Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve grammar (past tense consistency), reduce hesitations and repetition, and use one clear topic sentence followed by a specific supporting detail. Replace fillers like “umm” and avoid repeating the same idea. Add a linking word to connect reasons.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I was very energetic and enjoyed running around. For example, I used to meet friends there every weekend and we played games like tag and climbed trees, which kept me active and happy.

Gợi ý: Use correct tense and clearer vocabulary (e.g. ‘greenery’ not ‘visualities’). Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a specific reason and a linking word. Avoid contradictions—use ‘but’ appropriately and limit redundancy.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still like going to parks, but I don't visit them often because I'm usually very busy. However, when I do go, I enjoy the fresh air and greenery, which helps me relax after a stressful week.

Gợi ý: Correct vocabulary and phrasing (“parks”, “district/city”, “refreshed” → “refresh”), and make the argument concise: topic sentence + one clear reason + example. Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘for example.’

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide a nearby place to relax after work. For example, if a small park were within walking distance, people could take short breaks to walk or sit outside and feel refreshed.

Gợi ý: Avoid repetition and use accurate, natural phrasing (‘Central Park in New York’). Begin with a clear statement, then give specific activities and a linking word to explain why it is appealing.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York because it is iconic and beautiful. For instance, I hope to have a picnic there, read a book on the grass and listen to music while enjoying the scenery.

× Yeah, I really like to go to the park when I was a child, umm, because when I was a child I was very energet, energetic and very active.

✓ Yeah, I really liked going to the park when I was a child because I was very energetic and very active.

The sentence mixes present tense 'like' with past time reference 'when I was a child.' Use past tense 'liked' and the gerund 'going' to match past context; fix spelling 'energetic.' Suggestion: use consistent past tense for actions in the past and use gerunds after 'like' when describing habitual actions (e.g., 'liked going').

× So I really like to go to the park and just run around if I could.

✓ So I really liked going to the park and just ran around when I could.

This sentence mixes present 'like' with past context and uses conditional 'if I could.' For past habitual actions, use past tense: 'liked' and 'ran around when I could.' Alternatively use 'used to' or 'would' for repeated past actions (e.g., 'I used to run around').

× Yeah, I really like to go to the park, but I'm too busy now these days, so I can't go.

✓ Yeah, I really like going to the park, but I'm too busy these days, so I can't go.

'Now these days' is redundant; choose one. Use gerund 'going' after 'like' for general present preference. Keep present simple 'I'm too busy' and 'I can't go' for current inability.

× But I really like to go because I could feel the green visualities and some atmospheres of the nature.

✓ But I really like to go because I can enjoy the greenery and the atmosphere of nature.

'Could' suggests past ability; present preference needs 'can' or 'enjoy.' 'Visualities' is not a correct noun; use 'greenery' or 'green views.' 'Some atmospheres of the nature' is unnatural; use 'the atmosphere of nature' and include definite article appropriately. Use present simple for habitual feelings.

× Yeah, I absolutely want to see more part in my city because in DCS we are so tired for working.

✓ Yeah, I absolutely want to see more parks in my city because in DCS we are so tired from working.

'Part' should be plural 'parks.' Preposition 'for working' is incorrect; use 'from working' to indicate cause of tiredness. 'See more parks' fits the meaning of adding more park spaces.

× So if the park is nearby our hometowns or city inside, we could go to the park and get some refreshed.

✓ So if a park is near our hometown or in the city, we could go to it and get refreshed.

Use 'near' instead of 'nearby ... inside.' 'Hometowns or city inside' is confusing; choose singular 'hometown' or rephrase. 'Go to the park' repeated is fine but 'go to it' avoids repetition. 'Get some refreshed' is ungrammatical; use adjective 'get refreshed' or 'feel refreshed.' Also match conditional: 'could' is acceptable for hypothetical present.

× So I really like to, I really hope to.

✓ So I really hope so.

Sentence fragment 'I really like to, I really hope to' is awkward and missing an object after 'hope to.' Better to use 'I really hope so' or 'I really hope that will happen.' This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× I really like to go. I really want to go to the Central Park at the New York, which is in Manhattan.

✓ I would really like to go. I really want to go to Central Park in New York, which is in Manhattan.

'I really like to go' is vague; 'I would really like to go' expresses desire for the future. Use 'Central Park in New York' rather than 'the New York' and do not use 'the' with city names. 'Central Park' does not need 'the' before it when used with 'go to.'

× Yeah, one of my bucket list is to do the picnic at the Central Park and read the book and listen to the music.

✓ Yeah, one item on my bucket list is to have a picnic in Central Park, read a book, and listen to music.

'One of my bucket list is' should be 'one item on my bucket list is' to match singular 'is.' 'Do the picnic' is incorrect; use 'have a picnic' or 'go on a picnic.' Don't use 'the' before 'Central Park' here; use 'in Central Park.' Use indefinite articles 'a book' and no article with 'music.' Also use parallel verbs 'read a book and listen to music.'

× So at the future, I really wanted to go Central Park.

✓ So in the future, I really want to go to Central Park.

Use 'in the future' (not 'at the future') and present simple 'I really want' or 'I would really like' to express future intention; 'wanted' is past and mismatches the time. Add preposition 'to' before 'Central Park.'