: I’d love to visit the Jardin du Luxembourg in Paris. From pictures, the green metal chairs and peaceful layout look very soothing, and I imagine it would be a great place to read and relax on a sunny afternoon.

× Yes, I did. When I was a child, I regularly went with my parents to a close garden, actually a close park to our house and I played with my bike there and I made a bunch of friends with whom I started playing with the ball, etcetera.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, I regularly went with my parents to a nearby garden, actually a small park near our house, and I rode my bike there and made a bunch of friends with whom I started playing ball, etcetera.

The original sentence uses awkward or incorrect verb choices for past actions (e.g., 'played with my bike' should be 'rode my bike') and redundant phrasing. Use simple past verbs consistently for past habits (went, rode, made, started). Also 'close garden' and 'close park to our house' are unnatural; use 'nearby garden' or 'small park near our house'. Suggestion: keep verbs in simple past for past events and choose natural collocations ('ride a bike', 'play ball').

× And those same friends were still in touch till now.

✓ And those same friends are still in touch now.

The phrase refers to a current ongoing state, so present tense 'are still in touch' is correct rather than past 'were'. 'Till now' suggests continuity up to the present; use 'now' or 'still' with present tense. Suggestion: use present tense for states that continue to the present: 'are still in touch'. Use 'until now' only when implying a change.

× I'll say because of agile tear down find myself going less and less to parks garden, but it's still something that I enjoy when I'm surrounded by the right people, close friends and we go to a less crowded parks when we are not disturbed by the cries of chil children, et cetera.

✓ I'd say that I find myself going less and less to parks and gardens, but it's still something I enjoy when I'm with the right people, close friends, and we go to less crowded parks when we are not disturbed by the cries of children, etcetera.

The original sentence is disfluent and contains incoherent fragments ('agile tear down') and incorrect pluralization ('parks garden', 'a less crowded parks') and misspelling 'chil children'. Correct structure: 'I'd say that I find myself going less and less' expresses habit decrease. Use 'parks and gardens' or 'parks and gardens' for plural. Remove redundant articles: 'less crowded parks' (no 'a'). Suggestion: simplify and reorder: 'I find myself going less and less to parks and gardens, but I still enjoy going with close friends to less crowded parks.'

× So yeah, it's actually a.

✓ So yeah, it's actually enjoyable.

The sentence ends abruptly with an indefinite article 'a' without a noun. Provide the missing noun 'enjoyable' or complete the thought ('a pleasure', 'a nice experience'). Suggestion: finish the sentence with a noun or adjective: 'it's actually enjoyable' or 'it's actually a lot of fun.'

× Yes, definitely. I feel like we do not have a lot of parks and garden in my city.

✓ Yes, definitely. I feel like we do not have a lot of parks and gardens in my city.

'Garden' should be plural to match 'parks' and the intended meaning of multiple green spaces. Use 'gardens' for countable plural. Suggestion: keep parallel structure: 'parks and gardens.'

× We can actually count them on one hand, like maybe less than 5.

✓ We can actually count them on one hand — maybe fewer than five.

Use 'fewer' with countable nouns (parks) instead of 'less'. Also write numbers under ten in words in formal speech: 'five'. Suggestion: say 'fewer than five' for countable items and maintain consistency: 'We can count them on one hand.'

× Therefore they're actually very crowded and you won't really enjoy when you stay there because of the those factors I've cited.

✓ Therefore they're actually very crowded, and you won't really enjoy being there because of those factors I mentioned.

Remove the extra article 'the' before 'those'. Use 'being there' instead of 'when you stay there' for smoother expression. 'I've cited' is unnatural in speech; use 'I mentioned'. Suggestion: 'you won't really enjoy being there because of those factors I mentioned.'

× I know there is a park in France called Le Jardin TE Philippe or the tree to be more precise in Paris.

✓ I know there is a park in France called Le Jardin du Luxembourg, or 'Le Jardin des Tuileries' (to be more precise), in Paris.

The original contains unclear park names ('Le Jardin TE Philippe' and 'the tree') and article problems. Likely confusion about French park names; French parks take definite articles and specific names must be used correctly. Also place 'in Paris' after the name for clarity. Suggestion: verify the correct park name and use it accurately: 'Le Jardin du Luxembourg in Paris.'

× And I don't know if I really like the vibe and the energy it gives on pictures.

✓ And I don't know if I would really like the vibe and the energy it gives in pictures.

When expressing uncertainty about how something experienced in photos would feel in person, use 'would' to indicate conditional or hypothetical preference. Also use 'in pictures' rather than 'on pictures'. Suggestion: say 'I don't know if I would really like the vibe... in pictures.'

× There are like metal chairs that are all green and I don't know when I see the picture I just feel like it's so appeasing and.

✓ There are metal chairs that are all green, and when I see the pictures I just feel like it's so pleasing.

Use 'in the pictures' or 'when I see the pictures' rather than 'when I see the picture'. 'Appeasing' is incorrect in this context; use 'pleasing'. End the sentence fully rather than leaving it hanging. Suggestion: 'There are metal chairs that are all green, and when I see the pictures I just find it very pleasing.'