Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Give a clear, complete response with correct grammar and avoid repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tenses and pronouns (e.g., "could" instead of "can" for past ability) and remove repeated words.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to the local park with my grandmother when I was a child. For example, she taught me simple exercises like stretching and walking, and she often introduced me to her friends so I could practise talking to other people.

Gợi ý: Make sentences more concise and correct grammar/spelling. Use linking words to connect reasons and provide one specific example of how parks help you. Replace awkward phrases ("weather"→"whether", "one of the lightest kind of exercise"→"one of the easiest forms of exercise").

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. As a dietitian, I often go for a brisk walk after work because it is an easy form of exercise and helps me unwind; for instance, a 30-minute walk clears my mind and boosts my energy for the evening.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with correct grammar and a finishing statement. Avoid sentence fragments and ensure verbs agree with subjects. Use linking words like "because" or "so" for coherence.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because rapid development has reduced green spaces. As a result, many residents lack places to exercise and relax, so building new parks would improve public health and quality of life.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and improve grammar and clarity. Use linking words to add details and ask a succinct follow-up question if appropriate. Replace vague phrases ("a couple of hybrid cats") with precise descriptions, and correct plural/forms ("videos", "impressive").

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit a nature park in Gujarat that I saw in videos. The park impressed me because it protects endangered species and has unique hybrid cats, so I am curious about its conservation methods and the rules visitors must follow.

× 'Yes, I enjoyed visiting local park as a child, especially with with my grandmother.'

✓ 'Yes, I enjoyed visiting the local park as a child, especially with my grandmother.'

'local park' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific park known to the speaker; also there was a duplicated word 'with with'. Remove the duplicate and add 'the'. Suggestion: Use 'the' for specific, previously known places and proofread to remove repeated words.'

× 'She was incredibly good at introducing me the kind of exercise I can do in the park, and she also introduced me to her many friends so that I can develop a good communication skill.'

✓ 'She was incredibly good at introducing me to the kinds of exercise I could do in the park, and she also introduced me to many of her friends so that I could develop good communication skills.'

'introducing me' requires the preposition 'to' before the indirect object; 'the kind' should be plural 'the kinds' when referring to multiple exercises; verb tense should be past 'could' to match 'was' and 'introduced'; 'many of her friends' is the natural word order; 'a good communication skill' is uncountable/plural here so use 'good communication skills'. Suggestion: Ensure correct prepositions after verbs (introduce someone to something), match tense consistently, and use plural/uncountable forms appropriately.'

× 'Being a dietitian I love to do some physical activity especially after my work is over, so going to the park is one of the lightest kind of exercise that I can do daily weather I have enough work or not.'

✓ 'As a dietitian, I like to do some physical activity, especially after my work is over, so going to the park is one of the lightest kinds of exercise that I can do daily whether I have enough work or not.'

'Being a dietitian' is better expressed as 'As a dietitian' for role/context; 'love to do' can be 'like to do' but 'love to do' is acceptable—kept 'like' to sound natural; 'one of the lightest kind' should be 'one of the lightest kinds' (article/number agreement); 'weather' is a misspelling of 'whether'; maintain present habitual tense 'can do' is acceptable but 'do daily' is reordered for natural English. Suggestion: Use 'as' for roles, correct spelling of 'whether', and match singular/plural after 'one of'.'

× 'My city has become overcrowded and most of the green space is consumed by a high riser building in the name of development and people are seriously struggling for parks as well as gardens so that they can do their daily exercise and I hopeful I can have.'

✓ 'My city has become overcrowded and most of the green space has been consumed by high-rise buildings in the name of development, and people are seriously struggling for parks and gardens so that they can do their daily exercise; I hope I will have access to more.'

'is consumed' should be present perfect passive 'has been consumed' to match 'has become'; 'a high riser building' is incorrect—use 'high-rise buildings' plural to match 'most of the green space' being taken by multiple structures; 'as well as' can be simply 'and'; 'I hopeful I can have' is ungrammatical—use 'I hope I will have access to more' to express desire for more parks. Suggestion: Keep consistent tense (present perfect for recent changes), use compound adjectives with hyphen 'high-rise', and use a grammatical clause for expressing hope.'

× 'It helps me to unwind from stress and I feel more energetic.'

✓ 'It helps me unwind from stress, and I feel more energetic.'

'helps me to unwind' is acceptable, but removing 'to' makes it more natural; added a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses. There was no third-person singular verb error in form, but punctuation and style improved. Suggestion: Use concise verb forms and add proper punctuation between independent clauses.'

× 'I'm highly interested to explore Natural Park which is situated in Gujarat.'

✓ 'I'm very interested in exploring the Natural Park, which is situated in Gujarat.'

'interested to explore' should be 'interested in exploring'; 'Natural Park' as a specific place takes 'the' unless it is the official name without 'the'—using 'the Natural Park' is natural; add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which is situated in Gujarat.' Suggestion: Use 'interested in' plus gerund, and include the definite article for named public places when appropriate.'

× 'I saw many video of it and those videos were very impressing and astonishing.'

✓ 'I saw many videos of it, and those videos were very impressive and astonishing.'

'video' should be plural 'videos'; 'impressing' is wrong form—use adjective 'impressive'. 'astonishing' is acceptable as an adjective. Maintain past tense 'saw' is fine. Suggestion: Use correct plural nouns and the adjective form 'impressive' for evaluation.'

× 'And it is renowned for preserving endangered species and a couple of hybrid cats.'

✓ 'It is renowned for preserving endangered species and a couple of hybrid cat species.'

'a couple of hybrid cats' sounds like referring to two individual animals; likely intended 'a couple of hybrid cat species' or 'a couple of hybrid cats' if individual animals; to fit with 'preserving endangered species' better to say 'hybrid cat species.' Suggestion: Clarify whether you mean species or individual animals; keep parallel structure when listing types of wildlife.'

× 'I want to explore that how? What kind of the rule and regulation?'

✓ 'I want to explore that: how it works and what kinds of rules and regulations it has.'

'I want to explore that how?' is ungrammatical word order. Rephrase to 'how it works' or 'how to visit'; 'What kind of the rule and regulation?' should be 'what kinds of rules and regulations'—use plural and correct article placement. Suggestion: Use clear clause order for questions embedded in statements (how + subject + verb) and pluralize and remove unnecessary 'the'.'