Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve grammar, tense consistency and sentence structure. Begin with a clear topic sentence, use past tense for childhood, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail. Link ideas with a simple connector.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks with my family and friends when I was a child. We often played outdoor games such as football and hide-and-seek, and sometimes had picnics on the grass. Because the parks were close to my home, we usually spent entire afternoons there.

Gợi ý: Use present simple for current habits and keep sentences concise. Correct verb forms, remove unnecessary words, and use linking words to explain reason and frequency. Include a specific routine or activity to make the answer concrete.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Because I have a busy schedule during the week, I usually visit a park on weekends to relax and clear my mind. For example, I like to walk for 30 minutes and sit by a pond to read.

Gợi ý: Clarify your position and avoid contradicting yourself. Decide whether you want more parks and explain with reasons using linking words. Keep it short and specific with one or two clear points.

Ví dụ: Actually, I would like to see more parks in my city because many neighbourhoods lack green spaces. For instance, new parks would give children safe places to play and help reduce traffic noise.

Gợi ý: Use correct verb tenses (present/future) and give concise, specific reasons. Mention where it is or what makes it special, and avoid repetition. Use one or two linking words to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit a park called Rose Garden in the future. Several friends and relatives have recommended it because it has a large variety of roses and well-kept flowerbeds, so I want to see the different colours and take photos.

× Yes, when I was child I love to going park with my family, also with my friends.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I loved going to parks with my family and with my friends.

Mixed tenses and missing articles: 'when I was a child' requires the article 'a'. The time clause refers to the past, so use past tense 'loved' not present 'love'. Verb form: 'love to going' is incorrect; after 'loved' use gerund 'going' and include preposition 'to' before 'parks' as 'going to parks'. Use plural 'parks' if referring generally. Suggestion: 'When I was a child I loved going to parks with my family and my friends.'

× We are playing outdoor games like football, hide and seek and we spend time with family also with friends.

✓ We played outdoor games like football and hide-and-seek, and we spent time with our family and friends.

Tense inconsistency: original uses present 'are playing' and 'spend' but the context is past. Place adverbs/phrases correctly: 'also with friends' is awkward; use 'and friends' or 'and with friends'. Use hyphens for 'hide-and-seek' and possessive 'our' with family and friends. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when describing childhood activities.

× Yes, still I like to going parks now because I have a very busy schedule.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now because I have a very busy schedule.

Incorrect verb form: 'like to going' mixes infinitive and gerund; use either 'like to go' or 'like going'. With 'going' keep gerund and include preposition 'to' before 'parks' as 'going to parks'. Also move 'still' to the natural position 'I still like'. Suggestion: 'I still like going to parks now because...'.

× So at the end of the week on the weekend I was going to the park for relaxation of my mind, also refresh my mind I would like.

✓ So at the end of the week, on the weekend, I go to the park to relax and refresh my mind.

Tense: 'I was going' suggests a continuous past habit but context implies a present habitual action; use simple present 'I go'. Word order and phrasing: 'for relaxation of my mind' is unnatural; use 'to relax' or 'to relax and refresh my mind'. 'Also refresh my mind I would like' is ungrammatical and unclear; rephrase to combine purposes. Suggestion: use clear infinitive purpose phrases: 'I go to the park to relax and refresh my mind.'

× No, I don't think so. I would like to see more parks in my city because there are also, uh, many small parks in my city.

✓ No, I don't think so. I wouldn't like to see more parks in my city because there are already many small parks.

Logical/pronominal inconsistency: The student first says 'No, I don't think so' but then says 'I would like to see more parks', which contradicts. Likely intended meaning is 'I would not like' or 'I don't want more' because there are already many. Replace 'also, uh, many small parks in my city' with 'already many small parks' for clarity. Suggestion: ensure pronouns and modal choices match intended meaning: 'I wouldn't like to see more parks because there are already many.'

× Yes, there was a park that I want to go in my future.

✓ Yes, there is a park that I want to go to in the future.

Tense mismatch and preposition: 'was a park' uses past but the desire remains now, so use present 'is a park'. 'want to go in my future' is incorrect phrasing; use 'want to go to in the future' or 'want to visit in the future'. Suggestion: 'There is a park I want to visit in the future.'

× The park name is Rose Garden.

✓ The park's name is Rose Garden.

Possessive structure: English prefers 'The park's name is...' or 'The name of the park is...'. 'The park name' is understandable but less natural. Suggestion: use possessive or 'the name of' construction.

× Many of my friends and my relatives are told me about this park.

✓ Many of my friends and relatives have told me about this park.

Incorrect passive/tense: 'are told me' is ungrammatical. Use present perfect active 'have told me' to indicate they told up to now. Also 'my relatives' -> 'relatives' is sufficient. Suggestion: use correct auxiliary and active voice: 'have told me'.

× There was a very variety of roses so I would like to see the variety of roses also.

✓ There is a wide variety of roses, so I would like to see them.

Tense and noun phrase: 'There was a very variety' is wrong; use 'There is a wide variety of roses' for present existence. 'Very variety' is incorrect collocation; use 'wide variety' or 'a great variety'. 'I would like to see the variety of roses also' is wordy; 'I would like to see them' is concise. Suggestion: use correct collocations 'a wide variety' and matching tense.

× Rose Rose Park.

✓ The park is called Rose Garden (or Rose Park).

Fragment: 'Rose Rose Park' is a fragment and unclear. Provide a full sentence with subject and verb or a clear name: 'The park is called Rose Garden.' Suggestion: avoid fragments; use complete sentences.